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From Trelynne on October 31, 2009
Okay first off: THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE CHAPTER!! *MILLIONS OF HEARTS* Okay now that I am done abusing the caps lock; I have to say I randomly came online to check up on a couple of stories- since I have been busy with school and work i haven't had much time to come online. And what do i get to see? ANOTHER CHAPTER! I was bouncing off the walls!
XD the laptop on my lap hit the floor cause i suddenly jumped up and started to dance around like a loony fangirl ^^; Points of love: Scream is not longer thinking Glock is Tron yay ^^
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From ToonQueen on October 25, 2009
Awesome awesome chapter~ I love how you write Dante. :3~ I really hope to get my next chapter posted soon. The whole Charge and Opie drama is interesting. Scream should just be able to get every bot he wants and be a happy cluster fuck family. >:3
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From Crossfire120576 on October 23, 2009
THANK GOD AND PRIMUS YOU ARE BACK!!! I AM SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO HAPPY!! I am all for you continuing THIS STORY and NOT the fanfiction ones!!(even though I am dying to know what happens in the sequel to Beauty Within) So, please, please, please, please, PAHLEEESE WORK ON THIS STORY!!!
I LOVED and ADORED this chappie!! I can NOT wait to see where you have this go!! I would like to see SOMEWHERE down the line, Charge and Opie if not friends, at least respect each other!! I am proud of Scream in this chappie, too!! She/he made epic steps forward in his/her healing!! The way you presented that, too, was fantastic!! Very good job!! I love Dante, too! He seems like he is just what Glock needs!
So, all in all, this is an EXCELLENT chapter and I look forward to the next one(please let it be sooner rather then later!!) Keep up the GREAT work. Oh, I would love to chat with you on MSN or Yahoo-if you ever find the time. Just email me for either ID and I will be glad to give it to ya!! Bye for now!!

Transform and Roll Out!!
Cross_fire1205@yahoo.com aka
Jaime
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From coconut81 on October 21, 2009
Hell yeah! But I hate cliffhangers!

I love the tension between Charge and Opie. I hope they can work things out, though! I really do like Charge, I so badly want him to be the perfect leader, haha. Glock's influence on Opie is kind of creepy, but I love it, it totally works. I must admit, I got a little teary-eyed when Glock shook Scream's hand!

Good luck with the next chapter! I can't wait to keep reading!
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From coconut81 on October 12, 2009
I spent the last few weeks reading the other Market Commodity stories in my spare time, and I absolutely love the direction you've taken this!

I have to say, I'm really happy that you brought Scream and Jag somewhat back together. I actually got really giddy reading those chapters. I was so sad when they split up, I hope everything works out okay for them!

You do a really great job introducing new characters and developing older ones. I was worried that I wouldn't be able to keep track of all the new clones, but there is a really good balance of new and old. I'm so excited that you're including a Megatron clone!
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From Trelynne on October 05, 2009
LOVE ^^ absolute love! You have no idea how many times i was 'awwing' during this chapter ^_^ it is just so sweet it makes me want to huggle Opie to glitches! Thank you for the chapter
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From ToonQueen on August 22, 2009
YAAAAAAY! I so wanted Jag and Scream to start getting back together. ;_; And the whole man love triangles going on. ;-; FFFF I need to write so much too, I've been super busy with work and life. It should be calming down soon though. I promise!
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From Trelynne on August 16, 2009
*Screams and bounces up and down* I am so so so so so so so so so screaming over this chapter *Billions of hearts fluttering around!* I am so hyper and i loved this chapter so much! it was worth the wait SO worth it! you have no idea! I was about to go to sleep after reading the whole first story then i checked up on your profile and BOOM! there was an update to this story! and i screamed, in rl, i screamed out loud as Daniel suggested the three some! I am glad no one was home! i would have woke everyone up! Sorry if im rambling! I cant help it i am so hyper and i cant wait till you get free time to wrote more~ GL with work dont get too stressed out! I can understand the work thing, ugh i hate my work but we all have to be adults and deal with it..sadly~ anyway thankyou so VERY VERY much for this chapter is has made my night! And i wont me able to sleep tonight i am so hyper!
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From ToonQueen on July 24, 2009
*** AoM6 ***

Awwwwh ;-; I missed the Jag x Scream relationship. ;-; Also, nice to see Shanon doing her thing. :3 She's my fav human character of course.

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From Trelynne on July 24, 2009
*Waves* Im not dead! Just stuck in Hawaii with family for awhile. Anyway i love you Sharon! you put the idea in his head about Jag taking care of both of them. *fluttering hearts* And i have to say thank you so much for the chapter! I cant wait to see how those three will end up ^__^
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From Rockinmuffin on July 10, 2009
Hey, an update! ^_^ *Does happy dance* It�s been a long day so my review probably won�t be as long as it usually is, but I know I need to review right away or I�ll never get to it. xD

Awww, Jag! I always get so happy when I see him in the story. I think it�s nice that he now has an understanding of why Scream is the way he is. And Opie would be the one who�s sweet enough to explain it.

I can only imagine the mental repercussions for putting other clones through what Scream did. I mean, the experience was enough to cause Scream to go temporarily insane and give him mental trauma that still haunts him to this day. Perhaps this experience could cause some hidden trauma in the clones punished this way that will show up at a later date. Or perhaps the system has already been tested and proven to be ethically sound and safe? The funny thing is� you�d think that most people who�ve gone through such a terrible experience wouldn�t want anyone else to feel exactly what he went through, but because he�s doing it to prevent further abuse to others, and because Scream is a clone of Starscream, I could kind of imagine him doing this; (�this� being putting others through what he experienced).

D: Poor Samie. I�m not going to lie; if I was nothing but a head and a torso, I probably wouldn�t want to live any longer either. It�s hard and frustrating to be so dependant on others, especially if you were an independent person with others who were dependent on you; though, considering his age, this may not be the case for Samie. Really, there�s nothing more frustrating than feeling completely powerless and helpless. Still, at least he�ll be getting shiny new limbs, but it�s not quite the same as having your own flesh and blood, I�d imagine. And even though he won�t be helpless forever, being quadriplegic for even a limited amount of time would have to be hard to deal with. At least good ol� Danny Boy will be there for him in his time of need.

Oh man, the moment Opie went to Flame I got a bad feeling. I mean, one I doubt romance is currently the first thing on Samie�s mind and, two, Flame is kind of vain� and shallow. I imagine he would find someone missing their arms and legs to be ugly. I don�t think he could be attracted to him until he got his new arms and legs. At least, that�s what I thought initially. However, since he was once ugly and seen for the beauty he potentially had, perhaps he�ll take that into consideration when he sees Samie. Besides, as mean as Flame is, he ain�t heartless. Still, no matter who he hooks up with in the meantime, Flame seems determined to have Rwanda when she becomes of age; he wants his African princess! xD

Flames black fetish amuses me. He reminds me of a girl I went to high school with.

D�awww. D: Poor Jag. I don�t want him to get in between Scream and Opie but I really want him to have a happy ending. He needs somebody else who can love him fully and wholly who wouldn�t even think of looking at another. D: I just don�t think Scream is the one for him, ya know. Gosh, Jag, stop making me sad with your Love!angst.

Heh, seems that Samie get along much better than I had anticipated. I�m glad I was wrong. ^_^

�You�re so gorgeous that I�d suck your cock 24/7� -Ah Lawdy. Flame, what you lack in tact and subtlety, you make up in� eagerness. xD

Silly Samie; every teenage boy should know the difference between an orgy and a thressome. Shame on you Samie, shame. What kind of horny teenage boy are you?! Lol.

Nice chapter; lots of things going on. Can�t wait for the next installment. ;)

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From Trelynne on July 08, 2009
*Jumps up and down clapping!* I love it!
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From Trelynne on July 05, 2009
Wow just wow... I finally caught up! Sorry I haven't reviewed before but I was so far behind, just a few days ago I was in book one >w< And I have to say my last nights reading this was well worth it! I love how you go back and forth between all of the different pairings it is very enjoyable to get so many different smut scenes! And the length and volume of your chapters just makes my jaw drop! You are a wonderful author! You have had my Mech loving arse hooked since the first chapter of the first book! This plot bunny has just grown so much. And you haven't lost my attention once.

With all of your twists and turns with this plot. Pulling so many characters in. And also being able to keep a balance in with your story so the reader doesn't feel like there is too much going on with all of the characters. There is true magic here; you have created something that has blossomed into this wonderful story! I can�t tell you how many times I have had to have my fan on to try and cool myself off! I am still a little sad over Jag and Scream... okay I really am sad about them. They were the sweetest ever. And I love Opie, I really do. But I still miss that wonderful Prowl clone! Call me a sap for love, but I just can�t stop myself from wishing at Jag would could back to Scream. Opie could use the clones' love and attention I just know it. Having both clones that know Scream and know how he is. I just can�t help myself from wishing to pull those three together in a room and lock them in and see what would happen.

^^; I�m hopeless when it comes to wishing for wounds to heal and for deep relationships to re-bloom and grow stronger. *Dreamy Sigh at own thoughts* I can just see both Opie and Jag thrusting into Scream helping him to live up to his name~. It�d also help pull Charge and Doc together so they wouldn�t have to share anymore~ Since Scream would have the Prime clone his seems to desperately need and want. And with his new attitude towards interfacing this could be a very good chance for him to prove to Jag that he would be loyal to Opie and him. Seeing as how Scream still has his feeling for Jag deep within his spark and his love for Opie also both being the center of his attention, maybe it could be permeate? Some dramatic event happening slowly over time that dives these three together, forcing each of them to rely on only each other, giving each the chance to connect and grow a deep connection so that there could be a bound formed and the three could be blissfully happy. >< darn it I started to ramble about my idea.

Anyway back on topic, I love it, your work is simply tantalizing and draws me in so much I know I am going to keep this story on the top of my fav folder just so I can check on it daily. Random odd note: Could there be a chapter of punishment for the three that hurt Opie? You know have all of the officers help punish the three for their actions. While Opie watches? I know Clipper is not the type for it, but maybe the guilt still gets to all of the officers? And after one day of checking on them in the brig one of the officers snaps from one of their comments and goes to the co-commanders to set it up? Any way! I love the story cant wait for more! Bye bye~ Trely

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From Rockinmuffin on June 05, 2009
Age of the Machine 4:

Aww, thanks! Just so you know, it�s a pleasure to review when I get the chance. And when I nitpick at what I consider to be a little plot hole it�s just because I think the author is mature enough to evaluate the situation and work to fix it and improve their story (because, no matter what, there�s always room for improvement). Honestly, not many people out there take constructive criticism very well so it�s nice to see someone who realizes I�m not trying to insult them or flame them or anything like that. ^_^ Really though, I love this universe you created! I really should work on the mini-plot I started in Part 1, and even then I have so many ideas for future plots, but I�m the type of person that just can�t force myself to write when I don�t feel inspired. I really admire how you�re able to type out these super long chapters and then update a week later with an even longer chapter. I wish I could do that!

Also, a not to all you other readers: I know I�m not the only one reading this series; come on guys, leave the girl some more reviews and let her know her hard work is appreciated! xD I know you�re all busy, but c�mon! Do it for the sexy robots! They�re all voyeurs at heart and need to know that you like reading about them. Give �em a little confidence boost.

That�s got to be tough on that little group of people, you know, having the task of repopulating the planet thrust upon them. Honestly, I don�t think I could do it, even with a clone artificially inseminating me. I mean, raising a family would be nice and all, but I�d want to do it on my own time. I think it would be a little easier on the older women, whether because they�re mature and selfless enough to put the needs of the earth before their own or simply because they�d be around the right age, but I would imagine some of the younger girls might grow agitated and feel stressed over those expectations put on them.

I see what you did with the Shado-witnessing-the-rape thing, and it�s good that you�re working to cover your tracks, but that sort of logic still seems kind of twisted to me. According to former president Clinton, oral sex doesn�t count as sex, but I would still consider forced oral a form of rape and most definitely sexual abuse/harassment. Even if this is the view of the clones, I would still think they would be extra careful about what other clones did to the new recruits because of the abuse they had recently endured. Well, I suppose I could kind of understand it if this is what the clones think; they were originally programmed to be over-glorified sex dolls so I suppose they would have different views on sex and rape if they were initially meant to take that sort of treatment. I�m still kind of iffy about this but I understand your point so I�ll just leave it at that. ^_^

I like Charge. It makes me happy that he made a motion to change how they introduced mechs to mech-bonding so that it would be a little more� humane. I love Prime clones; they�re so passionate and have such a sense for justice. And of course Opie is just the epitome of frickin� sugary-sweet diabetes-inducing cuteness. Gah! Stop being so awesome, Optimus! xD Heh. That�s like telling a bird not to fly.

When the sparkling started tapping inside of Scream, I immediately thought of a scene in the Alien movie franchise and pictured the sparkling bursting forth from Scream�s chest in an explosion of energon. And I laughed a little bit. I�m an awful person, aren�t I? xD

�I love Grammy. �Nuff said. :)

Hmm, wouldn�t it just be wonderful if Scream started craving pickles dipped in peanut butter. xD I�ve never been pregnant so I don�t know if this is true or not, but I heard that some women get extremely horny during a certain period of their pregnancy. So it�s pretty suspicious that the ol� horn dog hasn�t been getting any from his usual bunch. It�s kind of sad that Scream is basically dumping his mates for another mech but perhaps this will give Charge and Doc a chance to be a couple like they had originally wanted before Scream and Jag had their little break up.

Still, you can�t deny that Opie and Scream are cute together. �Cuz they just are.

Opie: Can I be your baby�s daddy?

Scream: Yeah, sure chick-a-boo, why not? In fact, let�s get married!

Opie: Fuck yes, let�s do it!

And so they did!

xD

TC was so precious when Opie told him his sparkling was moving. He reminds me of those old-fashioned fathers who go out and buy a bunch of cigars to celebrate the birth of their first kid.

Haha! Sharon�s still got it! I can see her still keeping all the clones in line even when she�s in her eighties. She�s a tough ol� girl with plenty of spunk!

xD Oh Lordy! Almost forgot about KeKe. I kind of feel bad for Bond, but then I think of what it would look like if a building fell on top of him and then I just stop caring about him getting raped and dominated by a Ravage clone and just start laughing at what a dumbass he can be. Besides, I�m still sore with him for helping to concoct all those rape schemes.

Poet�s dirty rhymes amused me. �I�m no child! I want to be wild!� That one was my favorite. xD

�Then lay face down, spread your legs and open your ports.� Gosh Keke, you�re so romantic. I just can�t understand why the ladies aren�t throwing themselves at your paws. xD Lol.

Well, nice chapter! And if you didn�t fall asleep while reading that long-ass review then congratulations! xD

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From Rockinmuffin on May 28, 2009
Review for Age of the Machines 3:

Rover is such a grumpy old man; God, I love him. xD

Muffin�s perceived stereotype towards teenagers amused me, especially since I�m technically still a teenager. You got it, Muffin; all teens are pot smokers. We all also play our music really loud and have no respect for authority. Mwahahahaha! >:3

Oh Jinx, you and your owner�s daughter. �That�s what I like about high school girls; I keep getting older, they stay the same age!� xD

Oh my� You know it�s bad when Flame is already semi-flirting with �em. Bet that ol� Sunstreaker clone can�t wait for Rwanda to turn 18. Still, it can�t be healthy for a young tyke�s psyche for them to get away with smacking at ol� Flame�s aft. Hopefully this won�t become a common occurrence so the kids don�t grow up thinking that it�s okay to hit people if they deem it fit. xD That, or they�ll all just have spanking fetishes when they�re older.

D: Man, everyone picks on poor Opie. That Prime clone just can�t seem to catch a break. Are all Seekers serial rapists, or is that just a Decepticon thing? You know, it kind of makes me wonder if that sort of thing ever really took effect on a clone; maybe make it go crazy and actually take advantage of their human owner or something, back in the good ol� days when the Earth wasn�t a wasteland. Still, I don�t understand� If there was an officer watching the whole time then why did he wait until all three Seekers had their way with Opie? Why wouldn�t he have stepped in when all the trouble started? Seems kind of twisted to me. >.> On a side note, it was nice to see Jag again. I missed that guy.

Awww� See, Opie? I told you it wouldn�t be long before you got to have fun with Scream. :D

Ya know, considering how much positive advertisement you give to Dr. Pepper, they should pay you. xD Haha! �Drink Dr. Pepper: It�s like a part in your mouth and everybody�s fucking!�

It�s no surprise to me that Dinobot knows nothing of romance. A mighty warrior has no need for, hssss, love! It makes me laugh that a little human woman kicked him out of the bunk. Sure, Dinobot talks tough but we know who wears the pants in that relationship. And, here�s a hint: Dinobot doesn�t wear pants. Lol.

Dang, that Sandy is one lucky woman! What I�d give for chocolates and a massage.

Good chapter; nice and long. As always, can�t wait to see what happens next. ^_^

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