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By : Kellendros

From ANON - Anon on November 28, 2009
Dahaamn!

After an absence of 38 chapters since Interlude the First - Past Imperfect, we finally get to peek in on our favorite mystery woman, Corscan Mataii - the one woman army! After brief visit with Miss Jolie (very nice), she gets down business... and business is good!

I mean, seriously, she was like a cross between Batman and Predator there! And armed with the best toys! What was thing she used, a minature man-made black hole or something? And that bola - that's something I could imagine a Predator actually using!

This woman is still an utter mystery. Just what are Corscan's motives? What has she got going on behind the scenes? These, of course, are rhetorical questions. I know it'll all be revealed near the very end, but that doesn't make it easier to wait!

Incredible interlude chapter, LK! Definitely reminds us that there's more going on than just the inevitable KIGO sex.

Keep it up!
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From Neihaera on November 28, 2009
Hmm ... is Kim the object of the experiment, or another component of it?
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From ANON - classic cowboy on November 28, 2009
awe, I saw you updated and I was hoping to see the [nuclear] fall out of Kim's confession to Ron... not that this wasn't great. Was actually curious on what Ms. C's been up to while Kim's been seducing the lovely Ms. Hothands.

regardless, good stuff, keep up the excellent work!
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From ANON - Anon on November 26, 2009
I think I've suffered second degree burns from this chapter. The first half - which may not be your best work, but still pretty damn good - was HOT, and the second was even HOTTER! And that is, to my knowledge, the closest that Kim and Shego have ever gotten to getting off together!

Okay, just to clarify; based on what I've read, the last chapter and the massage scene from this one were flashbacks, and everything from that point to the end is now back in the present, right?

From the way they were talking, it sounds like Monique knows about Shego's problem?

So, Kim's finally going to tell Ron about everything that's been going on with Shego? Based on the way he reacted when she told him about Corscan, I cannot imagine this going any better. But I guess we'll have to wait and see.

Great chapter, LK!
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From classiccowboy on November 25, 2009
Hot times with Kim and Shego for sure...

and here comes the trainwreck I've been expecting. Here's to hoping it isn't as bad as I'm thinking...
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From ANON - Moar! on November 23, 2009
Brilliantly done as always. However the length on 64 was not your usual. Beyond that I do not see where you were having trouble keeping in character. Brilliantly done and brilliantly executed. Looking forward to more!
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From ANON - Catrlgirl on November 23, 2009
You, Kell, are a master. You definately turned the temp up on this chapter. Great work. I have nothing else to say but bravo. I hope to see the next chapter very soon.
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From ANON - Anon on November 22, 2009
This... was worth... the wait!

Who is supposed to be the Bad Girl here? I gotta say, Kim's giving Shego a run for her money on that one in this chapter!

Before this chapter came out, I was imagining ways how Kim was going to "declare war" on Shego, though I gotta tell ya, Kim walking past Shego, wearing nothing but a smile on her face and towel wrapped around her neck, didn't came to mind. I didn't expect that, especially not that soon. But it did have an effect on the pale-skinned woman, which brings up the next topic on my list:

Kim has finally gotten a taste of Shego - literally! What Kim did was surprising, arousing, and hysterical!

The second half was excellent, too. That Kim is such a tease! Maybe that's because YOU are such a tease as well, ending the chapter like this!

On the upside, you did mention that you have done several chapters after this one, and will post them on a fixed schedule. Needless to say, I'm looking forward to them.

BTW, Thanks for mentioning my artwork at the start. Truthfully, I haven't gotten anything new done for several months. But, now that you mentioned me, I guess I'll need to step it up and get more pics done ASAP!

Outstanding chapter, LK!
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From skoshi4 on November 22, 2009
My, but that WAS worth waiting for! Guess Josh won't be illustrating this chapter either.
One quibble, hands are manicured, feet are pedicured.
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From ANON - Neihaera on November 22, 2009
Missed this, I did. "Several chapters" eh? Including more action and story development, yes? Not that this isn't hot enough to sustain fusion, and the interplay between Kim and Shego isn't grabbing attention. As for the second part being a poor follower ... I'll believe THAT when I see it, and I suspect even if I am willing to acknowledge it's somewhat below your usual standard, it'll still be head-and-shoulders above anything a lot of other writers are using as their performance bar.
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From ANON - Andrew on November 20, 2009
Excellent story man. Love the way you keep beating around the bush(no pun intended). One of the few stories that I keep coming back to over and over again. It's the longest and quiet possibly the best story on this site. Just one problem. WHERE ARE THE NEW CHAPTERS LOL!! I can't wait for you to post some new chapters. Until then, I'll just keep enjoying the ones you've posted.
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From IAmTheDude on November 10, 2009
Ok, first of all I have to say it, you are a frikken genius, the depth and scope of this story are beyond what many would consider a best seller. And more then 500k! that bigger than Many of the Books that I normally read. If you could ever find a way you need to get this thing printed and made into a book.
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From Zarrthtion on November 05, 2009
plz write more im begging you write more
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From ANON - Jk on September 22, 2009
Sooo what happened with this story, was one of my favorites on AFF
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From ANON - Josh84 on April 21, 2009
Hot... Hot... HOT!!!

Oh, this chapter's content now places first at the top of my list, right in front of Kim and Shego's "Dirty Dancing" scene! :D

So, with the exception of the first section, the rest of this chapter was a flashback, right? Based on the info from chapters 60 and 61, the present date is July 28; so the events that occured in this chapter took place between July 20 and 22. Is that about right?

Back in chapter 60 based on what was learned from Kim's journal entries, I thought that Kim and Shego's light kissing and more physical contact was as far as they have gotten. Boy, was I wrong! Thanks to this chapter, I now know that they've gotten as far as deep kissing-or as Shego put it, "mouth-fucking" (LOL)-and some serious heavy petting. In fact, we've finally gotten around to where they are exposing a little more skin... well, Kim's skin at least; Shego's got to see and touch the girls goods, but she's still holding out. Man, I can't wait to see (or read) Kim's reaction when they're both buck naked and she get's the full view of Shego's body.

On a side note, I like the change in roles. Near the beginning, Corscan was the expert and was teaching Kim a few tricks. Now, Kim's teaching Shego a few of the things she has learned. I can only imagine how it's going to be when they finally get down to business, if you know what I mean. ;)

It seems that Kim's urges are getting out of control. I mean, she was just about ready to jump Nereza, and she practically had to force herself from doing so. Heck, she's keeping tabs on how many days since she last had sex with somebody. That is both impressive and disturbing. Well, I guess it doesn't help the fact that she's been continually denied a piece of that ivory woman she's living with. :p

Speaking of which... What. Is. Shego's. Deal?! She has no problem pleasuring herself while, in her mind's eye, Kim is the one pleasuring her. Yet the real thing is living with her, not thirty feet away in the next room, and they both obviously want each other, but the only thing stopping them is Shego's "problem!" Why? Why?! WHY?!

So, Kim's decided to try a different approach and make Shego come to her; but will her plan work? Based on the present timeline, she has supposedly already initiated said plan, but is it actually working? I guess we'll have to wait and see.

One more thing I want to bring up before I close, LK. I know we readers are all anxious about Kim and Shego's... [ahem] first fuck, but what plans have you made for their first fight? I know in the past the two have had heated arguments, but none of them really qualified. And Shego said in chapter 41, "...but trust me, when we have our first fight, you�ll know it.� And knowing you, there will be one, and it will involve punching and kicking and blood and probably a couple broken bones between these two ladies, AND it will make all this stories previous fights pale in comparison.

Then again, if you choose not to, I can live with that. :)

Fantastic chapter, LK. Looking forward to the next one.
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