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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on August 09, 2009
    Um, it's twelve jurors. Heh, they could always disguise her in a psuedo crime fighting outfit. That oculd be a rich scene, with Carina essentially treating it like a game of dress up. You know, you never did get into when Becky first started fighting crime, or even discovered her powers. Maybe it's time for a little reminiscing?
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on August 06, 2009
    I meant that as an after thought. Honestly, after the DA was humiliated last time, there's no way any judge would take any charges they made now serious. I just meant that they're case would have had more of a threat to it if they'd gone for this the first time.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on August 04, 2009
    Well, she's older now and I see her as the lucky stiff who just naturally gets a great figure as she developes. If if she doesn't, if mommy can get her a whole house full of toys, dresses and baked goods, I think she should be able to manage plastic surgery.

    By the way, it's Mac Trucky. That's the kind of semi truck that's flat in front, with the engine under the cab. The type with the engine in front like normal cars is called Peterbuilt.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on August 02, 2009
    Personally, I've always thought it had something to do with that cat necklace she has. And with this kind of reporting, the reporter usually wears a camera mounted in a helmet, adds to the protection. Wouldn't it be classic if Eileen got a modeling contract out of this? She already has the high maintenance part down.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on August 01, 2009
    LOL that's why I'm here. Dude next chapter. Scoops following Caelum around and giant Eileen grabs both of them by mistake. Scoops, Caelum and camera straight down Eileen's shirt.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 31, 2009
    Yeah but Violet's pregnancy is a bit more normal than Becky's. So it's going to take a while. Maybe a few scenes with Tobey having to live with the effects of Pregnancy and finding out the hard way exactly what those are.

    As for ideas, here's a though. To a certain extent, Alphamumeric has to rebuild their reputation. So what if they decide to let a news reporter take a camera and they take him along on patrol one day. This could be a way for Scoops to redeem himself and for Wordgirl to give Scoops a chance, cause that really wasn't his fault.

    But of course a day in the life of Team Alphanumeric is anything but ordinary. Scoops pretty much gets dragged along for the ride of his life. There are a ton of possabilties for this. The right, Huntress, Eileen. The possabilities are endless.

    And as for the rest of the season, why not focus on Tobey a bit. What his life is like, especially going through the process of setting up your own company. I mean the paperwork and hassle alone would be mind numbing.
    But then add in the fact that Mr. Big doesn't like the idea of competition. He starts messing with Tobey in a big way. But Tobey doesn't want to bother Wordgirl with this, because she has troubles of her own. So he decides to handle it himself. So Tobey has to juggle, starting a couple, tending to his pregnant girlfriend and holding off Mr. Big. Frankly, this could either bring Tobey to a new level, or drive him straight out of his mind.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 30, 2009
    Hee, and with a kid involved, no less. That could have gotten akward.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 30, 2009
    Pretty good chapter. Although two little nit picks. First, this is the person he loves, when Tobey found them, he wouldn't have bothered waiting for back up, he would have crashed his way in. Wordgirl and Math Whiz would have had a harder time restraining him than freeing Violet.

    And second, who leaves an entire skyscraper sitting around empty?
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  • From Otakuman486 on July 29, 2009
    Great story. Also Toby could make violet a frame that projects forcefeilds, since it looks like she's going to get dragged into the fighting.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 28, 2009
    Oh man, Violet getting kidnapped? I don't even want to imagine the rampage Tobey will unleash to get her back. And you should take it a bit easier with Scoops. I mean I know he gets a one track mind, but he's not stupid.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 24, 2009
    Actually, what I meant was that Tobey wouldn't need to hit the books. Tobey is with robotics that he could h ave started his own company any time he wanted too. He just didn't want to. His egotism and boredom with life in general distracted him to the point, where he just didn't care about any of those things. Then later, his obession with Wordgirl distracted him so much, that he never even stopped to consider what he could do, if he put his mind to it.

    Now with his obsession over Wordgirl finally neutralied and motivating factor, Violet and his impending fatherhood, to give him the drive he needs, I don't doubt that Toey could be done with school, including college and well on his way to starting his own company in two, maybe three months tops.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 23, 2009
    Ooh, sounds like things are really cooking. Why not have Tobey ask to take time off of Team Alphanumeric for a while? After all, it takes a lot of effort to get a business going, never mind a robotics corporation.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 23, 2009
    Actually, it's highly unlikely that Carina would go to the state. That only happens when there's no other family members available, or when the family is deemed unfit. More than like Carina would be placed in the care of her grandparents. I'm glad you remembered to have people notice Becky and Tim's abscense. But, if the trial drags on, like most trials do, Becky's family is gonna have to come up with some serious excuses.

    You know, Violet isn't the type to worry about this sort of thing, but she and her baby wouldn't have anything to worry about. Tobey's mom has more than enough money to set both of them up, quite nicely. Even if Tobey didn't want to do that, he could easily make a ton of money on his own.

    Actually, I'm pretty sure that Tobey could easily be head of his own robotics form, any time he wanted to. In all honesty, I think the only reason is that between being under his mother's care, and his obsession with Wordgirl, he was so distracted, it never occured to him.

    But, now that he has a family to think about, that motivation could easily kick his business skills into high gear. Of course, having Violet to keep his feet on the ground doesn't hurt either.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 16, 2009
    Ooh, brutal. I mean getting caught is one thing, but naked in the park? Man I can't wait to see the look on Tobey and Violet's faces when they wake up. Can't wait for next season.
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  • From ANON - Max Jordan on July 15, 2009
    Sounds like you've got plenty of plot points right here. Mr. Big's last stand. Of course the lust ray, oh man, this is gonna be fun. By the way, I think you should consider retiring the lust ray after this. I mean there's only so many times you can use something before just devolvies into a Deus Ex Machina.

    Of course, after the effects of the lust ray wears off, the city will pretty much descend into chaos. Wordgirl won't have much choice, this is her city and she needs to help, despite the consequences. Of course this will lead to a trial and Becky having to face the very real possability that the only way to avoid going to jail is to leave the Earth for Lexicon.

    And let's here a little Wordgirl support. I mean how many people have been saved by here over the years and there aren't a legion of protestors outside the courthouse? And of course, there are going to be serious consequences of the lust ray. Like people waking up and not being able to remember how they got where they are or what they did.

    Or worse, Tobey facing the reality that because of the lust ray, Violet might actually be pregnant. There are plenty of possabilities in the situation you've set up. And incidentily what happened to Fire and Ice? You shouldn't just ignore them. What are they doing and what will they do, now?
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