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Reviews for First Time

By : harry102
  • From ANON - White-Orchid on December 14, 2006
    I love this story with a passion but there's just one question that keeps plaguing me (besides where's the next chapter?): Where the hell is Jonny's spunk? I mean, the kid has ejaculated almost once every chapter but I have not yet heard any mention of Jonny's pimp juice (please forgive the Sex and the City esque terms- I really don't feel like saying semen or sperm tonight for some reason). As a female, I can't call myself an expert on the male anatomy, but I was always under the impression that every time a man experienced an orgasm, he would ejaculate. Now if I'm keeping track properly, Jonny has cum in his jogging pants, in his car, in Jessie (several times without a condom- props to you, though, for placing a great amount of importance on protection), in a pool, and in a kitchen; all of these places would normally have to undergo some "cleanup" after such steamy love makin'. I love your take on sex, I love your dialogue, and I love your respect for the naked human form (down with censorship!), but I can't help but question the realism of this piece when there is absolutely no mention of Quest jizz. Okay, after that really weird rant about sperm, I want to tell you great job, and update soon!
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  • From ANON - Mike on December 06, 2006
    Hi,Harry. Your story "First time" is probably the best sexual fanfic there is. I really like that its realistic, and focuses also on time "between fun". M/F stories are only sex stories I read. Keep up the good line. Its also "sweet" no hartcore material like BDSM or similar.
    I do not like those.
    I hope you would write an epilogue to it. Its wery good, well written, correct, and has only 1 (unrealistic) aspect on it. As a male myself, and knowlence of subject, I cuarantee that no male on this earth is able to ejaculate 16 times inside...24? hours.
    No problems. Its easily "forgiven". All in all, a great fic. And devinetly deserves an epilogue.

    With best Regards
    Mike
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  • From ANON - tamoyb on December 01, 2006
    I love both of these stories,but what happened to the third story?
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