Reviews for Smooshed, or, The Nine Wives of Marco DiazBy : GeorgeGlass |
The development of the story and the way each wife was brought in was well thought out and engrossing. The virus explanation at the end begs for more stories dealing with it.
Thanks for writing and sharing.
Whew! Read all of that in one-shot and loved it. I keep waiting for the other shoe to fall. I love the way you're foreshadowing ominous events to come.
I wonder who will betray the happy harem first? Will it be someone in the group (our favorite Woolette, Janna, ??) or Tom or ...??
Also, what is going on with the magic? The brief flashes with Hekapoo portend something possibly joyous to come?
Is it Marco's harem and something about their bonds that keep them safe? Can anyone wield the weapons against the threat?
I can't wait for more to learn answers to these and I'm sure many new questions.
Thanks for writing and sharing!
I've said it before and I'll say it again, I love your dirty talk! This humilating use of Higgs was awesome and I'm so glad to see Tom getting some much deserved action. Truly, this chapter had it all.
I like most of this story. (Boob growth isn't my thing, but the rest is good) can I suggest the porcupine monster as one of his brides? He needs a monster girl in his harem
Reminds me of the book "Invasion" by Robin Cook, which I read because my middle school library had a very strange collection of sci-fi and fantasy that I don't think anyone properly evaluated. Loved that Janna finally got some anal action and I dig Britney's dance routine, which made me think of Symbionic Titan, which then made me sad, but then the sex made me happy again. Love that Star is still trying to find her place in the world and is still coping with her hard choice.
Please don't make Princess Spiderbite part of the harem. I really like her together with Slimeboy, and would hate to see them broken up. If you decide to include sex scenes that don't involve Marco and his Harem, that couple would be fun to see.
I'm really enjoying Tom and Rose trying to find out what the reasons are.
It should go without saying that I really enjoy the sex scenes.
I really love the way you do dirty talk. Also enjoyed the characterization of Hekapoo as well as having a full figured lady added to the mix.
I'm wondering if the weapons given to Marco and his ladies might be the key to freeing them from whatever is affecting them as well, because to me it seems like there are two kinds of mind control going on after the Tom's visit to Ponyhead. Or at least, Marco seems to be some sort of catalyst to counter the Possessed, turning them to something else.
Will Tom hook up with this teacher? That might be fun and I think Tom deserves something for all the work he's doing.
I'm loving the inclusion of Princess Arms, but I'm a little sad that her striking nose has been rinoplastied. I found it strangely attractive with the rest of her look. I'm hoping we'll get a reason why Mime is not to be included, because I would have loved for her to be part of Marco's harem, especially given the implications of her and those scarves she swallowed. Looking forward to see who Tom recruits to help his investigation.
On a constructive criticism note, I've noticed a few instances where the names of female participants gets mixed up. I know how tricky it can be with so many moving pieces.
Please ha e Hekapoo join in the herum next or soon.
Good stuff, man. Insterested to see what girls end up as Marco's partners.
this was a awesomely intresting story so far can't wait to see where this goes (no rush).
Awesome, always good to see some SVTFOE. Harem King Marco is the one true King lol Great work as always will be watching this story develop with interest.
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