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By : Kellendros

From mouserr on September 11, 2007
as will said in independence day 'i have got to get me one of these!' that jet sounds sweet ... with all the fancy gadgets within those engines have to be pretty hard core ... just like the owner

and here they are, where? not clear yet but things should start moving pretty quick from this point to the 'finale' Kim is still fighting herself over the decision but the curious side has staked it's claim, heck it's gaining ground if that conversation is any indicator

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From ANON - Josh84 on September 10, 2007
Ahh, you kept the location a secret and now we(the readers) have to wait until next time! Shame on you! ;) Still, it was another great chapter. Happily awaiting the next!
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From ANON - battlestar on September 10, 2007
This was a good nice chapter, with good interaction between Kim and Corscan.

Its very rare for me to find a story that has me so egerly awaiting an update like this. The only other that was done this are Hobnob-rev with MBS, Rann and his Dark Ocean, and David Webers Honor Harrington novel series. It nice to see I can reconies charcter growth and enjoy it.

More please and soon.
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From immortal7 on September 10, 2007
cool chapter. it made Corscan more of a likable person, but you can tell that she might sell you for abusiness deal. I woried for Kim she is gettign sucked in can see it and can almost offer no resistance to the the whole thing. i can't wait to see how her attitude slowly starts to change. any way post soon later
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From ANON - Anon on September 10, 2007
Sometimes I feel frustrated with you. You have so many chapters done to this, and your posting them at too slow of a pace for me. I want to read more, and I know you have it, ready to be posted. Grr... I'm impatient.
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From ANON - FanFicFantast on September 09, 2007
Every once in a while there comes along a story so great here on adultfanfiction that it by itself is a reason to still "hang out" here. Now i already had one such story, Dark Ocean, and then you show up with RoD, and give me a second reason. Dear god but this is a wonderfully captivating story. I realy hope you have enough material to at least make this story through (Even now hoping for a sequel, but i�ll keep that hope in realistic chains. :) ) because if this story just stops in the middle and dies, i will probably cry a little.

Standing ovations

F3
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From ANON - sari on September 09, 2007
this is really good!!!!!!!
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From SupaNerd on September 08, 2007
Ahhh, an excellent chapter Lord Kellendros, the nerd likes. Now onto the questions, the coments, the 'good stuff"-
-Kims identity struggle, does she like the boys, history would indicate that she only like the pretty boy type, like Mankey (which is one letter away from monkey!), and Hirotaka, but wouldn't Hirotakas' ninja sense and 'gaydar' have picked up on Kims lesbian vibe?
-Kim not wanting to sleep with Shego, YEAH RIGHT!!
-Nice touch with the fantacy scene with Corscan and the rest of the cheer squad, but if that didn't turn her off, then why didn't she try and picture, Josh (monkey!) or Hirotaka, with her, ya know? Why only the HLS and none of what she thought she was all about? Is she subconsiously trying to not prove that shes gay, like if she is grossed out by the man style lovin' that would be pretty conclusive evidence that shes all about the HLS, so why?
-Kims mom sleeps in her office instead of a loving home. REALLY?
-(About Kims mom) Messy hair, eyes looking strained, smells of booze. Her patient had better have died or she has some 'splanin ta do! So Lord K, whats going on with Kimmies mom? And why didn't Kim bring up the boozy smell, you would think Mr & Mrs Dr P would be all about the 'don't drink and drive' lecture, practice what you preach mom!
-(Your words)Too tense to go to bed yet. Interesting. YEAH RIGHT! Again, her patient had better have died otherwise it sounds like there is trouble in paradise, so. That acurate or am I just looking into things to much or is it something more, sinister?
-Mrs Dr P opinion is that Kim is unusually energetic, very athletic unusual, or supernaturaly unusual?
-When Kims playing 'What If' with her mom, the way Ann says hamburger is weird. Is it just because she knows Kim isn't telling her everything or that she 'know', ya know? And does she know that Kims friend is in fact Kim?
-And I'm having difficulty waiting to see what happens when Kim tells her mom and dad, how long are we (or more importantly, me) going to have to wait to read about that one?
-Kim defending Corscan to her mom (even though her mom doesn't know), interesting, another tick in the 'Kim likes Corscan' column, if only Kim saw it that way she might not have to go through a breakdown (I'm assuming that Kims mega meltdown comes after the sex!) and just admit it and get on with the HLS. Yeah Bay be!
-Anns' comment about it being mean spirited is pretty much correct, in fact I'm surprised Kim didn't try to get out of the bet on the grounds that 'if she had sex with Corscan it "could" hurt her emotionally'. Any comment on that Lord Kellendros?
-'Sticky between the legs, crusty residue on the inside crotch of her pj's' Just wake up and smell the pride parade already, Darling!!!
-Oh and why didn't Kim hear the phone ring when Corscan called? Is Ann is on the conspiracy? Or am I just looking to deep into things, like that time with the water and the theft of Kims bodily fluids, again?
-'What can I do for you?' And Corscan didn't jump right on top of that, WTF!!!! Is she a master manipulator or again, am I looking to deep into things?
-Kim agreed pretty damn quick, yes I understand that she just HAS to know, BUT, it could hurt her, she could have a mega meltdown, I guess that she doesn't subscribe to that saying 'ignorance is bliss'. Oh well, should be good to read.
-And one final set of questions; the dreams Kims been having, normal erotic dreams brought on by a realization or is some 'external' (Read: Corscan or, maybe, just maybe, Kims mom. I think maybe her mom cause of the 'late nights' (hospital my ass) and cause the water told me too) source helping them along?

Now that the questions are out of the way, please Lord Kellendros, please release the next few chapters soon, and why you ask, well cause my review rocked and, well, so does your story, to the umpteenth degree! Continue rocking on. Peace!
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From ANON - Josh84 on September 08, 2007
Man, this story has been intense so far. You really did a good job with the fight between Kim and Corscan (How do you pronounce her name anyway?). You were very decriptive with all the fight scenes. I could literally see it happening in my mind as I read it. And all the chapters and everything in them have been very detailed.

So, now Kim has agreed to Corscan's terms. I'm definitely awaiting more. I want to know how this will turn out. Keep up the good work.
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From LesbianLovers on September 07, 2007
Very nice! Very powerful! Fantastic story!
Love,
Heather and Anna
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From ANON - battlestar on September 07, 2007
Oh Boy. Just when you think you got everything figured out, in comes the sliding cruveball. Do you swing of not.

Left field anyone.

Update soon, please.
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From mouserr on September 07, 2007
and finally we have an answer ... after putting herself through days of hell trying to figure shit out and then deciding on her answer in less than a heartbeat the answer changes and another commitment is made ... 'i have to know' in this sitch is one of those big steps that cant be taken back and if there are any regrets to come from it theres nothing to be done for it ... which was a big part of her internal struggle

Mrs. P coming in with a hint o the drink on her breath is worrisome though, truly worrisome ... i'm kewl with people drinking and getting drunk heck i'v done so on many an occasion, nothing wrong with either as long as its done safely, oddly its similar to the sitch with sex Kim was dealing with, drinking because its fun and you like it eh nothing wrong with that, drinking for other reasons it gets murky but and this is a big but drinking even a bit then getting into a vehicle is flat out wrong and i'd expect a woman of Mrs. P's caliber to know that and that marks the only thing so far in this story thats irked me that said however i can understand her desire to have a sip to 'take the edge off' after an operation that had her dealing with life or death for half a day give or take, i can understand it but i dont agree with doing so before returning home ...

its funny how such a seemingly small detail can add up to some serious thinking in light of a lot of serious thinking to resolve a personal sitch

as i'v toldja before Kell i'm a details oriented type, the details get me hooked and when done right they lead to a fantastic bit of reading ... thus far thats exactly what this story has been

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From PureEvilOne on September 07, 2007
This was great. Kim's choice to go was what I expected. Kim's talk with her mother was excellent. The eating the of the "hamburger" was fun. Kim's views on sex and the sexuality of those around her was refreshing. Kim's arguing with her self was well done and fit perfectly.
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From immortal7 on September 07, 2007
okay hamburgers equal sex. powerful comparsion you have going there. lol. any way Seeing kim struggle with the whole thing has been fun. i wonder just how much her mother is worring about her after that conversation. And finally curiosity will always have two outcomes kill you or make you wiser. Lets see how much wiser kim gets after this bout. post soon later
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From kwh on September 06, 2007
I have to say, this is outstanding so far! More, more!
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