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From EerieIri on December 17, 2008
This was very well written, and I'm very interested in doing a mini series due to this chap alone.^____^
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From Prizm on December 17, 2008
chapter 25 Rocknmuffin you are the best, that was so good, makes me smile love how you have that bit of humor in there. I so relate to that part were Maria was like Uh....size hehe.
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From Rockinmuffin on December 16, 2008
Review for Prototype/Insanity Part 2:

Oh Lord� xD My roommate would absolutely HATE Scream. Every time someone who isn�t black says the ol� N-word she gets all offended (even though she�s white) and thinks someone�s going to pop out of nowhere and shoot us all down. Haha. It still makes me laugh out loud every time I hear Scream say it, though. He�s such a mini player in the making.

Man, That Tron is one manipulative bastard; just like the real Megatron. xD Lol. Though, I honestly can�t say I wouldn�t try to do the same if I were the one enslaved. And, honestly, in that sort of situation I�d probably be just as easy to manipulate as Tracey. I�m a sucker for a sap with a sad story.

I�ve been waiting for Tron to end up dominating a person; I knew the asshole had it in him! xD I really like where this is going. Honestly, I�m excited to see what Tron does now that he�s free, see how he�s going to go about convincing people of his and other clones� sentience.

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From Breech_Loader on December 16, 2008
I don't feel so sorry for Tron now. But he probably doesn't understand how easy drug addicts are to control - and that not everybody is that weak. And I have a feeling he might get attached to her.

Or not.

Who knows? These clones learn from the people they're around, and a drug addict isn't the best person to learn from.

And she might not be so nice when she needs more drugs.
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From StarRaider on December 16, 2008
***Adore Thy Master (part 1)***
Oh that is different, indeed it is just a little bit dark. Kind of interesting if she's so strong at some point she might damage him, makes me wonder if there will be Clone repair shops.LOL It will be fun to see if he can keep up with her that is for sure.

***Adore Thy Master (part 2)***

I like this, to see a section from Beast's point of view is really cool good work. Is this going to continue in this fashion?
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From Rockinmuffin on December 16, 2008
Review for Adore thy Master Parts 1 and 2:

First, I'd like to say that I'm glad you decided to submit something after all.

Hmm... Black magic and robotics; a curious blend. Honestly, I wouldn't have thought to combine elements of a supernatural with a science fiction since they usually don't tend to mix well but I think you pulled it off nicely. Both your chapters were very sensual, which, admittedly, was the original purpose of this entire story; a chance for authors to submit their Transformer fantasies.

I'm very happy with your choice of robot; I adore Lugnut and think he's awesome. That, and I'm a fan of big bots. I like how you made him so loyal and submissive; it's appropriate that even a clone of Lugnut would be designed with more loyalty than the average mech.

And the addition of a Megatron clone is very promising, indeed. I can't wait to see how all of this develops... Mwahaha. xD
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From ToonQueen on December 16, 2008
Reply to StSE:

GIT OUT OF MY HEAD CHARLES.

Yes, I actually even wrote a little comparing it to the slave trade for my other story that will take place in modern times. >_>;;; Also the whole Sparks = Souls issue as well. Even this morning I was rewatching the TF:A Soundwave episode since... it sort of touches on the subject. LINKS for G1 that don't know: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BKr13Hg5Zxg and http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ameq0DoNg5s I love how Megatron also reacts to it. Kekekeke.
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From ToonQueen on December 16, 2008
****Up, Up, and Away! Part 1****
Hahaha, I love Maggie's many failed attempts before getting a bot. I wasn't expecting Thrust! XD And I loved the comments about this name. Interesting to see how a Thrustish personality will turn out.

****Urban Shock****
DUN DUN DUN! This was awesome. :O This is the type of conspiracy/suspense I love to read. :3 My fav line was the "If any of the droids decide to get... insubordinate, I need somebody I know I can trust to deactivate them," DUN DUN DUNNNNN! :O It gave me an 'oh SHIT' moment. I had already considered the differences between military droids and the original ones. Heavier armor and weapons was something I was going to do! I never thought of a different power source though, XD I might borrow if thats okay, please? X3 I did have plans for a brief meeting with 3 military bots, to show off the difference between them and the team of randoms my main character's are.

**To Feel Human Part 5**
OH DAMN. I did not expect 'Tron to take that escape at the end. VERY GOOD! I lol'd hard at Scream's behavior. Good to see he's getting better. :3 I think its quite fitting
that the same humans that could tell one bot that they love him, could still believe that bots are still just bots, and not living. Silly silly Humans. XD

Annnnd Replies:

Rockinmuffin: Thanks! X3 Glad you like Hunter. I had to throw in a character to plot against Vishal by getting him to give into some sort of feelings for Kaon. Not only does it develop the characters, but will hopefully lead to smut sooner. *cackle* Yeah, I had to make him short. In my mind i just keep on seeing humans being taller than him. Also, I would think not all people want a lover at six foot height. X-x

StarRaider: Thanks! I hope every part gives more insight into the world. X3 There is so much more to get too! *flails*

StSE: Thank you! Hunter was supposed to be more of a background char, and he sorta... came to life more. XD Like I said to Rockinmuffin, I needed someone to push Vishal along. XD I really just wanted to focus on Vish and Kaon but so many future side characters are coming up. Oh well, hopefully all the pieces will fit together! Glad you like the virus. A comment I got from a friend was that the virus seemed Resident Evil (AKA Zombies!) for bots. Thats pretty much what I was going for, for the fourth stage of the virus. X3 Kekekeke. Luckily the two found had a bit of spark energy in them... perhaps they can be 'cured.' X3

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From Prizm on December 15, 2008
Review for chapter 21, that was a really good chapter, I liked the end. can't wait to see what happens next. I wish, I could write off of your chapter that would be fun, but it wouldn't fit in with yours.
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From Rockinmuffin on December 15, 2008
Review for Prototype/Insanity Part 1:

Oh Lord... When Scream said "Fuck you nigga" I laughed so damn hard. Generally, when I read a story and find something funny, I'll chuckle quietly to myself, but for this I literally laughed out loud. I wouldn't be surprised if my neighbors heard me. xD Ha! It's nice to see Scream doing so well. Crazy ass Decepticracker. xD

Well, I'm not surprised to see Tron's reaction to the therapy. And it's fascinating how it seems that he's the only one to realize his own sentience. Honetlly, I'm surprised that Sharon hasn't said anything about the possibility of clone sentience since she would know more than anyone, I'd imagine. And if Tron can fight against his programming to the point of escaping, what else is he capable of. Perhaps he might even find a way to hack his own systems and activate his weaponry.

I really like the idea of the clones fighting for their rights. Actually, I've even considered having my own characters fight for robot-rights in future chapters, possibly, though there are way too many different ideas flowing through my head for this series. Considering this story was intended to be a smut fest, it's a lot deeper in plot than first intended. And I don't mind that one bit. (Though, my next chapter is going to be mostly nothing but smut.)

Until next time, then.
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From StarRaider on December 15, 2008
**Up, Up, and Away! Part 1**

This is cute, I am sure there are many clones that will be given away like that nice idea. Good start.

**Urban Shock Chapter 1: **

Unique look on things from the inside, I do like it. Looking forward to the next part.
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From Rockinmuffin on December 15, 2008
Review for Urban Shock Chapter 1:

Wow! This was incredibly well-written and drew a good bit of information from StSE's original storyline. I must admit, I was wary at first when you mentioned bending the rules but the moment I started reading your chapter I was immediately drawn in. It really was written brilliantly and you made a lot of good points. It's only logical to think that eventually human's would use the droids for battle since they view them as non-sentient robots. And you used a lot of terms and vocabulary that made you seem very knowledgable in the subject so it's obvious that you actually researched a bit instead of simply writing on a whim. Wonderful.

I really can't think of anything else to say. I'm still in awe at how well-written this was.
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From WacheyP87 on December 14, 2008
To Rockinmuffin:

Well I did have a scene planned in my head about his reasoning for giving Maggie the droid specifically, but by the time I got that far into my story I forgot it and I really wanted to get to the clone. Thank you for pointing it out to me though, I'll try and be more careful in the next chapter. (Or maybe I should fix this chapter a little bit before the next one?)

And Thrust is one of my favorites. I don't know why, he kinda just grew on me. And don't worry about his self-esteem, his ego's just gonna get bigger. And to answer your question as to which super hero he's named after, it's Wally West, aka the Flash.
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From Rockinmuffin on December 14, 2008
Review for Up, Up And Away Part 1:

This was fun! xD I love Margaret; she's the quirky kind of girl I could hang out with! I'm glad that you brought up the issue that there will be a lot of jealous people who won't be able to afford clones. I think it was kinf od unrealistic that her boss sort of just gave it to her; I understood his reasoning but it was kind of odd that he chose her out of all his employees; perhaps if he had mentioned something about noticing how hard she was working recently or something like that. Aside from that, I really enjoyed this chapter and that was the only nitpicky thing I noticed.

I'm glad that you decided to pick Thrust. A lot of people prefer the more aesthetically pleasing Seekers, myself included, so it's wonderful that you picked one of the cone-heads. But seriously, with that kind of name and the phallic shape of his head, what clone would be more perfect for the position of a pleasure droid than Thrust? Lol. I hope Thrust's self esteem doesn't get too damaged by the fact that his original owner didn't want him, especially since Margaret is so excited to have him.

I also like that she's an aspiring comic artist and how you gave the title of your arc a heroic cliche quality. It's cute. If I may be so bold, who's the comic character you named the Thrust clone after and from what series? I feel like I should know it but I can't think of it. Still, Wally is an awesome name for a clone and quite original. I have to admit, it was hard to resist the temptation of giving my clone a goofy name. If I ever decide to do another I'll probably end up naming him Archibald or Ferdinand. xD

Can't wait to see the next part.
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From StarRaider on December 14, 2008
**Insanity part 5**

Awesome, I am glad that Scream is getting the attention he needs. It is very cool that TC has taken on his role, as father. Nice work.
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