rate_review Reviews

Your grammar is a little off in some places, and some sentences run on a bit. Usually wrong grammar turns me off, but in this case, I'll make an exception. God this story is smokin' hot. I love the crack pairings too. I hope there's more to come!

I liked the story alot; it has alot going on at once but doesn't become (too) confusing. The biggest draw back though was the writing style of the first 2 chapters. I would have given the story a 3 based on that alone, but it got progressively better so redeemed itself enough for a 4. The horny teens were very believeable, though the idea of a foodfight when drunk wasn't as much. But without that I guess there wouldn't be much need for hot bathroom sex, eh? So overall, good story but needs a bit of tweaking in the format department for the first chapter (at least, though second one could stand to use a bit too). Awesome job *hearts*

I loved this! Drunk Kyle is so funny, and I love Kenny, and his description of Cristophe at the end!

Keep going! It's pretty well written thus far and the characters are mostly believable. I enjoy it very much so far. :3

I <3 this.
I'm so glad you decided to chare this with the rest of the internet :]

Emma<333