rate_review Reviews

Not bad.

Honestly a pretty strong piece of fanfiction. The set up was nice and little details worked nicely into the fabric of the piece. If I had any criticism it would be mostly the teasing lack of subtly. During the whole piece I expected a little more delicacy with how the story would unfold but instead it ran in a rather predictable fashion. This didn't draw away from it a simple erotica but kept it from being more memorable than it was. Still, this piece does suggest you are a writer to be watched and I hope to see more of your quality work in the future.