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From ANON - Anon on June 24, 2009
Looking good so far. But one thing. Don't just show action sequences. After the Chaos thing blows over, why not show a couple of chapters of them kicking back, relaxing. Maybe spending quality time with Carina and Huggy? Remember Hugyy, how long has it been since we've even seen him.

Oh a quick tip. Song lyrics in the middle of a chapter are ok once or twice, but seriously, there are limits.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on June 20, 2009
Nice chapter. Though you should remember Two Brains was never really that much into getting rid of Wordgirl. He was just a cheese obsessed maniac. Oh I should have mentioned this last chapter, but I forgot. It's trident. Triton is the king of Atlantis in the Little Mermaid.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on June 19, 2009
Heh, I wonder which half of Tim's better half Becky was talking about? Anyway the song was too easy, man. Any transformers fan would get it. Now I just wished you could have worked this song into it. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IZ6iwdDhIt4&feature=channel_page

Anyway it's best not to complicate things when you don't have to. Fire and Ice will do fine. As for the new kind, stick with the classics. Why not Chaos himself? No friends, no enemies, he screws with everybody equally. I assume Wordgirl and Math Whiz are taking Fire and Ice back to Dr. Tubing's lab? I doubt they'd just leave them laying around like that.

Oh and Zaniah is right to be cautious. Chaos cares nothing for power, all he wants is destruction.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on June 18, 2009
Ooh, looks like there's trouble brewing. Well, more trouble anyway. I hope Carina enjoyed her little romp. Oh and no offense, but SO didn't need to hear the foot thing.
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From Silent Pluto on June 17, 2009
this is just too cute
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From ANON - Max Jordan on June 16, 2009
Heh, this is gonna get fun. So, I take it Becky and Tim just got an upgrade? That's ok, but let's try to keep them from going to Superman level, I mean their are limits. Heh, wouldn't it be funny if Carina, with her new suped up powers, were the one to beat Krog, without even trying to do it. Maybe she just wants to play with him and ends up flattening him by mistake. Becky and Tim are gonnha have to keep a closer eye on her in future.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on June 15, 2009
Hmm, interesting, I assume that stone holds some power. And I just realized something. There is at least one difference between the dimensions. I highly doubt Empress Zaniah found the time to settle down and have a kid. And I couldn't help but notice that Carina came into contact with the necklace before her mother did. Perhaps, in some odd way, it could be Carina that somehow turns the tide.

Judging by what Fire and Ice said, I assume at some point they were heroes themselves. Maybe they were tired of being used by the people they were trying to protect and that's what triggered this rampage. It's been so long, that they've forgotten that real innocence does exist. Maybe Carina will somehow be the one to somehow spark the last embers of whatever heroic feelings these two have left.

In the end, Carina could be the one to save the day. Oh, here's a question. Do you think in the Empress's dimension, there weapons are still programmed not to target people with Lexiconian or Decimalian DNA? Cause remember, Carina has both.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on June 14, 2009
Hee, evil alternates vs. Fire and Ice, this Sunday Sunday Sunday. Heh, sorry, couldn't resist. You can post the fic anywhere you like. But, just so you know, I have little use for fanfiction.net. It's a long story and I don't want to get into it.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on June 13, 2009
Hi, sorry about not reviewing for so long. I had some comp troubles. Anyway, decent couple of chapters. I'm just going to run over a couple of points.

First off didn't the alternates managed to succesfully fire the lust cannon before they were hit with the lust ray? Shouldn't there have been like a massive city wide orgy at some point? Or does everybody just prefer to not think about it?

Fire and Ice, a bit random, but decent new villains. It'll be nice to see Wordgirl and the rest battling someone they can't just pummel their way through. Maybe Team Alphanumeric could figure out a wayto take advantage of the two big enemies. Like luring the alternates and Fire and Ice to the same place and conning them into battling each other. It's a possability.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on June 01, 2009
Whee bit too much inforation with the whips and chains. Hee, level twelve all over the city? This is going to be one hell of a party. Maybe Team Alphanumeric could work out a way to turn the lust ray against Zaniah and her counterparts. One other idea, though Caelum would be Loathe to use it, I highly doubt the other dimension has Eileen in it, at least not the king kong sized version. Hmm, you think Violet and Tobey might make a little hell raiser of their own? They've already had sex once, though under the influence of the lust ray, mayhe Violet is keepinga little secret.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on May 29, 2009
Wow, Becky is really finding out how high stress being a super hero can be. I wonder how exactly Team Alhanumeric plans to overcome their doulbes? Who knows, Maybe Tobey could provide them with some kind of advantage?
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From ANON - Max Jordan on May 27, 2009
Not bad, so far. Though I don't think Becky would be so quick to forgive and forget with Tobey, especially after everything he's put her through. I think Violet and Becky still need to sit down and have a serious talk on the subject.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on May 26, 2009
Whoa whoa slow down a bit. You shouldn't have them figure the whole thing out right off the bat. It's more fun to reveal the mystery slowly, one bit at a time. Besides they wouldn't know everything about the other side out of nowhere like that. And I'd still like to see Violet and Tobey's situation. Maybe have Violet drag Tobey out on a first date. We haven't really seen how their personality interact with each other while they're not under the influence of the lust ray.

And what about my idea of Violet trying to convince Tobey to be a crime fighter? That alone could pour a ton of comedy gold into the story. Here's a thought. Start the chapter with Violet taking Tobey somewhere, maybe the park or carnival. At first Tobey grumbles, claiming it's boring. But then he's shocked to realize he doesn't mind being around Violet so much and that he might even be starting to have fun.

Then you could have Dr. Tubing contact Team Alpha Numeric about temporal anomilies he dects. They go to the spot, only to find the alternate four and proceed to get thrashed by them. Wordgirl calls retreat and they pull out. Later on they could discover some type of ship the other soldiers are using.

Math Whiz could somehow tap into their computer systems and download historyt files that explain the whole thing. Team Alphanumeric would have two big shocks to face. The fact that they suffered their first real true defeat. And the shock to Becky to find out that her alternate self is a vicious tyrant.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on May 25, 2009
Heh, a normal day in the life of a not so normal family. Two brains actually thinks Wordgirl will live for hundreds of years? Doesn't the ring know about Carina, yet? The Phantom had the same thing going. Everybody thought he was immortal, nobody ever figured out it could be a family legacy. Hmm, this little time travel plot gives me an idea for a possible future storyline. I'll email you the details.

Heh, I can see a new potential headache for Becky. What if Violet, as The Framer, attempts to introduce Tobey to the wonderful world of crime fighting? And of course, Eileen, not wanting to be left out and thinking she can impress Caelum, decides to jump in, too. Look out world, here comes the Hero Squad. I get the feeling Team Alphanumeric are in for a LONG day. I really don't think Becky ever had the hear to tell Violet that she didn't actually have any super powers. Ooh and Carina starts begging mommy to let her join the Hero Squad, too.
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From ANON - Max Jordan on May 24, 2009
Hee hee, man Caelum is never gonna hear the end of that. I just hope Becky doesn't get too mad at Violet. And I don't think Phantasma is gonna forget this anytime soon.
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