I literally couldn't stop reading this newest chapter. I just love this beautifully broken art that you have put so much emotion into. Thank you
Kill them. Kill every single one of them. They don't deserve to live.
Okay, is every single one of Lincoln's sisters a complete moron or a complete asshole? This shit is starting to get WAY too contrived and unpleasent. Are you also gonna have Lola, Lana and Lisa, and maybe even Rita join in as well or are any of them gonna be actually smart and stop what has been going on?
Seriously, have you never heard of Darkness-Induced Audience Apathy or Eight Deadly Words? Why should I give a shit about anything in this story if everyone is complete stupid, an asshole, or just keep suffering and suffering with no sign of the suffering stopping it? Are you a Straw Nihilist by any chance?
I really hope this story ends with the sisters being found out, being punished and Lincoln getting the help he needs, because if it doesn't, this whole fic will feel like a complete waste of time.
Wow talk about a shot in the dark! I was so excited for the update I kept reading it even though reading my phone screen at night felt like it was burning out my eyeballs. Looks like Lincoln is getting it from all directions, how much more can this kid possibly take?? Also don't think I didn't notice how the protagonist of Rita's book is a white-haired man; maybe Lincoln was right to recoil from her touch o_O
Okay, so I’d first like to say I’m typically just a reader/reviewer on Fanfiction.net of Loud House stories, and this is the first story I’ve read on this website. I like this story so much, I decided to make an account just to review it up to this point.
I’ve always been very interested in psychology. Your descriptions, the raw emotion you pull out of the crevices of even the most normal scenes of this story are ridiculously realistic. Not that I’ve endured this hardship, but I’ve read on psychology enough to know you do extremely well with writing torment. One much more knowledgeable than me could peel layers of information out of this story, and write an essay on it. I wish I could.
I feel for Lincoln in this story, like I rarely feel for anyone. His Christ like selflessness is written near perfection. It’s always been such an interesting idea to give a child in a story. The sisters on the other hand, are written as characteristically tormented as they should be. Their motives, reactions, and proceedings are all great. I feel for them, except Lori, nearly as much as I feel for Lincoln. Leni is too innocent, and doesn’t understand. Luna is too insecure, and realistically turned to the bottle, while Luan is going mad from the gravity of the situation. Lori is seemingly just self centered and cynical. She disgusts me.
I have to say, I’m incredibly curious how this will pan out. You’ve done a tremendous job with this so far, but I can’t help but feel this story can easily become repetitive. If the story continues on it’s current route, and extends to Lynn, then maybe even the younger sisters, or even switches to Lincoln having his own way with the younger sisters, I think the story has high chance of folding in upon itself. I’d take it a different direction, and spice things up in an unexpected way. That’s obviously your choice, however. Just my two cents.
Lisa could come into play, or even Lucy. I’d be shocked if Lisa doesn’t figure it out soon (hell, she could know already), and I’d be equally as shocked if Lucy doesn’t try to figure it out for herself, soon. This could get very interesting, but it’d have to be handled carefully. Writing for a mind as smart as Lisa’s is tough and intimidating, but seeing what you’ve done so far, I trust you.
I really am very excited to see where this goes. I wish I could write more, about this now. I’ll give a follow up review after it’s end. Until then, have fun with this dude. Keep doing your thing.
I’d like to add something very quickly. Apparently one can’t revise nor edit their own reviews, so I have to do this follow up instead. Nonetheless, I slept on it a couple hours and came to think that you are in fact taking the story in a different direction. It’d be too easy just to have Lynn be the next to step in line and rape Lincoln. You’ve given the hints., they’re all there. Lisa and Lucy are both already on alert, and the most recent “event” with Lincoln in his room will only increase their suspicions. Not to mention Lincoln’s own mental “breaking point” which he finally, apparently reached. I can’t believe I didn’t mention Lincoln snapping in my original comment. Im very curious how you’re going to write that. There are so many possibilities for it. My guess is, you’re going to go down a storyline that involves all of the above, Lisa/Lucy getting involved, Lynn (trying?) to rape Lincoln, and Lincoln’s break, and have them commingle.
Like I said, this story is fantastic. I’m extremely happy to get to read and enjoy it.
Wow. This was an intensely erotic but disturbingly realistic portrayal of sibling molestation. I could feel the grim despair of Lincoln and his sick revulsion as his horrible, selfish sisters used his prepubescent body as their play thing.
Hot.
I really like this. A guilty pleasure, yet strangely as heart warming as it is tragicly devistating. Great work.
I made a comic page of my favorite part of chapter three. Please keep writing. :)
https://www.hentai-foundry.com/pictures/user/MedullaMind/519729/Loud-with-Chu
i came for the expected "oooh yeaaah", but i stayed for the headshaking ".....damn" 10/10.