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Reviews for Revelations of Destiny

By : Kellendros
  • From ANON - Josh84 on November 02, 2007
    Another intense chapter! Wow! What a fight! Those were some clever techniques that Shego used, especially the one she used to escape.

    The confrontation between Ron and Corscan started out how I expected, but the part of Corscan going hostile and putting him in a one-handed chokehold was unexpected. Let's just hope Kim never gets word of this little incident.

    And now, Shego's preparing herself for a rematch! Looking forward to that!
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  • From heraldoftruth on November 02, 2007
    I must say that this is perhaps the best chapter so far, and it does leave its fair share of questions. I am rather surprised that Corscan let herself get as injured as she did though, I also liked how you acknowledged Shego's flight capability and the inherent difficulties of flying with propulsion from your hands. I am also surprised that Corscan reacted as violently as she did towards Ron it seems that she would have seen the benefits of staying on more amicable ground with Kim's best friend, though I guess that she might have been trying to drive a wedge between them and even if that is the case it seems to be a rather overly blunt way of doing it, there would be so many more effective ways of doing it. I know she was stressed and annoyed, but it still seemed a little out of character. Anyway, I loved chapter 27, so keep up the good work.

    Herald
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  • From PureEvilOne on November 02, 2007
    Finally Shego met Corscan. It was everthing I expected and more. Excellent work. Overprotective Ron getting put in check beautifully handled. Overall awesome chapter.
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  • From ANON - me on November 02, 2007
    I really liked this chapter. I was waiting for a clash between shego and corscan, but I wasn't expecting it so easily. I liked your ending, it's nice to see shego get ripped, and less lazy.
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  • From tecate on November 01, 2007
    Curse you again Lord K!!! Now I like Ron! Ok, this was one of the best Ron coming to terms with Kim being gay scenes I have read. Granted you did place your story BEFORE they started dating but Ron’s feelings for Kim were still there and I really enjoyed reading his struggle. And since you know how much I despise Ron you know that’s saying something. Again, I like how you’re placing Monique in the center of everything. Kim really needs a crutch I mean friend like her. Oh, and PLEASE don’t tell me you’re gonna have the Tweebs out Kimmie!!!! I’d rather see Ron make the slip!
    Still missing my Shego!!! Bring it man, bring it!

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  • From ANON - Cyraxr on October 31, 2007
    I thought that Ron would at least except it and he even has the same bad feeling I have about Corscan, not that I am saying she is a villein but she is pulling strings at the right time to get what she wants and mortal is not a word I would use to describe her. signed a fan Shego.
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  • From PureEvilOne on October 28, 2007
    25 & 26. Good chapters. Interesting developments. excellent emontional content. I look forward to more.
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  • From ANON - jsparker84@aol.com on October 28, 2007
    Whew! I'm glad that Kim and Ron were able to work it out. Ron's just glad that it was Monique who knocked some sense into him. If Kim had been the one to slug him, like Shego, Ron would've had a dislocated jaw.

    Now there's trouble with two captial T's. The Tweebs have overheard Ron's outburst! This cannot bode well. I know this much - if those two breathe a word of this to anyone, and Kim finds out, they will not make it to puberty.

    Ron taking matters into his own hands? Oh, this I've got to see (or read)!

    Another great chapter!
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  • From ANON - LIst of Romantics on October 28, 2007
    Thanks for the quick posting, always appreciated! How much is left?

    Ron's not being true with his feelings is only going to blow up in his face later, badly. The same can be said of his snooping, but it will be nice to gather more dirt on that Corscan devil-woman and reveal more of the mystery. Still waiting on that Vengeance with a healthy dose of Comeuppance... Still nothing of Shego, AND DID KP TELL THOSE TWO THE FULL STORY OF NEARLY KILLING SHEGO!? I get the distinct impression that she hasn't. And why does Dr. P always play the heavy? Yes, her mother rocks (that Milfy Sex-Kitten Siren), but Papa P always plays the naive and emotionless Ward Cleaver.

    So, still waiting for this Powderkeg of Deception, Deceit, and Destruction to go critical, but with multiple possible fuses:
    1) Jim and Tim blow the "gay" whistle about Corscan and Kim. (These Two Can't Keep This to Themselves)

    2) Shego ('nuff said). (Most Delicious of All)

    3) Ron earns his salt and gets the dirt on that sapphic Tiger-Lady/Devil Woman, blowing the whistle. (Hinted At)

    4) Kim FINALLY takes her head out of denial's ass, using the brains god done seen fit to give her (but hasn't used much of) (Never Gonna Happen; She's in Pocket)

    5) All of the Above.

    6) 1), 2), 3), 5), BUT NOT 4).

    Excited for more! Waitin' patiently for SHEGO, the EXPLOSION, and "THE BIG PAYBACK!" Rev it up!
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  • From tecate on October 27, 2007
    Ron was OH SO sickeningly RON in this chapter. I just wanted to reach out through the computer and slap him. Running out of gas! Too funny. It was agonizing to have to read this chapter because I just so don’t like Ron when he is being so, well… Ronish which you captured quite well. I also liked how you handled Rufus and didn't make him just a fixture, but put him into the story. I have to feel bad for Kim and I am wondering what this is going to do to her "relationship" with Corsan since typically we like to displace our hurt/anger. I can see Kim being mad at C for her problems with Ron. Also, I would love to know just what exactly Kim left out of the explanation since her sexuality really is the least of her worries right now.
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  • From ANON - Cyraxr on October 26, 2007
    Figured Ron would need processing time after he heard the tale but I didn't think he would leave like that. Signed a fan of Shego.
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  • From kigolicious on October 26, 2007
    Thanks for the new chap... can't wait for the action to begin again.
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  • From ANON - Josh84 on October 25, 2007
    Well, that could've gone better, but then again, I guess it could've gone worse, too.

    Good job. Looking forward to how this drama unfolds in the next chapter.
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  • From beeftony on October 25, 2007
    Well this is certainly a first. A KiGo fic that actually captures Ron's buffoonish antics without making him look like a total idiot. A lot of his comedy is physical, which is difficult to convey in writing. You did an excellent job of capturing his essence while still steering clear of "Season 4 fucktard." Even though he's appeared in other chapters, this is the first time I feel like you've really nailed his character. He's a goofy guy who runs away from stuff he can't handle.

    Speaking of which, I think his reaction to Kim's coming out was the most realistic I've seen since Blackbird's "Maternal Instinct." Ron is inclined to flee from his problems, and while he invariably comes through in the end, there are certain periods where it seems like he's abandoned Kim altogether. He doesn't mean to hurt her, but in his mind, he'd be hurting her more if he stayed and told her how he really felt about this. He needs time to process this, which I can understand.

    I second epyon avenger's comment on Rufus. He's a very visual character, which is difficult to put into writing. I think you did an excellent job of conveying his thought process in a way that made him seem to have more common sense than Ron, even though his actual intelligence is limited by his species.

    All in all, great chapter and I can't wait to see how this turns out. :D
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  • From ANON - List of Romantics on October 25, 2007
    How do you trust your oldest and best friend when they don't show you the same courtesy? Poor Ron's been played for a fool; and they say true friends will have the decency to stab you in the front. Nobody hurts us like friends or family.

    Frankly, I have no sympathy for KP; she got off light if Ron's still on speaking terms.

    For some strange reason I'm hearing Fiona Apple's "Criminal" in my head -how appropriate.

    Another good chapter, but what of Shego? I salivate at the hellfire and sh!t-storm she's going to rain down.
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