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From Trelynne on May 28, 2011
I know nothing has been posted for this in a while, but I wanted to stop by and tell you thank you so very much for all of your hard work hun. You spent so much time working on this and I truly enjoy reading it, I still go back and read it from the very beginning every now and then when I can. Your work is wonderful, and its totals easily over 1000 pages in Word. I wanted to just sent you a little message saying that there are still people out here reading your wonderful work and enjoying it, I hope you are in good health.
-Trely

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From Teddybears on December 26, 2010
Hello! I've been following this series for the longest time, and it was this story that finally prompted me to get off my butt and sign up to leave a review for your awesomeness. Do you have anything planned for another Ratchet clone? I would love to see a non-con Ratchet scene, but of course, that's just me. Thanks so much for writing all your fics, you're simply amazing.
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From tanisa666 on December 15, 2010
LOL *-*new chapter ^^
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From tanisa666 on July 07, 2010
I loved it ^ ^ can not wait to see if they will be rescued, and what happened to Doc?
please....update soon ^^ i love this fic
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From Scienceteacher on June 23, 2010
Review for Family Ties pt 4:

It's a bit confusing trying to figure out which clone's which. I'd recommend using their models as a description a little more often. The only one you seem to do that with regularly is your Megatron clone. Be a little more descriptive of your sex scene as well, it will really add some more depth to it all. Especially if it's from the adolescent-type curiosity of Zero-the-observer. You know the type - I'm-supposed-to-act-like-I'm-not-looking-but-I-can't-peal-away-my-optics! And 'do I have that stuff too'? Where is it?

All-in-all, plot development is going well.
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From kuroikitsu on June 07, 2010
I've been sitting on this for a while, it was just on my laptop in a word doc waiting for me to get some net. (sucks living in a signal deadzone). So yeah, I've had it typed up and just kept adding stuff, so I hope nothing contridicts itself but if it has its because my thoughts changed and or I got more questions over time.
I was just thinking�. There is one couple we�ve heard next to nothing about (except the fact that they are/will be together). Whatever did happen between Inferno and Muffin? Does Flame ever really try to �get his revenge� for Inferno leaving him, though I have no doubts that Flame really doesn�t actually want Inferno that way. It�s easy to tell that Inferno is the �mech� of that relationship, but what really are the dynamics of it? How deep does the emotional attachment go?
Speaking of emotional attachment, can Rumble admit his �attachments� out loud yet? Would he be willing to call Beachcomber and Clipper his bondmates? What are Clipper and Beachcomber like with out the Rumble, or is he the only reason they are involved at all, through Rumble�s incredibly possessive claims?
Now, about the part I just read, starting with section one (because its always best to go in order). Bond�s effect on Jag is quite interesting. In comparison, Jag�s constant calm and businesslike manner has always been pretty intimidating so to see another clone has such an effect on him. Does Bond know what his presence does to Jag? Why is Jag affected so much by him? (And because my mind jumps around muchly, I got to thinking� Will any other clones experience a spark connection like Scream and Opie? Do all the clones have Sparkmates?) Is it because he used Bond as part of his experiment? How many people realize that Jag is starting to lighten up some and not be so anal about everything? Is he happier because of it? Jag�s mental description of the tickle test made me lol soooo hard. I was on the floor. Especially with the smirk. I could totally see Jag doing that and like Steel catching sight of it and going �huh, something must be wrong with my optics. Gotta have that checked out�.
Part of me totally felt sorry for Starscream during this chapter. My heart hurt for him, especially because he never would feel the total understanding that most of the clones freely give to Scream. It�s also sad how much he refuses to admit that watching the clones makes him happy or comforts him. He has the same problem as Rumble did. Because he refuses to admit weakness he misses so much. He won�t just accept that ppl care for him, it has to be forced on him, rejected, and then proven yet again. Such a sad life�
Can I just say Jamie is absolutely adorable!!!!!! I was totally prepared to hate him for what his original did to Dante, but I just can�t. I�m really voting for him with this, though I thought he would have gotten really interested in Jester� Hey, what happens when Sharon tells him that she loves him? All the clones just seem to want someone to love them and then they develop their own sparks. But the spark he has isn�t his� So if Sharon does love him, will he get his own spark? Would that completely cure the virus and get rid of his glitch? What would happen to the original spark? Would it merge with the new spark or would it be rejected from the body or would the new spark itself be ejected? Interesting thing to think about, yanno. And why is it that TC always attracts the highly emotional clones? It�s like he needs drama or something. How could Sharon possibly convince him that boring is good and not so boring????
And I love Groove. How�s life with him and Grammy (Sally� I�m totally still dorked out that that was her name). We hear a lot about her and Steel, but not about her and Groove. How is the search going anyway?
Oh, we know that Scream got Starscream�s drama queen-ness and total aerial ability, Jag got Prowl�s anal retenativeness and his suber organization and hyperfocus, Opie has the self sacrifice and leadership down pat (though he doesn�t know it), what about the other clones? Groove is a superior dancer but has he realized that he�s like super awesome at sneaking up on people? Has McCoy realized his dead on aim with a wrench? Not that that�s really that major to the plot but I have too much time on my hands when college is out. Now if only I could get constant net access- then life would be perfect.
And it seems to me that someone�s slowly developing some pleasure programming!!! Out of this group, Dunce is my favorite. Might be because we spent the most time with him and Scott or it could be that absolutely adorable air he gives off. Can�t really compare because we don�t hear much about the others, though I am getting a decent grasp of their personalities. (How do you do that, tell us so much in so time???) Now my question is, waaaaaaay back in the beginning, before the world was formed (okay, not that far back, just back when TC was onlined), TC told Sharon that he felt unhappy and unfulfilled because they never used his female half. Will the same thing eventually happen to Dunce and if so, what will he do or say to Scott about it? Woman (both in rl and in here) seem to be more tolerant of that sort of thing, being more willing to play with a port than a guy would a cord. Actually, are there any long term affects that happen because of that? Now that I think about it, that aspect has never really be considered. It�s like accidental abuse if it happens to a pleasure clone because their made to seek and feel pleasure and at some measure that is denying them part of their existence, but if it happens to a non pleasure clone�� And I�m totally jealous of the clones by the way. If I was that flexible�.. And here�s a question, have any of the clones with the pleasure programing ever just had an orgasm lke Dunce did, because he literally couldn�t shut down again? Or does the pleasure programming itself ensure that it�s safe for them to continually shut down as many times as overload is achieved?
As for Charge, I�ve gone between liking him and hating him so much I really can�t decide how I feel anymore. He�s like the guy you want to hate because he does stupid ignorant shit and your all prepared to ignore him and hate him and then he buys you the necklace that you always wanted �just beacause� even though you never told anyone you wanted it. That�s kinda how I feel about him right now.
I just thought about this, but you said that Tron�s throne was made out of living clones who still have their spark attached, right? Well, when the unit does rescue Charge and Doc (because they will), are they going to take the sparks and power cores and use them to cure some of the infected ones? Or rather delay the virus of some of the infected ones? Kinda said that that�s the only cure that we know of.
Hey, hey hey hey. I just thought of this. Charge, as a hybrid will never fully be an Optimus clone, right? Well, we have Tron, who exemplifies all of Megatron�s bad traits (all the things that made him a Tyrant) and we have Glock (and to some extent Stun) who although are currently Galvatron models represented all the things that did make Megatron a great leader when he chose to use them. Opie, as Optimus has already admitted, exemplifies all the good in Prime so will there an Optimus that shows the weaknesses of Prime? Or is that Charge despite the fact that he is in true only half Autobot? Would that clone, if not Charge, be sparked or not? Would he be under Tron�s rule as well?
And I�ve got to ask, what was the Motormaster monstrosity anyway? It sounded like a cross between Motormaster and movieverse Soundwave. I�ll be honest I was both really creeped out and fascinated by it. I�m also fascinated by the fact that he still considers the fact that others eventually accepted the pain and torture as part of their lives weak. Does he still not realize the strength of spark it takes to bounce back from something like that? I suppose it�s because he has not been broken. Part of me wants to know what will happen if he does and the other half wants to know what happens if he doesn�t. Or atleast not in the way he expects. Even if he never willingly accepts it and never begs Tron for the pain or facing, he will spend a good portion of his existence atleast incredibly paranoid. Probably longer than those who let themselves �break� because they know they are broken. Can�t fix a problem you don�t know of. But should Charge not break completely, but go back changed (like with a case of excessive paranoia) isn�t that still a break? Hasn�t Tron still won? It�s still his influence that would be controlling Charge�s life even if it�s not in the way one would think of at first.
Is it only the Optimus clones that have their cables cut or does Tron wait until his slaves are good and obedient to reattach it? Are the 10 hours shifts going to be where he�s left alone in constant pain or will he be thrown to the infected clones for their pleasure? What�s going on with Doc in the meantime? How close are Colt and �the birds�? Considering that everyone�s on high alert, how long before their arrival will the others realize that they are there? How will they be greeted?
Sorry for the lateness and ton of questions�. I�m starting to suspect that�s my job now. I never just say what I like, I always have to ask five million questions about it. Oh well, brain probing is fun! See you next chapter!

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From tanisa666 on May 25, 2010
This fic is exciting me too much, especially the parts about the 'perv' Scott with Dunce, Charge, also loved the performance of the poor clone Bumblebee, I hope that the Charge has pity him and takes it along when get away, after all, he is not guilty for the acts of Tron, is just one more victim (though I'd love to see him suffer a little more XD).
anyway, I love it ^ ^

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From Scienceteacher on May 23, 2010
Review for Family Ties part III

You are getting good at developing a base character for each character in merely one paragraph. They are good, concise, almost visual descriptions which bring them to life in the mind of the reader. I love how we all seem to see Megatron clones as having a natural, unconscious ability to dominate other clones. They are not necessarily 'evil' by nature, just very dominant to all clones but their own. Perhaps it's because we believe that the only model a Megatron clone would truly consider an equal is a 'twin' of himself? It will be interesting to see if Zero can learn to blend in with the other Decepticon clones - or does he lean more towards the Autobot models?

Also, (to pester you with brainstorms and theories as equally as you do me... LOL) there seems to be an unequal ratio of men to women in your plot as well. Do the women plan to 'share' the hunk of a man that they have available? would their clones become jealous - especially the Megatron clone since he won't exactly like that someone else can do something he cannot. (get a girl pregnant to mention one thing) How's the food supply going?

I'm still working on my next chapter.... Sigh, 20 something pages and I've just now got around to what is going on in Little Rock under our favorite 'evil Megatron' clone. BTW, has there been a rumor going around about the hunting packs - you know, since there's rumors going around about the Mixed Unit led by Daniel Trakersly.
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From kuroikitsu on May 16, 2010
One thing is, you must be glad to have more people reading again right? Knowing people are reading makes writing more fun, right? And back to my usual ramble of questions�
First, since the love triangle is now common knowledge, how many people know about Jag�s part in all this, especially since right now Jag and Opie seem closer and in more of a relationship than Opie and Scream or Jag and Scream? How do people see that, because just as Drew easily decided to blame Opie for the drama between Scream and Charge, its easy to misconstrue it as Opie trying to use both Scream and Jag (though I suppose most people know that Jag wouldn�t put up with that kind of thing). It does make me wonder about the other clones and humans who weren�t in the situation and what they think about what is happening.
And about another pair of clones, will Dante ever not be so jealous of anyone who looks at Glock? It makes me wonder where he gets the energy to be that jealous all the time! I know Glock has used that to his advantage before, but does he ever tire of the completely obsessive partner that is Dante? I mean, Dante would do anything for him, especially if it kept him from other clones but� I guess what I�m trying to ask is, has Glock (or will Glock) grow tired of Dante�s possessiveness that he gives him a reason to be so completely jealous?
I find it absolutely fascinating how the clones deviate from their mechs even when they have the same memory echoes and feelings that the mechs do. For example, Glock is perfectly content being the shadow leader and have the spotlight on his handpicked partner to lead. Stun is more than content to follow Glock and help him with his ambitions. The actual Galvatron trusted no one and would never willingly give up leadership- even to someone he picked to follow him. Yet, even though the clones feel the need to have the blind loyalty of the rest of the unit (Glock said so himself) they are able to push back those urges. Was it made easier by the fact that this was something he had intended even as a Megatron model? Was it just pure stubbornness to be like Tron and his original mech? Hey, here�s a question as future partner of the future leader of the unit- Opie will probably just be called Prime (because Optimus was Prime), but what will they call Glock? I mean, such positions have titles even if they still call the clones by their names. And who will be the future human leaders anyway? I mean having clone leaders are great, but I�m pretty sure the humans would like for someone human to be in a position of power as well and Sharon is starting to get up there. When things settle down and they really start to rebuild, she won�t be in a condition to lead anything (I don�t believe) and if she is, it won�t be for long, so that just makes me wonder.
Oh, I loved the changes between the clones and the mechs in terms of ablilties and alt modes. It just seperates them more and shows the differences, though I do wonder if some of the new Cyclonus models can�t warp or if some of the Galvatrons are self standing cannons�.
Starscream�s possessiveness of Opie was something I truly loved. I seriously doubt he�d leave them now (kind of like Ratchet and Wheeljack). It does make me wonder, how does he feel about his own clones? What will he think when he sees Scream whose modified himself to be more femme? How will he feel about the whole crazy relationship thing with Scream Opie Jag Charge and Doc? It�s obvious he bores plenty of favoritism when it comes to both Opie and his own clones so I do wonder what his reaction would be to this� What is his preference for Scream? Wait� now that I think about it Starscream basically claimed Opie. What will he tell Jag? Even if no love occurs between them, I doubt he can deny Starscream forever and I have a sense that Starscream will never be content with just being with Opie once or twice. Would Starscream essentially become like a ghost mate? (Part of me just wants to laugh at the idea that Opie would have 2 Starscreams). If that did happen, how would Jag react? I mean, I could totally see, eventually, if he was continuously denied, Starscream just might spark rape Opie whenever he chose- it just seems like something he�d have no problems doing after everything that happened to him in his life� Hey, can the ghost sparks have any effect on the others without the help of Opie, like how sometimes people feel or sense human ghosts, even if they have no clue what it was? Just wondering� (btw, Little Prime is the most adorable phrase I�ve ever heard of)
It�s really interesting, I hadn�t noticed until I started rereading this (I so have no life), but TC has shown every sign of being has emotional- if not more so, than Scream since the beginning. At first I thought it was just a TC thing (because Thundercracker holds the calmness record according to most of us fans) and there were no other clones to compare it with, but it really is a flyer thing. Even Bond had his moments of extreme emotion for seemingly little reason, though he was the most calm (if cruel) of the three. Interesting dynamic, now that I noticed it. Although since it appears that seekers here have no need for trines, I suppose they really don�t need to have a dynamic at all. It does make me wonder, since TC can�t seem to keep a clone mate, what will happen in the future when Sharon is gone (I don�t want her dead, I�m just thinking far ahead like forty or fifty years)�
Now, I now Scream is not very rational in the best of times, much less times like� now, but has anyone thought about mentioning the fact that half the reason there was so much drama in the fact that he want to date Opie was the fact that Charge really really really wanted his sparkling? Like Charge did say at one point, as long as he and Doc could hold their sparkling he really didn�t care what Scream decided to do. It just seems totally illogical that Charge would leave after demanding the sparkling like that (am I the only one to think so?) Then again, my judgement could be skewed because I do know what happened to Charge and Doc so I know Rhinox wasn�t abandoned. Speaking of which, even if Charge could find it in his spark to abandon the baby does Scream really think Doc could leave someone so small, helpless, and adorable behind? Does he really think that Doc would let Charge abandon Scream and Rhinox? Though I suppose it does give Jag great opportunity here, since those two haven�t been alone together in Primus knows how long�
I find if fascinating that Jag picked Sandy to be their human. I doubt he�ll have any complaints except from, perhaps the two femme clones (I�m not sure they would really be happy in a marriage with that many men)- that does make me wonder about multiple marriages. We have several people in one marriage, but what about one person in 2 marriages? So what will happen when they get around to proposing to Scream, I mean will he be mad that the whole arrangement was basically made without him, will he be happy that they want to marry him? Its hard to get a lock on to what I believe Scream is going to do. There are so many options that he could go that its hard to determine. At this point, I�m not even sure if I think he would say yes or not.
One thing I�ve just got to know. Who is JAG going to tickle? Now that he knows what it is, he has to do it to someone, but who?????
Wait, so the infected clones need spark energy? They feed off it??? Wait, they do have logic so I just have to wonder, if someone could convince an infected clone to take a human partner and that it would gain a spark by being with the human, would that work? Or does the virus ensure that it will kill humans on sight? Or does the human influence only work once the virus is contained??? But from what I�m getting and maybe I�m wrong- but the infected are like clone vampires, surviving off the life of the sparked clones, right????
And I�m totally depressed after what happened to Doc and Charge and the other sparked clones. That�s just all I have to say.
Poor Dunce with his lack of pleasure programming. At least Scott is trying to make it better and easier for him, despite the lack of programs. I always find it adorable when the clones realize that their reactions and actions are just like the ones humans have and that its okay to be unsure or confused. Don�t know why I love it so much, but I do. So sour apple suckers are the equalvent of Dr Pepper for these clones? That amuses me so much. (Dr Pepper�s my favorite soda and sour apple is my favorite flavor lol. Next thing you know one of the sets of clones� probably Zero Cool, will love cheesecake)
So.. that�s most of my questions for now. One of these days I�m gonna get up to a 2000 word review (I�m almost at 1700 lol) Did we give it to you hard enough this time? Lol.

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From Scienceteacher on May 07, 2010
Review for Family Ties part 2

kuroikitsu, very sweet story line going on here. I wonder when he'll realize he's sentient. Oops! We haven't found out if he has a spark (or 'energy core shield' as the ranger team calls it). Wonder when he or his newly found human companions find out? Can he (and other sparked clones) detect the eve sparks when they bond and send out an eve spark pulse. I'd never really thought of how far reaching those periodic pulses might go. Now I'm sounding like you, aren't I? Coming up with new questions that I'd never thought of before. Granted, I have a multitude of side characters amongst my Unit that I never do more than mention... hmmmmm...

Back to finishing my own chapter. Been writing it very slowly in 4-8 page sections. CTS sucks!
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From ToonQueen on April 30, 2010
Ack! I have a lot to catch up on. Love how Dante is doing science~. The Scream and Jag relationship is good Soap Opera drama, (I mean that in a good way.) I kinda got lost with the humans though, I need to reread it and get who's who. XD

Interesting idea that mechs turn into what their originals have turned into. You metioned that Skywarps already with a human or bonded won't change into Cyclonus? Same for Hotrods and Megatrons I assume?
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From kuroikitsu on April 23, 2010
Market Commodity Review:
First thing I must say, I loved this chapter. You always seem to answer my questions in the best, most unexpected ways. The day before you posted this chapter, I had just been thinking about this fic on my way home from work (that�s why I have so many questions, I just think about it at random times�) So I was really excited when I read it.
Forgoing my usual format, I�m going to start with the segment about Opie Jag and Cyclonus, because Jag is my favorite and I absolutely loved it the most of this entire chapter. Even though thinking on it now, Jag really doesn�t mind it when he knows about infidelity beforehand, I totally didn�t realize it until you said it. Couldn�t help but notice that unlike the deal he had with Scream way back when, Jag demanded that Opie�s cord remained just for him (and Scream) while his ports were free game. Spark sex is done via aft ports, so does that mean that other mechs have virtually free reign to Opie�s aft? Or did he just not realize that when he said it? Speaking of that incident with Scream, didn�t Jag and Scream accidentally have spark sex with Travis�s �sons� and therefore claimed them as (reluctant) mates? What ever happened with that? Though I can see the entire situation changing because of not only the circumstances that occurred in but the simple fact that Jag is much more� sexually relaxed than he was before. Speaking of which, what exactly is going on with Scream? I know he was stuck between two sets of mates, but now that Charge is not around (how long will it be before they notice that he and Doc are missing?) will he take the opportunity to consummate his new/old relationship? Makes me wonder, now that Bond is strong again, will TC want him back? The mech was heads over pedes and then he�s pushing bond away (because of the glitched programming) but now that Bond is even stronger (mentally and emotionally) and more dedicated to his chosen mech than before, will he want him back, or has TC found a new lover. I�m starting to see a trend here in certain clone types. Scream and TC have been in a lot of relationships compared to the other clones haven�t they? Or maybe it�s just that main characters are elaborated on more. It was a nice surprise to see a Cyclonus dedicate himself to an Optimus clone. Totally wasn�t expecting that since most people think of Galvatron when they think Cyclonus. It makes one wonder how different would the mechs have been if Cyclonus had dedicated himself to Prime? Will there be an Optimus clone also captured with Doc and Charge for Cyclonus? As for the subject of marriage, now that I�ve thought about it, I think the first couple to be married should be Torie and Storm, actually. Their relationship seems to be the most stable and I feel like they would get married because they wanted to be together and not as a way to keep the relationship from falling apart or anything like that. That makes me wonder about the number of woman and eve sparks, compared to the number of men and sparked clones. It would suck if� Daniel and Speed (first two thought of) wanted to get married and couldn�t because of the lack of women/ eve sparks.
Now speaking of certain kidnapped clones, will what happen to Doc and Charge? Will the experience help Charge understand Opie more? Will he be less inclined to be quite an so intolerant towards Opie? How will this change Doc? Actually I wouldn�t be surprised if Doc came out of this in a better mental condition than Charge, but I also wouldn�t be surprise to be if this was just the thing Charge needed to become the strong loving wonderful leader we all know he can be? I also wanted to know what will happen with our new crew of humans. How well will they adjust to the unit? Will their clones be updated with pleasure programming (as that seems to be the trend to ensure that clones can enjoy sex as much as anyone else)? Will there be controversy over the newly remade religion? Here�s another question, are any of our new military band related to any of the survivors from the Unit. (I can just picture Mike finding his niece or someone there�) And since you mentioned the band infected clones, do you mind terribly if I tried something? I hope not, so I�m going to try it (I wanted to pm you first but that just didn�t happen) also, I kind of wonder what happens when one band of infected clones meets another, do they ignore each other, band together (now that they have a common goal under Tron) or do they ignore each other? Did Sharon ever find a cure for infected ones (other than an already made spark, because just how many of those will they have on hand?) Do they even have any leads? Actually, which decepticon created the virus anyway? Despite the fact that Swindle got the constructicons to create the clones, I don�t think either of them created the original Trojan and Starscream got Soundwave to help him modify it, so who truly created it? (Just pure nosiness on my part) Are there any decepticon sparks who just hang around watching like some of the autobot sparks do? Can the free sparks communicate with each other or just with Opie? Are there any free sparks that just watch the infected ones? Just wondering� I�m going to get to writing and hopefully, my review is helpful again.

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From tanisa666 on April 18, 2010
loved this chapter,i can not wait to see how Charge will escape and what will happen to the clone Bumblebee, by chance they will meet with Tron?
Thank you for including my favorite character in this chapter ^ ^
please, update soon
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From Scienceteacher on April 10, 2010
If this is your first attempt at writing a FF - you're gonna be a heck of a writer!

My guess is Frenzy.

I did like how you went into the actuall health effects of long-term exposure to volcanic ash. Having once lived near an area with an active volcano, I remember these effects fairly well. Though the eruption ended quickly and the air cleared out before people died. Yellowstone's eruption would/will (remember it WILL happen in real life - we just don't know when) produce many deaths due to the silicates getting deep into lungs. They've found a whole fossil bed in one of the north western states where every animal's bones showed evidence of long-term ash exposure resulting in death. And it was caused by a previous super volcano eruption.

I stayed away from that topic, though its the reason why my Unit human members didn't go out without their off-world survival suits on for the first year. And also why they were kept primarily in the trailers - where the ventilation systems could be designed to filter out the ash.

Very good beginning! Can't wait to see what happens to 'Cero. Perhaps in a year or more of wandering - he will hear whispered rumors of a group of humans/clones/mechs and will begin to track them? (little plug there... forgive me...)
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From kuroikitsu on April 09, 2010
First note of business, I haven't dropped off the planet or anything, I just had one really important goal to finish before I could review- I had to finish at least the prologue of my cassetticon side story for AoM. I felt like a horrible person otherwise, because I knew I would just put it off. (Random fact that I'm throwing in so you don't have to say he/she all the time is that I'm a girl. yay.) Sadly thats just about all I've got done on the story besides the most basic of plot outlines, but something is better than nothing right?

Now, on to things that are so much more important than my procrastination and the reasons for it, the wonder chapter of scenes you wrote for me. (I felt all special and giddy inside, btw) I'll go in order so its easier to keep track of. Wow, the compromise you worked out for the religions was amazing. I was wondering how that would go, but I completely wasn't expecting that. I like the new definition of marriage (and with the way its worded, it seems those future generations won't have the same problems we do with like gay marriage). Grammy's name is Sally???? Don't know why that surprises me so much but it does. So, what about Groove, by the way? Did Steel like comm him to tell him that they finally won Grammy over? Or will it be that Steel is having his moment with Grammy and then Groove will have his own before they all get together? How will the others in the unit react to the news? Is everyone happy? Do some think Grammy's too old or that she was forced or anything? Are Grammy and Steel waiting until their new bible is finished before telling the others of the new Cybertronian/Christian hybred religion, or have they been teaching them all along? How do the children react to their 'Sunday school', if thats the case (since I'm not sure if they still do it on Sundays...) Does the religion have a name? (Just wondering...)

I'll have to admit, I was a little (actually a lot) scared about what would happen when I realized there was another mega- excuse me galvatron model around. I could see how Glock could patiently wait to be the top clone, but I was worried about how Stun would react with a galvatron already headed to teh top. I'm glad that they were able to compromise so easily without having to have some sort of war. And now Tune has his own clone to gush over so Dante won't have to kill Tune. I did love Glock's inital hate towards his changes. Are there any later changes that happen that he notices that he hates? (Galvatron was stronger, but I believe Megatron was a better politician when he wanted to be)

I am simply dying to know, is Opie more worried about Jag's reaction or Scream's to what he did to help heal bond? At this point I simply don't know. I'm unsure where this relationship is at all. I mean, we all know Scream is almost obsessed with Opie. I know that Jag still loves Scream (don't think he will ever not be madly in love with Scream), but he feels something (not sure if its obligation, hope, or something more) for Opie. And I'm pretty sure that Opie loves Scream and feels something for Jag. I think its a little more than obligation but I'm still not quite sure what precisely it is. I feel like he doesn't want to test Jag's limits any more than he wants to make Scream jealous, but he will do what he needs to for the group. It makes me wonder, how does new Opie copes with the possibility that he might be making a mistake? What if Scream finds out about the Cyclonus thing and can't forgive it? What if Jag mentions how (atleast twice) Opie hasn't been faithful to his vow of only Jag and Scream. (It might have been more but I remember those off the top of my head...) Then again, if Jag was there, and actively involved, could it have been considered breaking his promise? I want to know Jag' point of view, it seems like he's putting himself in the same situation again, only twice as bad. Now both of the people he care for have to interface with others for the good of the group. How does Jag deal? How is he dealing with the fact that Scream barely acknowledges his existance anymore? I know Charge isn't directly in his face about all the chaos thats been going on, but has the esteemed leader been trying to get a rise out of Jag for his involvement in the situation?

And now its Charge's turn. Does Charge realize that what he's doing is harming the people around him and could break their trust in him? If Steel, Clipper and Storm had come to him earlier (before Charge knew about Opie maybe?) would it have made a difference in his attitude, or would he have always try to lock away half of his programming and be a perfect Optimus model? It seems to me that Charge has become even worse since Scream delivered. How much of this is confliction between his decepticon and autobot side, and how much of it is possession over Scream, how much of it is love for Scream, and how much of it is fear of change? Charge got used to it being the three of them, and I suppose I don't believe that Opie is the only reason he is reluctant to let that go...

Speaking of the three, yay Doc! I love him, honestly. I do wonder if sometimes he and Jag meet up for their own support group of sensible mechs with crazy mates (occasionally joined by Steel when Groove feels particularly adventurous or crazy). Doc is the most understanding clone ever, Charge better keep him happy. He will get snatched up in a heartbeat. Actually, thats an interesting idea- tired of Charge's bs, he begins to spend time with other mechs (or a particular mech). It's evil to torture Charge that way,but it would be interesting to see his reaction and see if that could be used to show Charge exactly how ridiculous he's being (because Doc will stick with you through anything. It's got to be bad for him to refuse.

More humans! I admit much excitement at another band of humans wondering around with their clones. I feel like only military/really healthy strong active ppl survived. Sucks because I would have died with how absolutely unhealthy I am. Anyway, I digress. this was the cutest (oneshot i guess I'll call it for the moment) in this whole chapter to me.In that short time, you manage to give a nice overview of just about all the new guys and their personalities (and point out the great human ironies 'you're my brother, but you're still property of the now nonexistant government) When clones rule the world (with humans occasional help) will they find a way to fix stuff like that? Just wondering... You also managed to toss in the absolute sweetest, most adorable first time scene i've ever read. (And tossed in a cassesticlone that I really wanted to see)I will not mind if we see these guys again (though I am content if you leave them out for a while and would rather work with the multitude of well developed characters and storylines you already have... speaking of which, we havent heard from Stoner Jane (i think it was... i don't actually remember and I'm too lazy to go back and look it up!) and Percy. How well did that work out? What about Inferno and Muffin? Are those relationships going well? (here I go thinking about characters that we all forgot like 7 chapters ago...)There are more, but I don't want to overwhelm you with thoughts about what happened to other characters...

Now, please laugh at me but I had a sense of geography for exactly one hour and it took a full week of studying to get it. I believe that was a hint that our merry band of heros (i just like calling them that) are across the Mississippi and Tron said anyone that brings Scream's head and spark is back in. (or the sparks of the traitor slaves now that I think about it...) In that case, they were working on a cure for the virus, did Sharon ever figure anything out? We know from Jamie that if a Spark is transfered over to an infected shell the infection is cured (atleast I believe so, thats another follow up story that could happen because we never really know what happens after he's given to Jester...) But they can't just create Sparks from midair, and I doubt there is a way to use a clone body to make a spark, transfer it and reuse the clone shell to make a new spark (besides that seems a bit too cruel to me, to be uprooted from your body to cure a disease, but are there any new breakthroughs onthat end? Will that be the ablility of a new evespark? Wait, if Opie is the living Matrix for the clones, then what are Scream and Poet? Are they the Allspark? Is one the allspark and the other something else? If that's the case, then wasn't the Allspark supposed to be Primus's spark (that could be complete fanon or even something i just made up but I though I heard/saw that floating around somewhere), and if so, what represents Unicron's spark? would it be Tron in his mastery over the virus (he's not a raving beast only following orders like the others....

I hope the length of this review (or reviews) and prologue for casseticlone fic (i'm using that term from now on) helps make up for the hellish wait I gave you. Terribly sorry about that, I'll try to keep it from ever happening again!

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