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Reviews for Better Halves

By : sefiru
  • From ANON - luckylurker on November 05, 2009
    I live the story, but I just noticed something: the injury to Young Optimus' knee keeps him from transforming, which is why Prime says he can't go to the battle. But in this last chapter you have him transforming and charging through the base to lure in Mirage. Or did I just misread something (it's happened before :) )
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  • From ANON - djsaj on November 02, 2009
    Chapter 11's beginning confused me. Was it the knowledge that told Optimus Jazz would have trapped the Ark? I guess you probably implied this in his thoughts, but it's still confusing as in the details how he should know about the paint bombs. Did you mean as it in that Optimus had experience himself a tactical experience like this? If so, you should have mentioned it. That would connect to the other thing I would "complain" about. I miss the details in the narrative, but then it's only me because I'm used to / love overly detailed fiction.

    XD I wonder how the Ark's Autobots will now think about Optimus, being a match in Prime, Jazz and Prowl's thoughts. I bet he had fun figuring this riddle out. As I said in chapter 9, I think too he's strangely apt in figuring out how others think as well as using this knowledge, and also being good in tactics/strategy. Gave me some insistent bunnies about others wanting to use his processor to override a security system / find a secret / act as a general prediction machine or where he defeats his comrades because he simply knew everything what they'd do in before.

    I hope Prowl shares the picture of slaw-jacked Sentinel with Optimus. ;D
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  • From GabrielC on October 29, 2009
    Yay!!! Go Optimus! I have been waiting for this chapter for what felt like ages lol... you do not disappoint! :) Looking forward to more... I am still thoroughly enjoying this story!! :D please keep going...things are getting more interesting ;)
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  • From ANON - Fayola on October 26, 2009
    The names of the sectors where the fires started made me laugh. SO HARD. XD
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  • From shozurei24 on October 25, 2009
    Nice chapter. Now to get Young Optimus and Young Prowl into a berth together.
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  • From GhostsofElysium on October 24, 2009
    Lol. 10 points for the sectors.
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  • From Jessdo on October 23, 2009
    Boy am I glad you put up this new chapter. I was beginning to worry that it would end up as another unfinished fic.

    I really enjoyed how TFA Optimus figured out the purpose to being left in charge by G1 Optimus. The paint bombs, the logic puzzles, the crew still having to do their chores after it was all figured out, I LOVED IT!!! I bet, after seeing how Young Optimus commanded and figured out all the traps and puzzles, the crew has a whole new level of respect for him.

    And I can't *wait* to see how they react to Sentinel and the other-dimensional Autobots. Once Sentinel opens that big mouth of his regarding Optimus, I can just imagine somebot (maybe Sunstreaker or Sideswipe) saying, "If that was how OUR Sentinel Prime was like, then maybe Megatron did *us* a favor by tearing *him* apart!"
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  • From GabrielC on October 15, 2009
    This is my favourite fan fiction I have read to date!!! I can't remember if I've reviewed already or not but I love it!!!

    I really hope you get chance to continue it...sooonn. :D

    There is definitely not enough OP/P out there, this should change!! :)
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  • From Jessdo on October 12, 2009
    You know, it's been over two weeks since you last updated this. I it's not because you got writer's block or anything like that, because that would be a crying shame, since this is one of my most favorite fics here, so far.
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  • From ANON - djsaj on October 07, 2009
    P.S. Sorry for the second review on chapter 9, I forgot to tell you something. There's a recurring spelling mistake, you write Prowl small = prowl.
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  • From ANON - djsaj on October 07, 2009
    I always thought myself Optimus knows exceptionally well how others think and work in their minds and what he has to do to make them act the way he wants. Just think about Masterson and how OP goaded him into transforming Starscream's body. Despite the moment being hilarious and cool (OP's smirk XD), it found it surprising that he had learned about this particular part of human culture and knew now what "type" Masterson is. It's like he can analyze anyone he meets instantly just by interacting with them (at least it's like this since season 2).

    Finally someone who writes OP as the smug, bold glitch he sometimes is (again: him smirking at Masterson). It's sometimes boring/annoying that many fics depict him insecure, while he clearly shows he can kick butt and KNOWS it.

    I found the interfacing too short in my taste, but it was because you focused on the characterization rather than the smut.
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  • From GabrielC on October 03, 2009
    I haven't read much TFA fiction but I am a big fan of it and G1! You have captured the characters brilliantly. I love this story can't wait to read more!! :)
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  • From KyuKoneko on September 26, 2009
    I can't wait for the next update.

    I wish I could've seen the look on Sentinel Prime's face!
    I also wish Optimus Prime could've been there to see it,
    that would have been a riot too.He needs a confidence booster, poor Optimus.

    Also, I can't wait to see what the two Jazz's do!

    8D', 'KyuKoneko
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  • From shozurei24 on September 25, 2009
    God, I wish I could see a picture of Sentinal's face when Prime tells him his name. Priceless! He needs to get knocked down a peg or 2.
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  • From shozurei24 on September 11, 2009
    This was good, but just a little short. And Young Optimus seemed way more confident than he usually does. I thought he'd be on bottom. Just saying.
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