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By : ItwasMerlin
  • From ANON - Paul J on April 29, 2022

    Hi Merlin,

    I have a story line i would like to share with you re Astrid / Mildew in your great sory " what is wrong with me?" .... is this review page for everyone to see or do you read them privately and then put select ones out for public consumption ? .. I am not sure that you would use a story line once it has been seen by everyone ... cheers 


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  • From ANON - Falcon on April 24, 2022

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  • From ANON - Merlin on April 18, 2022

    Merlin here. Thought I would chime in . (Although it may get deleted.) 

    Massive thanks to the amazing amount of reviews that have flooded in. Gives me more push to write. It seems people are already planning the final and it to be finished . I wasn't planning an end just yet lol 

    I am working to get the next chapter out . I've already wrote one chapter but it's got nothing sexual and I want this to have its next part ready . 

    Love the ideas and hold tight may be a while but when I've spare time I do go straight to writing this . 

    Thanks again 

    Merlin


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  • From Dawnbreaker on April 17, 2022

    How about using the Loki stone on Hiccup and turning Him into a girl then whore for mildew. And getting him to learn form Astrid how to please him.


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  • From ANON - on April 17, 2022

    Solis Mirk's idea for the final scene is perfect. What better way to end it than to show Hiccup that not only did her lose his wife and mother, but he loses his dignity. 

    when I read that idea for the final scene, why not put something before that. Like, Astrid finally breaks down and willingly has sex with Mildew. This goes on until Astrid and Valka are a few months pregnant together. Then one day, Mildew tells Astrid to tell Hiccup that him and Ruffnut and Valka are going to Hiccup's house for dinner. But what Hiccup doesn't know is that when it is time for dessert, he gets mind controlled  by the stone to stay in his seat and watch as Astrid, Valka, & Ruffnut have sex with Mildew in front of Hiccup. It started out with a blowjob, Astrid says out loud about how much she misses having Mildew in her mouth. This continues until all three gets facials, but they don't clean it off. Then Mildew shows Hiccup how much the girls want him by sitting in a chair opposite of Hiccup, and have them ride Mildew one at a time until they are filled with his load or when he is ready for his next whore. And the best part is that even thought Hiccup is forced to remain seated, he is still able to talk and move, but only to masterbate. He has no choice but to watch as Mildew pounds his wife and mother and finishes inside them multiple times. Astrid and Valka even show how much they love being Mildew's whores. And admit to Hiccup with Mildew's load on their face and inside them, they tell him that they are pregnant with Mildew's child and that from now on, they will be nothing more than whores for Mildew, in secret. And Hiccup is not allowed to say anything or else be shamed at Berk which leads him to self-exile. And it goes on forever, that they had Mildew's and Valka's house moved to be near or next to Hiccup's house. Mildew has to make sure his whore are nearby and always ready to go. And the only thing Hiccup could do whenever he is done  with his chief duties, is watch Mildew having sex with his whore's no matter which house, and take care of the kids when they want quiet when having sex.


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  • From ANON - Solis Mirk on April 17, 2022

    I started to read this great story only recently, I hope the next chapter will arrive soon.

    As for suggestions, I think it's time for Astrid to finally willingly submit. Mildew can force her to admit what she felt watching them the previous evening. Then, he can oblige her to continue to watch the theesome, forbidding her to masturbate until Astrid accepts to have sex with him without the use of the stone.

    I have also a final scene for the story: Astrid and Valka are pregnant with Mildew's children. They are fucking with Mildew in front of Hiccup, humiliating him. Hiccup starts to masturbate saying: "Wha's wrong with me?"


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  • From ANON - on April 14, 2022

    Well i was pleasantly surprised to see an update, hope to see them more frequently.

    As for suggestions Mildew could grow suspicious of Astrid's behavour, and force her to tell him everything, including her fantasies about him and Valka, and her masturbation sessions. From there he could order her to never masturbate again and never experience another orgasm, unless he is actually fucking her. He could then force her to watch him, Valka and Ruff have sex, so that she grows more and more aroused, but cannot do anything about it until she begs him to join.


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  • From ANON - on April 07, 2022

    Very cool!


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  • From ANON - on April 02, 2022

    Brilliant continuation of chapter 16


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  • From ANON - 784 on March 29, 2022

    It's a great sequel, and I didn't even hope anymore. I am also waiting for the further humiliation of Valka and the triumph of Mildew.


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  • From ANON - on March 20, 2022

    That horn is always interrupting lmao. Great chapter! I hope the update comes soon 


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  • From ANON - Marley on March 19, 2022

    Gracias por sibiry otro capítulo, ojala el siguiente salga mas pronto


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  • From ANON - on March 19, 2022

    He's back!!


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  • From ANON - on March 19, 2022

    After almost a year of waiting, "add in wolf whistle", that was hot. Mildew and Ruffnut having sex with Valka, and making Valka think Ruffnut is Astrid, that made it even hotter. And with Mildew taking the other hole of Valka's. 

    When are you going to put in the part where Asrid finally breaks down and willingly has sex with Mildew, like she catches Mildew alone and just jumps him and rides him like her life depends on it? The suspense if killing me, like the part where she wanted to just barg into Valka's home and take Mildew for herself. 

    Overall, great chapter, really worth the wait. Hope your next chapter comes out in less time than this. 


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  • From ANON - Itwasmerlin on January 25, 2022

    Hi guys Merlin here . Sorry for the long wait I am working on the next chapter but a new job has made me incredibly busy . I hope it'll  calm soon.  

    No writers block buy ideas are welcome. P.s the story that was linked to me was great . Mine will be different but I loved the story so people read it 


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