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By : Kellendros

From mouserr on September 15, 2007
while i wouldnt go so far as to call this a 'date' as much as the conclusion of a wager/business transaction it has all the earmarks of one of the best 'dates' a person male or female could ask for

starting in the previous chapter with all the action and adventure of the physicality they both thrive on and going through the tour then the fancy dinner at a posh hotel/restaurant to the house on the beach of one of the worlds greatest 'romantic getaways' it all but screams seduction ... by the end of the evening, when theres one final chance to back out Corscan has Kim so tightly wrapped around her finger that Kim is going to go through with it even if she is told every reason she shouldn't and Corscan essentially does just that, which is why i have doubts about the veracity of her 'what i can live with' claims ... she's spent a great deal of time and effort in shaping Kim's state of mind so that when the final chance to walk away comes and she 'orders' her to leave if she is only there because Kim 'owes' her she has manipulated Kim to the point Kim wants to know and is willing to step off the cliff on her own. no boot to the butt needed when you can convince someone its what they want

whether or not this is the case is yet to be seen but i can't help but wonder if the kick over the edge might in the long term be the kinder way to go.

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From immortal7 on September 15, 2007
okay couple of questions that i sure will get nothing more than a amile and a evil laugh that could compete against the joker. First what is Corscan doing. sure she wants to fuck kim crazy. but at the same time she seems to be tring to help kim be more comfortable with herself and just not hide from the world as much as she has obviouslydone to this point so much she has hide from herslef. now i know confidence is one thing and a better self understanding makes one i guess the term glow more make you more attractive but it seems like she is also training her for something. After this could kim truely feel about herself if it involves more hiding. I know some friends who had a hard time comng out so is that going to be the leading factor to the breaking point in the begining of the story and will Corscan be helping the problem or hindering it. And i will admit the costant asking if she wants to back out got on my nerves.i mean i knew the reason to a degree before Corscan opened up in the end, but it aslo showed a slight fracture in the armour of extreme confidence that we have seen in the older woman to this point in the story. And its about time Kim quit thinking and just did it. somethings require more instinct and less thinking. don't get me wrong i think kim is smart, but she needs to realise thhose tingles of her spider sense that saves her ass in fights can be used in other situations. any way enough ambling and sorry if i didn't collect my thoughts enogh to make a decent review psot soon later. I7
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From ANON - Punk Rock Princess on September 15, 2007
I almost hate you... almost. I know you have the next chapter waiting. So it's okay.
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From SupaNerd on September 15, 2007
What a glorious chapter, it made me laugh the laugh of a thousand feathers. The nerd proclaims this chapter awesome in the extreame. A Booyaa! The banter, very well done Lord K, very well done. Kim the curious kitten, very accurate. I liked the extreame sports touch, the biking and the low altitude base jumping, and the mountain climbing, and especialy the motorcycle riding. Oh yeah, Kim likes power between her legs huhh? Interesting. And it does make me wonder if Corscan kinda let Kim win in the little race they had, ya know? When they had to climb the mountain/hill, why would Corscan chose the longest way up, hmmm? Kim really seemed to push herself hard, ahhh, that redheaded competitive spirit, thats gotta be it. ANd Corscan although breathing heavily didn't seem all that worn out when compared to Kim, wonder why? Any clue Lord K? Eager, so Corscan like eager and Kim is, eager. Interesting, and what about that 'very potent, primal hunger' look in Corscans green hued (WTF green, what is she, when will we find out Lord K, please alittle hint, please?) hazel eyes, and Kim apparently likes it? Well, saw that coming with the fucking like rabbits comment (or something like it) in the second chapter, so does that mean that we're going to get to the HLS or the mysteries of the story anytime soon? Yes no maybe so? And a very accurate portrayal of Kims facination with high performance motorbikes, yes she really does like the feel of power between her legs and yes Corscan is right, she does have potential. Heh, yeah, but of what kind, (right now I'm picturing Kim Possible Misstress of Punishment and Domination, dressed in leather and lace complete with fish net stockings five inch high stilleto heels and a whip and a riding crop, oh yeah.) what king? Also, this is not a poo question, but is it just me or does Kim require alot of trips to the bath room than normal, if so why? Is it cause of her super charged alien/mystic/half dragon/godlike body, hmm, any clue Lord K? Ahhh, COrscan is going to see Kim soon, presumably for dinner and show they the usually activity a sixteen year old slogan shouting, miniskirt wearing, pom pom waving, panty flashing cheer leader virgin would ususally partake in. Ritual druidic sex, mass orgy, a night of debauchery-Marquis de Sade style, or what, hope we find out soon Lord Kellendros, I really do.
And I know my review isn't as long as normal, but for all the size of the chapter, very few things raised comments or questions (at least in my mind), just alot of good solid info, and plenty of sexual innuendo, heeehh, in your endo. HA! Yeah I know childish, thats me. Anyhoo, sorry but I couldn't find a may to mention the possible theft and missue of Kims bodily fluids or find a way to talk about the water without sounding like a crazy person. Sorry.
And to Lord Kellendros, continue on you magnificent beast of a man you, this story is the bomb (i like it, in case that wasn't clear)!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU RULE, please post the next chapter or two soon, please. Your ever humble servent, The SupaNerd. PEACE OUT.
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From immortal7 on September 14, 2007
por kim is adrenaline junkie tht will never be satisfied. and to be honest i'm not sure if i would ever want to se what her foreplay develops into after she gets a clue to things. any way good to see they haven't lost thier competanes and i the bedroom scene is goin to be hilarious as they try to up each other. any way post soon later
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From ANON - Cyraxr on September 14, 2007
And the plot thickens. Please update soon. Signed a fan of Shego.
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From PureEvilOne on September 13, 2007
Awesome update. The interaction between Kim and Corscan just keeps getting better.
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From ANON - me on September 13, 2007
Another birlliant chapter. I liked the whole race. I doubt I could ever do that. very sweet
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From ANON - Josh84 on September 13, 2007
You know, I had a feeling it was going to be in Hawaii. Truly paradise. Once again, another exciting chapter. I was sweating just reading the ordeal the two ladies went through. Can't wait to see what's next on the agenda - though I guess I'll have to. Still, looking forward to it.
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From mouserr on September 13, 2007
for a pair of adventure minded types thats probly the perfect 'date' there .. covers a great range of extreme sports that Kim loves and inna setting thats nothing less than spectacular ... im an avid cyclist tho i prefer touring over the grueling cross country in this i have done a bit of it and man ... loved it

bout the only thing id balk at is the BASE and thats mostly cause i dont trust a chute i didnt pack myself

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From ANON - PunkRockPrincess on September 13, 2007
Ah, I love how I thought chapter 14
was going to be hot lesbian sex
and then it wasn't. NICE.
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From ANON - Cyraxr on September 13, 2007
Wow that was fun to read. Please update soon. Signed a fan of Shego. "note to self chapter 13"
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From SupaNerd on September 12, 2007
Ahh, an excellent chapter with a most evil cliffhanger, why do you torment us so? Really, we're good to you, so why? But still, wickedly cool chapter. I like the start were Corscan once again either shows that she really likes Kim and wants to make this easier for her or is a really really good manipulator. Any clue as to which on it is? And yes Kims mom is right, Mr Dr P cannot stay mad at the 'tweebs, wonder why that is? Are they too involved in the conspiracy that is the manipulation of Kim? World saving things she needs to take care of. Hmm, who ever heard of HLS as a 'world saving thing' earth shattering, maybe. No fucking more twenty-four hour straight? Man, I guess I can live with that. And doesn't Corscan sound so 'reasonable' when reenforcing the idea that Kim owes her. I like that part. Kims random thoughts drifted to bondage, yeah, it's always the quiet redheads, but hey, at least shes not a librarian too. And when Kim spends that much time with Ron, cause if I recall your timeline correctly, that was when he started liking Kim, whats he gonna think when she just cuts him off to do her 'internship' thing? I really can't wait to read more about that, and about his reaction when she tells him about her orientation. Any clue as to when that's gonna happen? You look nice today. Yeah, Kim, thats the nerves about boinking Corscan talking, not your latent attraction to her, same thing with the flirty remarks during the meal to. And she needs to know her sexual preferance so bad shes willing to make what could be a HUGE mistake, alright, this is Kim Possible were reading about, if shes gonna screw up its gonna be big. Mr Forst and Ms Hui are the pilots, and Corscan doesn't go anywhere without at least one of them, hmmmm. Are they her attendants, is she part of some long lost mythical royal dynasty, cause I doubt she needs a bodyguard or that she really super codependant. Any clue as to what thats about? A private jet capable of going Mach 3, where can I get one?!?! Awesomeness!!!! And is it just me or is Corscan trying to impress upon Kim the need to be carefull to the point of paranoia, I mean I know that safety when engaging in sex is important, but it seems like shes trying to make Kim become ultra suspicious; the part about not trusting people at face value. Of course it could be taken that Corscan is in fact a time traveller and wants Kim to always know if her partners are clean because she contracted an STD in the future and died. It could be possible, any clue there as to which one it could be, yes no maybe so? The table manners of a starving wolf, could be worse, she might not even know how to sit down to eat a seven course meal with the queen with manners included, but it does seem like thats another thing that Kim and Corscan have in common, aside from being women of course. And the water, oh the water, is Corscan still trying to steal Kims bodily fluids, or just wanting to get her hooked on her 'special' water, hmmm? Kim opening up to Corscan and eventually responding to innuendo ladden comments with flirty remarks of her own, interesting, is Corscan good or what? AND I think that they either landed in Hawaii, for a nice walk (read gruelling endurance trek knowing those two) around before dinner at Corscans private residence there, or at some desolate island that they have to fight there way through to get to the food, kinda like a super survival course, before dinner and then ritualistic druidic sex under the stars and a full moon. Can't wait to find out which so please don't keep us waiting too long Lord K, pleae.
Continue rocking on with the story, it rules, as do you. See ya'!
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From ANON - it's me on September 11, 2007
Trippy as usual. Very nice. Now we're rollin'.
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From PureEvilOne on September 11, 2007
Another wonderful look in the life and mind of Kim.
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