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Reviews for Crossed Lines

By : Belfry
  • From ANON - hot shot on November 04, 2012
    Asome fic live the triangle that's happening looks like johnny needs a brake but I douth that yes going to get one keep up the great work
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  • From Darkon on October 30, 2012
    I've noticed that you've been fixated on Mary's chest for the past few chapters. Do I foresee a possible titfuck in a future chapter? That would be swell. Fanfic authors seem loathe to write about that kind of sex act these days, and I haven't read a story with a decent titfuck in it for years.

    Beyond that, I really don't have anything else to say that would be of any help to you, and that includes recommendations. The story, as you have envisioned it, needs no improvement as far as I'm concerned. I like where you're going with the plot, the action is hot, AND you've somehow kept all the characters IC through it all. It's pretty obvious you're holding out for reviews, but I think that's a waste of time since I feel that reviews are a way to express criticism; your story has nothing to criticize. That's why I haven't been dropping in with any regular input. I haven't reviewed simply because you don't NEED my review. What you've got so far is THAT good.

    I said it before, and I'll say it again: if you keep writing, I'll keep reading!


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  • From ANON - hot shot on October 29, 2012
    Wow asome fic love the part were there mother notice the change in them but would have like for Sissy to have made a back up plan hut hey maybe kissing johny will trigger all her memories to cone back its up to you keep them coming hope to see more soon
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 01, 2012
    Plz let Sissy get her memory back n Susan & Mary lose theirs
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  • From Darkon on September 20, 2012
    Regarding your fic, I'm glad that you have finally ended that weird anime arc. Truth be told, I didn't much care for it. While it was VERY well-written, I feel that it was more of a distraction from the main plot than anything else. It did give me an idea, however. Maybe the twins could somehow technologically adapt the magic that Panty used to age Johnny and use it on themselves to seduce him. I'd pay money to read about that!
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  • From ANON - hot shot on September 16, 2012
    Wow didn't see that coming loving the twist and curb you throw at us keep them coming limited and more
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  • From ANON - hot shot on September 06, 2012
    Asome fic can't believe that johnny love his mother that far but now what will happen now that mentality gas been awaken in him live the drama keep them coming love to see more
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  • From ANON - hot shot on August 28, 2012
    Asome fic johnny has learn the hard way that something's don't have an easy fix now he has to live with the knowledge that sussi loves him but he had to so it for Mary now will see what problems his actions carry keep up the asome work
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  • From ANON - Darkon on August 28, 2012
    Sorry about my disappearance over the past week. My fall coursework has begun and I've been buried in readings. I've cleared out most of the initial material so I should be reviewing semi-regularly from here on out. Now if only the idiots who consider themselves IT for this site would get their act together and get the login system WORKING again, then I'd be back in business!

    You handled the "Sissy Arc" really well. I figured that Johnny would eventually give in and give it to her all hard and sloppy, but the fact that he actually followed through with wiping her memory caught me by complete surprise. It really demonstrated the devotion (and fear!) he has for his sisters. On that subject, I'm not at all surprised that Mary is MUCH more accepting of Johnny's "activities" than psycho Susan could ever hope to be. I'd make some cliched claim about how their love is true-blue and can overcome any obstacle and all that, but that's pretty self-evident by this point, heh.

    As I said a few weeks ago, keep running with this. I may not be reviewing every chapter as I did at one point, but I'm still keeping an eye on your work like nobody's business!
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 28, 2012
    Im really sad that Johnny doesnt have Sissy
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  • From ANON - hot shot on August 25, 2012
    Asome chapter love how he's been black mail but let's face it she's not that dum she knows that johnny would go to her sister for help so she might have s back up plan for that ocassion so johnny might not be out of the woods yet love it since the going at it together they should sound prof the room just in case right well hope to see what you have for us soon keep up the good work
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  • From ANON - Darkon on August 22, 2012
    Sissy now has Johnny by the figurative short hairs, though that will probably become a more literal arrangement very soon. I wonder if he will keep this predicament from his sisters, though that would be a disaster either way. If he spills the beans about being blackmailed, he'll have to do everything in his power to keep the twins from killing Sissy. If he decides to keep this a secret, then he should prepare to spin a line of bullshit for the ages because even if the twins never discover the blackmail, there's no doubt in my mind they WILL at least find out he's been seeing another girl behind their backs. When that happens, Johnny will be the one who gets flayed alive (at least by Susan).
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  • From ANON - hot shot on August 22, 2012
    Asome chapter and wow didn't see that coming now johnny has a big isue with sisi will he give in. To her demands and what kind of demans she will make hope to see now soon
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  • From Bennetnelson on August 22, 2012
    Holy monkey cookies Johnny's situation as gotten... Bad? Let see one girl loves him, one is falling into insanity over him, and another wants him as a toy, I don't know whether to laugh at how screwed he is or curse him out for being so lucky? Truly a quandary; oh well let see where you go from here. This story is great and major improvement in all areas here from first chap. Chow Bennet out
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  • From ANON - Darkon on August 21, 2012
    I agree with one of the reviews that seems to have disappeared. Johnny will be playing with fire if this...meeting with Sissy turns into something more serious. The twins strike me as the REALLY possessive/jealous types. I can only imagine what they'll do if Sissy gets into the picture. Deus only knows they can barely tolerate having to share Johnny with each other. That goes double for Susan. She'll probably weave some kind of plot that gets somebody killed, haha.


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