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Reviews for What's wrong with me?

By : ItwasMerlin

From Lunarsilver on January 26, 2017
Another great chapter, maybe the next time mildew tells astrid to give him a blowjob she does it without a shirt so he can see her breast or Astrid does a boobjob but then mildew tells her to look at him while she does a boob blow job combo then mildew tells astrid to still look at him while her mouth is open with her tounge out, then mildew unleashes three big ones. The first in her mouth the second covering her face the last ones on her boobs, what could make the experience worse if her body reacts stronger then the last time. Hope you like this idea enough to use it.

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From ANON - Anon on January 25, 2017
Please continue!

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From AhsokasTrueLove on January 15, 2017
A very promising start. I'm really looking forward to where this goes. I agree with SailorNemesis in that it will help immersion if Astrid and Mildew are realistic in their representation...she should def have a pretty nice sized bush at her age. In my opinion it wouldnt be bad to take it a step further and dont shy away from how unappealing Mildew is. Certainly for me, and I assume anyone else who likes this type of story, a lot of the excitement of it is a pretty girl like Astrid submitting to someone waaay below her league so dont be afraid to draw emphasis on this ugly old man corrupting a sexy teenager.

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From ANON - on January 15, 2017
Hope he fucks astrid hard until she's begging for more

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From ninesenshi on January 13, 2017
Promising start, hope to read more soon. Also, please dont shave all her body hair like some modern girl. Thanks.

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From Lunarsilver on January 13, 2017
It's a good setup of what's to "come" and not just mildew lol

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From ANON - on January 13, 2017
What a strange pairing . I'm not sure I should like it but the idea is kind of hot in a wrong way . You have got my attention please do continue

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