Reviews for What's wrong with me?By : ItwasMerlin |
This is the best httyd fic I've read . Please more
plz update
Very, very nice.
Mildew is extremely rare and I'm glad you are writing this. Hope to see the next update soon.
You know, every time i read this i hope it'll end up with something like this
https://pbs.twimg.com/media/EzY2YYEVIAoZlkV?format=jpg&name=large
I accidentally skipped a few chapters of the previous ones and here's what I wanted to say. I like the direction in which the plot went and Astrid's torment looks quite consistent, so we need to build up this detail of the story and constantly put her in a hopeless position, so that she gets even more excited, and her inaccessibility slowly goes away in the coming days.
One more detail. Mildew was part of Drago's army in the last episode of Dragons Race to the Edge, and one more motive could be mentioned - to become Chief Berk and completely subdue Astrid, make her his chieftess, but to be Drago Bludvist's puppet indefinitely.
Interesting having Astrid disobey Mildew, maybe good chance for him to start defiling other girls too
I prefer this turn of events
Chap13, not great, some sexy, mixed feelings. Well, now that Hiccup's mum is here Mildew definitely has to start fucking her.
great update! I'm glad it's just not all smut and there's actual plot
Even though there wasn't any sex between Astrid and Mildew, it was still hot that Astrid finally wanting Mildew to have sex with her. The part where Astrid touches herself while spying on Mildew was nice. And Astrid saying things she would say if she was in Ruffnut's place. But best of all, is when she made that deal to have Mildew have anal with her, and they she wanted it so bad.
In the next chapter, can you actually make Astrid say all those things when she has sex with Mildew again. And do a pregnant sex scene, make it hotter, that Astrid is having sex with Mildew with either Hiccup's kid or Mildew's.
This is of course very good, but I wanted more Mildew/Astrid
Well that was unexpected. If you're gonna have Mildew fucking other girls I'd suggest adding heather
I've been waiting for a lot, and now I'm waiting for changes with Astrid.
Chap12, pretty good, looking forward to next time
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