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From Rockinmuffin on December 05, 2008
Review for To Feel Human Part 3:

No Daniel and Speed sex; I was wrong. But pleasantly surprised. One again, you've made even more shocking developments about the clones.

It's sort of dangerous that a company plans on selling droids with weaponry. Of course, if it's a part of the Decepticons original plot then they might be unaware. Still, if other droid owners find out this knowledge they might be tempted to take advantage of it. Hmm...

And I love the ending of this chapter. Now that the Decepticons are being seen as good would that mean that people will start to see the Autobots as bad for getting in the Decepticons' way?

Just as an added note, even though I'm progressively working on my first submission, I won't be able to get it submitted probably for a week or two. College finals are kind of keeping me busy. Honestly, even if I didn't have to do that it would probably still take me a week. I have no idea how you manage to update so often StSE, but I'm loving it. I honestly think that this is your best work you've posted here. It's easy to tell that you actually enjoy what you're writing and that really adds to its greatness.

Also, experience is sexy. Personally, that's why I prefer older men; they know what they're doing and they're not as idiotic and immature as guys my age. ;3
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From Rockinmuffin on December 05, 2008
Review for Insanity Part 1:

Honestly, I wasn't sure whether or not there would clones made of Megatron. Personally, I could totally see him having sex clones of every Decepticon other than himself, because human scum are not allowed to touch even a clone of him. xD Lol. But I'm glad you decided to use him.

Sometimes I like Starscream and sometimes I don't but this chapter certainly made me feel for the poor guy. Megsy is such a bitch. ...And now I want someone else to do a Megatron clone and name him Meg. Or Megan. xD

Still, I liked this chapter and I think you have an interesting idea going for this story arc. In reality, most humans would probably abuse their droids. Not necessarily by physically arming them but by simply using them for nothing but sex and chores and not intellectually and emotionally stimulating them.

I like how you made all the characters act in this, even Megatron and all his bitchiness. Scratch that; especially Megatron and all his bitchiness. I love how even a clone of him feels like he has to be top dog. makes me wonder if a clone of Starscream would get jealous and try to find ways to get Megatron's position of power he holds in this little group. :D Mwahaha.
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From ToonQueen on December 05, 2008
**To Feel Human pt 3**

OMG, this was awesome! I loved how they helped everybody in the accident. Changing to a News point of view was awesome too. So they have their weapons systems already. Interestingggg. Now I have to do research on some TFA Deceptions. X3 Sounds like Autobot clones are coming soon? :D
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From ToonQueen on December 05, 2008
**Insanity PT 1**

I assumed some clones would be abused. XD Nice job~ Poor Screamclone! I like where this is going though~

In reply to Skywarp being able to warp, I would think all their combat abilities are currently dormant. I thought either when Megs was supposed to activate the sleeper program (which was what Shanon took out) or a series of hacks are the only way to activate weapons/combat abilities. Am I right to assume this?
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From Breech_Loader on December 05, 2008
Oh, YES! I just KNEW you'd fire up the guts to have people mistreat the clones.I had a mistreatment idea myself a while ago. Because not everybody will be able to BUY the clones... there will definitely be some android brothels springing up. And designed for sex they may have been (hell, so are humans) but not all of these clones will enjoy being fucked by a different human every night.

Give me a few days, and I'll have a chapter ready.
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From ToonQueen on December 05, 2008
Reply to StSE:
Yes, sparks will be explained more as I go on. The bots were not created with the intent of having sparks. Your theory is pretty close in some respects. Its something that happened later on.... It will be explained! :D

Reply to Rockinmuffin:
Don't worry about the Skywarp thing! XD As you can see he acts nothing like TFA Skywarp. And I do plan to clear up back history to what is going on. One of the first paragraphs of part 2 I already have typed up explains the team's job and what the Earth is going through at the moment. X3 First chapter was meant to be a bit vague. I notice I start a lot of my stories like that. X-x;;;;
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From Rockinmuffin on December 04, 2008
Review for To Feel Human Part 2:

Wow... This was... hot.

While gentle sex is my preference, I sort of like how Sharon dominated TC, made him the woman of the relationship. Using both ends of the double-sided dildo on him at te same time was very creative. xD Haha! Still, it's sort of odd to think of an older woman being this sexual but it's refreshing at the same time. Just because you're older doesn't mean you appreciate pleasure any less.

I really love how Sharon and Daniel treat TC and Speed like real people. Honestly, that's probably the greatest thing anybody could ever do for them.

And TC was so cute with how excited he got when Sharon said he was her boyfriend. I absolutely love im in this! You know what would be really cute? IF TC saved up some of his allowance money and bought Sharon a gift. I could see him do that. ("Don't boyfriends do these sorts of things for their girlfriends?")

I'm guessing the next part of your series will be Speed racer being the man in his relationship with Daniel. Looking forward to it.
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From Rockinmuffin on December 04, 2008
Review for The Tale of Kaon: PT 1:

Aha! Another Skywarp fan. I'm plmanning to use Skywarp too. I'd do another con but I'e already spent too much time on it to start over again.

Admittedly, this is a very neat idea you have. I like how you made this your own and stayed within the boundaries. This is a pretty neat little universe you have here. I do, however, have a few critiques. While your universe is interesting, it's very confusing. I honestly wasn't quite sure what was going on and why things were the way they were. If you could perhaps cleverly sneak in some background information in part two of your story that would probably help to clear things up.

Keep on writing! YOU CAN DO IT! xD
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From Rockinmuffin on December 04, 2008
Review for To Feel Human:

I really like these new developments. The clones are so REAL. I love how they defy their programming and proove, as corny as it is, that "love conquers all" and all that Jazz. It's sweet. I must admit, I really like this side of your writing. You still have smut but this story is much more feel-good and fluffy than most of your other works that I'm used to.

I also like how you got the clones to think of their own needs too. I know that part two will be fun. xD
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From ToonQueen on December 02, 2008
**To Feel Human pt 2** Cute little Thundercracker! I loved that you touched on the she/he subject. The way I normally write my 'fan universe' they are definite male and female separations. I look forward to writing your version of their gender in this universe though~

I actually have a character in my universe that has some gender issues, (in my universe, its not normal.) Is it alright if I use your two ports body form? Its for my 'Without You' story.
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From ToonQueen on December 02, 2008
ARDJKGBSDKJB! It won't let me obsessively edit 10 times like I normally do when I post a story! *spazes* *flails* *seizures* FFFFFFFFAIL. I already see like 3 things. MAN.
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From ToonQueen on December 01, 2008
**To Feel Human** - This is awesome! I'm typing up the first part to my story right now, and this already answered a lot of new questions I had already! :D
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From Rockinmuffin on December 01, 2008
Review for Racing Partners parts 1 and 2:

First off, I just want to say that Speed racer is the greatest name to give to a transforming robot EVER. It made me giggle, at least.

You know, mini TC with a Swiss Army knife shouldn't be that cute. But... he just IS. I can't get over how adorable he is.

Daniel and his Drag Strip clone seem to get along pretty well. Still, when you ave two people together that are that competitive it's only a matter of time before their are hard feelings (especially when one loses against the other! xD) ALso, Danny's a slut but he's the best kind of slut.

Do these chapters take place some time inbetween chapters 2 and 3? I ask this because you mentioned something about Drag Strip having memory echoes and I thought that the clones were freed from not only the Trojan virus but their originals' memories as well.
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From ToonQueen on December 01, 2008
ARG! How did I miss that size info?! Thank you! And one more question, you said they were only Decepticons now, but if the story is like.. An Alternate Dimension of an Alternate Dimension in an Alternate Future... can their be some Autobot clone secondary characters, the details of there existence not being discussed?

Oh wells, will be writing in 8 hours! :D *little jig*
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From ToonQueen on December 01, 2008
Alright, I am totally going to start one of these tomorrow night. I've reread the chapters and haven't really picked up a certain height of the robots. My question is, would a 6'2 human be a bit taller than a seeker clone? 8D
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