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From Rockinmuffin on December 14, 2008
Review for Insanity Part 5:

This was so precious. Of course, I know I'm also a bit biased; I'm a sucker when it comes down to loving families. It's good to see that Scream's future is looking bright after all that trauma. Scream and Angie both suffered through life; the biggest difference between them was that people found out about Scream's trauma while it was still early enough to give him some form of help. I feel bad for Angie for never having that chance.

I can't begin to imagine what rehabilitation for Tron is going to be like. I know it will be even harder and longer than Scream's. Scream's therapy was meant to teach him that he was good and didn't deserve what happened to him; Tron's therapy will, to be blunt, teac him that he can't treat mechs the way he has and that he has no right to do so in the first place. He might be treated as more of an equal by his new master, but I can't see him changing his attitude any time soon. He was given power over the life of a mech, and once someone is given a taste of power they find themselves desiring more. And, of course, it's apporpriate that Megatron's clone is the one facing this situation.

I can't wait to see the next chapter, for this arc as well as your other one. I love all of your characters (but I love TC the most!) xD
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From WacheyP87 on December 13, 2008
***Insanity Part 5***

Awww, that's so cute!! Scream is their son!!
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From Breech_Loader on December 13, 2008
Oh, that makes me feel so much better about past four. I'm glad you helped Scream... but I'm guessing Tron ain't out of the story just yet...

I don't blame Tron for what he did to Scream. He was taught that it was okay to abuse other mechs for his own pleasure, although I doubt it was a difficult thing for him to learn, being cloned from Megatron. He could have been taught to be kind and gentle if Angie had chosen to do that. I blame Angie entirely. Man I wanna take a 2 by 4 to her knees.
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From StarRaider on December 13, 2008
**Insanity part 4**

Hmm. I am happy that she's gone yet, it kind of sucks she had to die. Still all the better for Scream, hopefully he can manage to pull himself back from the brink. Daniel is going to have his hands full with Tron though. This has had a good twist, I really like it.

**The Tale of Kaon PT 2**

This is getting much more interesting. I have to agree as well with a little more knowledge of what is going on it makes me more interested. Keep it up.
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From WacheyP87 on December 13, 2008
**Harmony Part 1**

Wow, after reading this, I don't think I can do Soundwave justice. Don't worry, I'm still going to write something, but man, your story so far is very intriguing and I can't wait for the next part!!

**Insanity Part 4**

I am overjoyed that Angie is dead. I know that is mean to say, but that's what I think, and I hope Scream gets the help he deserves.

As for what I plan on writing, I have three ideas, two involve Autobots though, so they'll have to wait, but the one I'm working on now is certainly going to be fun! It's gonna feature my favorite conehead, Thrust!
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From Prizm on December 13, 2008
Awesome chapter, StarRaider, love all your detail in there. You write Soundwave so good, I like how you made him not understand that he was reading Nicoles thoughts.Very interesting can't wait to see the next part.
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From Rockinmuffin on December 12, 2008
Review for The Tale of Kaon PT 2:

This capter explained a lot and made this alternate universe of yours a lot less confusing. Now that I know what's going on I'm actually very interested in this world you've created. Very cool. I think the idea of the virus is brilliant. Megsy was always a bit of a sore loser, wasn't he? xD

I like Kaon; he reminds me of a Sunstorm clone in some ways, but that's to be expected since his master is really te only person he's properly interacted with. And I love Hunter; he's awesome. Besides, any guy shorter than me, especially a bot, is okay in my book. xD

Can't wait to see the next chapter. :3
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From Rockinmuffin on December 12, 2008
Review for Harmony Part 1:

I loved this! I can tell that this will be a fun little mini-plot. In a way, I sort of feel sorry for Morgan, but at the same time I pity him for being daft enough to think that a sex toy would solve all of his marital problems. Still, he had good intentions and he was willing to spend that much money to make his wife happy so he's not too bad. I especially liked when he reminisced about the "good ol' days" when he and his wife were younger and had more time for one another. I think it adds another dimension to te story that Nicole has a husband who she's not satisfied with yet you don't make him out to be a bad guy. Makes the characters more realistic.

I also love how you've made music an important and central theme in this. It's hard to properly portray music in writing because it's silent so I applaud you for taking on the challenge. I also applaud you for using Soundwave; not only is he made of awesome but he's a challenging character to worl with due to his abnormal (for humans, of course) speech patterns.

...You know what I would do if I had a Soundwave clone? I'd throw wild techno rave parties at my house. And then, right before we were about to "get it on," he'd play music by Barry White. xD Haha!

Good job! I look forward to your future chapters!
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From ToonQueen on December 12, 2008
***Guardian PT 1***
I love how you write your Skywarp! Though I'm familiar with G1 and Animated I kept seeing his personality as a blend of the both when I read it. But thats a good thing! :3 I loved the fact you made him steal to make his Master happy. I think its pretty much normal for all little kids to steal something once in their lives, not really understanding money and being "I WANT IT." ((Me, it was She-Ra balloons when I was 4ish... mom made me take them back to the manager and I was bawling my eyes out.)) I think the stealing something fits well with the childlike behavior clones start with. X3 But he didn't steal for himself, he stole for her, which is even more d'awwww!

***Insanity PT 4***
POOR SCREAM! ;-; The adding the tacks for pain is absolutely evil. ;_; *kicks 'Tron* Though 'Tron's development is interesting too. He obviously knows something is up.
I wonder if after this situation if Scream gets his processors straightened out if he would want to change his name. Its been mentioned many times how the name Scream relates to his pain and his weak nature. ;_; POOR SCREAM! ;-;

***Harmony PT 1***
I like the Husband and Wife interaction here. Its not necessary a BAD marriage, but more 'n less has become the same old same old. I'll be interested in the interaction Soundwave has with the two and if it effects the marriage for the better or the worse. Very good story so far! I like how Nicole fell asleep. D'awwww.

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From Rockinmuffin on December 11, 2008
Review for Insanity Part 4:

This chapter was incredibly disturbing; in a good way, of course. I can't even imagine what it must feel like to have tacs stabbing into your privates with even the littlest amount of pressure. Honestly, while I know that this is intentionally an extreme example, I don't think I could ever truly understand the sadism fetish when their partner is not a masochist. It reminds me of young children in a way; like a four-year-old pulling thr legs off of a caterpillar because they don't register the bug as being a real living creature, or the same four-year-old calling another a name because they don't understand the concept of transference, don't understand that other people have the same emotions as them and react the same way.

I'm sad that Angie died. While she wasn't the most likeable person, she was still a tragic character. That, and no one really deserves death. Really, I think that her greatest caracter flaw was that, due to the damage from her childhood trauma, she couldn't grow up. She was very immature in a few ways which makes me wonder how she might have turned out if she had the chance to grow up.

It's not surprising that Scream's meta would be as damaged as it is. I feel terrible for chuckling while I was reading this part, but I was terribly reminded of Golem (or however his name is spelled) from Lord of the Rings, especially when he brought out the key chain. (My precious, my precious...) Still, I hope that, eventually, his time with Daniel and Sam will help to heal him.

Also, Tron is an asshole. ...That is all. xD
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From Breech_Loader on December 11, 2008
Oh god... oh god... poor Scream. I felt like I was going to be sick.

I am so glad Angie's dead.

You win, StSE. You win utterly. I will NEVER be able to write rape as agonisingly and painfully as you do.

But I'll keep on trying.
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From StarRaider on December 11, 2008
insantiy part 3. **

I like that Scream is out and about seeing what else is going on in the world, I like how he's having a bit of I don't want to say confidence exactly, but he's happy that he's being accepted even if it is just for being on loan.

Prototypes**

I love these two and there bit of bickering, makes me laugh every time. Just goes to show there, doesn't matter how much they fight they know what is important and will be ready to face it in a heart beat....eerr umm processing cycle. :P

Guardian.**

This is awesome. Maria, Skye just awesome he's too cute. Looks like Maria is going to very surprised with what he can do.
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From Prizm on December 10, 2008
Rockinmuffin, that was awesome, just love it. You made Skywarp so cute. I can't wait to read your next part.
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From Rockinmuffin on December 10, 2008
Thank you so much for you encouragement! It really means a lot to me that you like my mini-plot so much, especially since it was you tat inspired me. I never would have come up with something like this if not for you and if you hadn't made this an open story I really never would have written it because I would have felt like I was just copying from someone else's idea.

I'm so glad that you find Maria and Skye interesting. At first I was going to try and add a lime scene to the end of the chapter so it would earn an adult rating, but I decided against it because it seemed like it would be out of character for Maria. And, I just might use those suggestions you made. I caould see Skye cleaning the whole apartment in order to get is master's apporval. ...And now I want to see what Maria's face looks like when Skye asks for specified dimensions. She might even faint! xD Haha!

On a side note, I might be able to write a little bit faster now. I'm finished with my final exams and I'll be going home for the holidays soon; my break should last for about a month so hopefully I'll get a couple chapters written within that time.

Again, thank you for your kind words and for starting all of this in the first place. It's been a while since I've had so much fun with a story.
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From Rockinmuffin on December 10, 2008
Review for To Feel Human Part 4:

This chapter was funny to me. The idea of robots going on a camping trip is so ridiculous you can't help but smile.

It's so cute how worried Speed was for Daniel. They really are just like human kids, huh? And I'm glad that Daniel stepped up and told Speed that he was family. Funny how a near death experience can make you admit to things that would otherwise be hard to say.
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