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By : Kellendros

From heraldoftruth on May 01, 2008
I love this chapter, but I can't believe you just left it hanging like that in the end. Also, I will have to see how you handle it in the continuing chapters, but the shift from Kim to Wade could make this chapter feel like it was stuck in as a afterthought. I can't wait to read more.

Herald
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From ANON - Shego's Bitch on May 01, 2008
More Intrigue??? I'm beginning to think this story shall never resolve itself and the "Great Mystery" that is the open-ended, giant conspiracy you've set-up here, more so than if Kim and Shego are ever going to get together (dangling that carrot isn't enough anymore, it hasn't been for a while). You seem perfectly happy milking this story, adding mystery upon mystery without any resolutions, EVEN "meaningful" minor ones to mark the passage of progress towards a finale or climax. Not even the X-FIles had the gall to milk their show's plot (not for a lack of trying) long after it should have given up the ghost.

Far from adding to suspense, all this only serves to anger and frustrate. The small bones you do throw out and the ever increasing dead-ends or plot points that go no where (Nana's reluctance to help her own family, with her truly lame justifications, and Wade's frustrations are only the latest in a long string) and the dangling carrot of ANY KiGo (as I've mentioned) aren't enough to keep me reading.

What began for me as a great mystery by a talented, but unknown to me, writer, now drags on like a Telemundo soap opera or the beating of a dead horse. The story feels flat, without momentum or drive, and stagnate. It's all ego masturbation.

For me: I'm done. I don't care anymore.

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From ANON - Josh84 on May 01, 2008
Whoa, Nerd Alert!. I could barely follow this chapter. So many technical computer terms that I can't even begin to wrap my head around.

When it looked like Wade had finally gotten somewhere, the program kept stopping him stone-cold. No wonder Wade got so frustrated. Heck, I got frustrated as I read this. Even though Wade couldn't really beat the program, he was finally able to outsmart it; he got a good look at it, but now he's in more shock than before! What is it?! What are Kim and company dealing with here?!

Great, suspenseful chapter! Awaiting the next one, somewhat patiently. :p
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From ANON - Ratoncita on April 19, 2008
Wow this chapter threw me off completely ,I thought I had tinny foot hold on this whole nebulles story but this chapter b[ew that out of ms delusional mind
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From ANON - Josh84 on April 18, 2008
I loved the dancing between Kim and Shego! It was so sweet! I knew before this chapter was even posted that those two would definitely draw the attention of most, if not all, of the women in the club. It may not have been Hot Lesbian Sex, but hey, it worked for me. Now that doesn't mean that I don't want to see some actual Kigo before this story ends. Trust me, I want KIGO!!! ;)

Loved the change from dirty dancing to martial arts exhibition! The song was perfect for the scene! Kim and Shego's fights were always crowd-pleasers, and this one was no exception. Even though, technically, this was not an actual fight. ;) :p

Nana tracked Kim down to the club? Now that's just creepy. And Kim still doubts that Nana may know something? Sheesh, denial much?

Shego's loving her new physique more and more, and so am I! :D

This was an exciting chapter! Great job, as always. :) And as always, I'm looking forward to what happens next! ;)
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From ANON - Josh84 on April 05, 2008
This chapter was suspensful!

Truth be told, I didn't know what to expect from the fight between Kim and Lynn, though it's obvious that Kim did more than just hold her own. Of course, had she fought Nana in her prime, things may have been different.

I was on the edge of my seat during the conversations between Kim and Nana, and then Ron and Nana. I was half-expecting, and hoping, that one of them would give in and finally spill the truth. You've gotta admire Kim and Ron's resolve. But if they keep trying to keep everything that's been going on to themselves, they're going to eventually explode from the built-up pressure. If they only knew how close Nana really is with her questioning. And they actually think it's all coincidence? Like I said before, that type of coincidence can't exist in this case.

Well, there is still time before the roadtrip back to Middleton. What are the chances of another heart-to-heart talk between Kim and Nana before that happens? :p

And now, Shego shows up at the club. I can only imagine how Kim must feel about seeing her there. There certainly are a few possibilities. ;)

Awesome chapter! Awaiting more!
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From ANON - Josh84 on March 14, 2008
Once again, Kim Possible has survived another road trip to Florida with her family and Ron... just barely. ;)

So, other than a few suspicious things - the main one being the hostile takeover of BN by "El Presidente" - seems like the program is legit. Seems that the only thing that can be done now is play the "wait-and-see" game.

Lynn? As in the same Lynn that Corscan spoke to in chapter 28? I had a feeling that Nana was that woman! Unless, by some very, very, freaky coincidence, there happens to be another older woman that also goes by the name of Lynn. But, in this case, that type of coincidence does not exist. :p I sense that we will soon be learning more of Lynn and Corscan's past in the next couple chapters!

I think Ron could do with a little extra training with Kim. Of course, even with the mystical monkey power, there is no doubt that Ron would get more than just a little bruised and sore if he jumped in at the pace she works at.

Wow, the first trip out, the ladies wouldn't have anything to do with Ron. But now, after that swamp party, it seems that he's now got some street cred... or beach cred... whatever. Like Kim thought, Luckiest. Man. Alive.

Again, Corscan has left our heroes - and villainess ;) - quite puzzled. This is getting frustrating! For every step that Kim and company take, Corcan remains three steps ahead. They're gonna run out of resources at this rate.

Another fantastic chapter! Things are really getting good! Wait, what am I talking about? Things have been good from the very beginning. Just when it seems it can't get any better, you prove me wrong. Looking forward to chapter 47, especially the sparring match between Kimberly Ann Possible and Nana Lynn Possible! :D
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From Mcmacladdie on March 07, 2008
Whew... finally finished reading the whole thing. Sorry I don't have anything constructive to say, but I've always seemed to suck at that *lol*

Anyways, hope that you can post the next chapter soon :)
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From ANON - Josh84 on March 01, 2008
You know, now that Shego's explained it, it actually makes sense that this would be the way of finding out if this relationship is going to work out. Man, Shego really has put a lot of thought into this whole thing.

Wow. Very odd coincidence with Ron and the junior apprenticeship program. On the upside, if Kim did take Shego up on her offer to stay with her in Europe, she wouldn't have to travel across the world to pick up Ron for missions, because he would be in the same country. On the downside, it would also increase the chances of Ron seeing Kim and Shego together, and then Kim would definitely be in a bind.

By the way, is it Le Cordon Blue or Bleu? You used both in this chapter.

Anyway, like I said above, it's a very odd coincidence. Is it legit or a scheme? And if it's the latter, then who's behind it? I don't see any reason for Corscan do it, and considering the "sitch," it's definitely possible Shego had something to do with this. Of course, I have my suspicions on another person who may be behind it. Well, first thing's first, gotta see what Wade has to say about it.

Another great chapter, Lord Kellendros. Keep it up!
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From ANON - Shego's Bitch on February 20, 2008
"Shamrock?" That has to be THE cutest, most adorable petname for Shego that I've ever read; my heart nearly burst. Very cute and beyond adorable; it speaks highly of the love Shego's Grampa has for her. And he was an awesome original character. THAT was a very good scene.

Still no Kimmie and Shego sex? Not even another kiss? Damn, even the amish couple in the back row are wondering what's the hold up!

What happened to the oversexed, hyper aggressive, raging cauldron of libido -A.K.A. Kim Possible- who nailed more skirts than any rock band in the last 30 years combined? The Kim Possible who gave it up to Corscan ON THEIR FIRST DATE!? The One who engaged in multiple acts of freaky-deaky sex with multiple partners and many anonymous -and I mean many like "Wilt Chamberlain" many- one-night stands all over the world; where did she go? 'Cuz it looks asexual Kim Possible has returned from Bizarro World to swap places or that she's been hit by some sort of "prude ray" built by Drakken. Seriously. There's more sexual tension/heat in an episode of Matlock or Murder She Wrote, than between Shego and Kim.

I'm starting to think those two aren't ever gonna get together. Like Kim said, "where's the progress?"
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From ANON - Josh84 on February 19, 2008
Okay, love the jet and all its cool features. As Shego said, Motor Ed may not be that smart about a lot of things, but mechanic engineering is his definite element.

Good job with the confrontation. At first, I didn't realize it was all an act, but then I remembered Kim and Shego going over the plan in advance. Though things didn't go exactly as planned - specifically, Kim walking away and leaving Reggie alone with Shego - they still got what they needed, more or less.

Wow. To think that the Kraken Society, a society that Shego has relied on a few times before I gather, would refuse to help her when it comes to Corscan. Just what kind of original character have you created here? She's already been full of so many surprises, how many more does she have in store?

"I want you to move in with me for the rest of the summer break." Whoa! Did not see that coming! It does seem a bit fast. I mean, they haven't even slept together (And I'm starting to wonder if they ever will. :P), and Shego already wants Kim to move in with her. A little awkward... or as Ron and Kim put it, "Awkwierd".

Surprise, surprise. Another great chapter! :p And once again, you have left us hanging over quite a "cliffy." Looking forward to the next chapter and Kimmie's reaction. ;)
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From ANON - Josh84 on February 06, 2008
I had a hunch that Shego's mom was dead from the last chapter, and this chapter proved that hunch correct. That was a very touching moment. And yet it was the complete opposite with her dad - at least that's who I'm assuming it was. Obviously a lot of bad blood between the two. Man, I didn't expect a whole cemetery full of Go members. Of course, if there weren't, then they wouldn't have named it Go City, would they? ;)

Very interesting character, Torin Kaelan Go. I like him already. It seems to me that he's the "Godfather" of the Go Family. I guess that would make him the "Go-Father"...... I know that was a bad pun, but I just had to say it! :P

Drakken says that the long wait to launch his plan is just about over and yet it'll be another six to eight weeks before he actually needs Shego? What is the hold up?

As always, terrific chapter. Anxiously awaiting the next, as always. :)
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From ANON - me on February 06, 2008
Great chapter, it was sad to see that everything got stolen by drakken, and the method in which it was stolen was really strange, as is the fact why they can't find drakken, when they used to before. all around great chapter, but I'm worried that monique is drinking to much. Lol at mr. buzzy, that was funny^^ And how long is she going to keep shego a secret anyways?
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From Diamondflame on February 04, 2008
I've just today finished reading chapter 42 of Revelations of Destiny and just had to say that so far, it has to be my favorite story I've ever read on here, can't wait tell you post more chapters.
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From ANON - creativetoo on February 01, 2008
Another great chapter. I loved...Kim was in too much of a hurry to object, but despite her sense of urgency and worry, the fact that she was stripping off her skirt in a dark alley with Shego�s help prompted her to comment; �Y�know, this is not what I had in mind for the first time I got undressed with you��

Shego snorted and responded; �Yeah well, what are ya gonna do?"

Kim's workout at the gym was cool and her convincing those three guys to take her on in the ring was excellent. Kim's using the skills, both physical and mental, to defuse a situation which could have gotten out of hand was brilliant. :)
I don't particularly think that Drakken's behind the theft. Will have to see if I'm right or not.
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