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By : Kellendros

From ANON - List of Romantics on October 21, 2007
All Hail Monique: The Sagacious Black Buddha!

Everyone should be so lucky to have a friend to call them -go the the mattresses- on their crazy sh!t, ESPECIALLY when said 'friend' would have to look far to the horizon for the point at which they PAST 'crazy shit' into the realms of bat-sh!t craziness. Ahhh, to be young, confused, and with the power to cripple, maim, or kill at will... good times.

But were shall things go? Shego vowed vengeance, she vowed her retribution, her payback... and that infernal Tiger-woman, Corscan, is suspiciously quiet. Even with Monique chipping away at Kim's head of messed wiring, guilt, and Gibraltar sized denial, will KP even recognize the well-springs from which her current maladies are springing or will they flow unabated past irrevocable actions? It wouldn't surprise me if the next chapter were titled "The Sword of Damacles," but for whom, on whom, and where will it fall?

As always your technique is faultless, your rising action is... rising, with plenty of mystery. As for my other comments, they are mostly personal. I'll save the broken record for another instance when my emotional rancor is high and my filters off-line... *cough* KIGO *cough* I know, subtle like a brick.

Keep up the good work. It's always nice to see updates -duh- and it sure would be nice to see how Shego came out of her near fatal encounter with KP: The Confused/Brainwashed Agro Dyke.
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From ANON - me on October 21, 2007
That was so funny! Monique is hilarious, her attitude is different from what they show on telivision but it's funny as hell. The way she talks, referring to herself in the 3rd person, so funny! my gosh... I was doubled up in silent laughter the entire time.
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From ANON - Josh84 on October 21, 2007
Ah-ha! Now this is something I definitely I'm looking forward to: Kim finally tells Ron the WHOLE story... well, maybe except for the part about Shego. How he takes it, I can only begin to imagine! After all, he's always been prone to drama. Whoo!

Needless to say, another great chapter. More needless to say, I'm looking forward to the next one.
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From tecate on October 21, 2007
I really wanted to hear Kim's version of what happened during the fight with Shego. I still don�t know much about her frame of mind other than she went CRAZY! It was nice though to have a light humorous chapter after so many heavy dark ones. I also liked how once Kim started talking about Shego she became one-track minded about it. Tasty! I can�t wait for the KiGo! Gimmie more please!
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From kigolicious on October 21, 2007
I just wanna get one thing off my chest. I wa really really hoping to hear Kim's version of the Shego butt kicking so I can discover WTF was going on in her head during it all. What else was she thinking that she did not say. We heard 'I don't want you', but I also wanted to see inside her head such as visuals going on in her mind... that inner voice, ya know? I guess maybe you'll provide that insight at a later point, I hope.

Okay, that aside, to me this chapter served to provide a good laugh between Kim and Monique. I didn't really learn anything to put it simply.
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From PureEvilOne on October 21, 2007
More Mo is always a good thing. Any chances of you writing Kim/Mon a story or oneshot when this epic is complete? I can't even begin to try to predict Ron's reaction to Kim's revelations.
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From ANON - me on October 19, 2007
Wow... that was intense. The last seven or so chapters, I can't believe it. So awesome! I have a suspicsion. Was Shego the one that didn't work out with Corscan? after those gliding steps did look familiar. I must say the last line of chapter 22 gave me a heart attack, if I had read that without the next chapter being there, the suspense would have been to much. ...so awesome.
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From tecate on October 18, 2007
Finally SHEGO!!!! And what a way to introduce her into the story. I really thought I knew where your story was going up until this chapter. I mean WOW, just wow! When I first read that this story was going to be set around STD I was like �Great yet another STD KiGo (or story with KiGo in it) fic. We don�t have enough of those.� :roll eyes: But the way you have everything wrapped around the STD timeline is very interesting� cool actually. I like for things to be different and this is definitely a different type of KP fic. At this point I can�t call it KiGo because I am so lost on how it is going to become KiGo. My brain hurts from trying to figure out how that is going to happen.

I think this was the first fight scene where I could really feel what was happening. Some of the hits Shego took made me cringe in pain! I could really follow what was going on and usually I am lost on the fight scenes. I would have liked for there to be more dialogue between Kim and Shego but I know it was kept at a minimum for a reason.

There is one thing nagging at me about this chapter. How did Kim get there? Was it a mission? Somehow I feel that is NOT the case. Kim was alone and out for Shego�s blood more that trying to stop anything. So with the last chapter (22) really filling in the blanks I feel this chapter opened Pandora�s Box and raised so many new WTF questions. Oh, and Kim has lost it! Seriously! I love it! More Please!

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From ANON - Summer on October 18, 2007
"I! Don�t! Want! You!"
- Denial much? haha.

Great fight scene. It reminds me of the motivational poster "Love is a battlefield". Poor Shego really got the shit knocked out of her. Ya made me wince at the thought of some of those hits and injuries. I am so anxious to know what Kim's thoughts on this event are, which I am sure are coming. A definate WTF moment for Shego. I am now just left curious on how this is going to become Kigo. We already know that Kim has been having dreams of Shego, but uh, making up so to speak seems like it will be a little difficult. Thanks for getting this chapter up quickly!

Favorite moment/line:
�Well, looks like someone�s been practicing some new moves to go along with their new look, eh Kimmie?� Shego growled. �But really, don�t you think that outfit is a little too butch for you Princess?�

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From ANON - Josh84 on October 18, 2007
Holy ****!!! You know, I could understand how Kim lost control when fighting Monkey Fist; he almost killed Ron. But this time she was truly trying to kill Shego; and for what? A little wet dream she had involving the villainess? Talk about OVERKILL! Thankfully, Shego was as strong as she was, otherwise...

It seems that Shego somehow recognized the style that Kim was using. Hmm, I wonder how that could be? I have my suspicions.

Another fantastic, suspense-filled chapter! Keep it up!
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From RWO on October 18, 2007
Oooh. I didn't know shego would come into the story like this.
will wait for updates.
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From ANON - List of Romantics on October 18, 2007
Hmmmmm... Shego, Arghl-uh! (With Apologies to Homer Simpson... as he shall never know of the perfection better than his beloved doughnuts; Shego)

Whoa... Kimmie was a cold blooded, cold hearted bitch! *shocked gasp* She's become Corscan's "mini-me!"

But, how I drool for Shego's "Big Payback!" (See: James Brown for more about said "payback")

I am pleased to see some LK love for Shego; it only makes me rabid for the next chapter. And I'm more than blissed out at the thought of Shego's lovely revenge... and me thinks Shego 'knows' of Corscan (probably not in the Biblical sense) or has at least encountered her due to her recognition of KP's new fighting style/mannerisms.

My only gripe is I wish this chapter were twice as long, but I say that of all Shego goodness. Well done. You played KP like a brutal and psychotically messed up bitch tweakin' on roids (her body fat has to be in the low single digits to get your Traps to "pop" as you've described; very "prison hardbody" of her, but that fits with her new found Hulk-like rage. Personally, I blame Corscan; but what else is new? I LOVE to hate that woman.

Waitin' patiently for Shego's "Big Payback."

I was also very touched by Drakken's concern for Shego's well-being; just because your crazy and bent on world domination, it don't mean you don't care.
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From beeftony on October 18, 2007
HOLY SHIT! o__0

Damn, that's *twice* that Kim's gone completely berserk. It's enough to make me wonder if Corscan gave her the whole "kill if necessary" talk just to get her to take out Shego. Of course even Corscan couldn't have foreseen Kim's dreams about the green woman. At least that's what I assume Kim meant by "I! Don't! Want! You!"

Kim has some serious anger management issues, and if she's willing to *kill* Shego over a couple of nightmares, no matter how long they've been going on, she *seriously* needs to seek professional help, because something's not right there.

Now we finally learn why Kim looked so beat up in Chapter 2, as well as how this story ties into StD. I LOLed when Drakken was like, "Why hasn't she taken an interest in him yet?" Sorry Dr. D, but her weakness is no longer hot boys. It's big, muscular, manipulative females. ;)

Curious to see how this will turn out to be KiGo, since I don't see Shego as the type to get over an attempt on her life that easily. However I have faith in your ability as a writer and I'm sure it will be an enjoyable ride.

beeftony
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From PureEvilOne on October 18, 2007
Kim meet Shego and came out swinging. Shego was totally unprepared for a Corscan trained Kim.
After this confrontation I am looking forward to the Corscan-Shego meeting even more. Great fight. Great Chapter.
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From ANON - Cyraxr on October 17, 2007
That last line was unexpected. I wonder what will happen next. Signed a fan of Shego.
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