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From the looks of it, I've guessing this has been abandoned huh?

Got to admit, if that's the case I'll be more than a little disappointed. This has been pretty damn awesome so far.

Keep up the good work. I find myself enjoying the storyline as much as the smut. Would love to see a Ron Bon but ill let you decide because you have been very impressive

Yet another amazing chapter, I personally love the story and do not find it boring. The emotions of the characters is fantastically expressed. A little bit of comedy also helps to keep the story interesting. The smut is there but believe it or not I am here more for the story then the smut. I originally found this on fanfiction.net but sadly it was removed so I followed it here to this site. I like this Ron very much despite his actions being very questionable but since this is a smut fic I am willing to let this go. The reason I like this Ron is because his emotions are well written and the choices he makes will determine his path as well as the consequences. Another reason I like this fic is because it is somewhat of a harem though not really. Now as to what girls or toys that I would like to see would be: Shego with a pheromone device that when combined with Ron's Mystical Monkey powers make him completely and utterly irresistible. Bonnie and her sisters with a whip like toy (Monkey artifact) that causes extreme pleasure with a very minute amount of pain. Vivian Porter with a mind reading device that allows Ron to know her very thoughts and emotions thus allowing him to get close to her. A Kim and Anne chapter with a device that makes them think that everything is a dream or illusion but is in fact real, they would have sex with Ron together but think nothing of it because to them its just a dirty dream, it would also make Kim and Anne embarrassed around each other due to the "dream". Other than that I look forward to more chapters from this story. Since this is the only story I am reading on this site.

As usual enjoyed it immensely I personally love the build with the story kind of makes it a little more exciting. Not to mention as righteous as most people pretend to be they'd do the same thing of given the opportunity. Anywho awesome addition to the series I must admit though I am curious as to how this will turn out or if it will continue on. I just hope it all ends well for the Ronman. So definitely can't wait to see what the next toy will be, and the next "victim". Hmm is that too harsh a word? It is the only word that seems to fit either way can't wait for the next installment.

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Very happy to read chap 3. More good stuff. I enjoy a bit of story with my smut. but too much can be a problem. Good idea to put in the tag for those who want to skip ahead. A agree that Ron was kind of a bitch in chap 2; glad chap 3 Ron was more like chap.1. Looking forward to more. If you add another toy maybe some kind of brainwashing device so Ron can program his sleeping girls into a threesome. Looking forward to Shego, maybe Ron will start using Monique to try out new perversions while he starts dating Kim. Of course, more sleep-sex reinforcement of Kim's feelings is a good idea.
Would help you to get a proof-reader. Many errors of the kind spell-check does not catch. Hope to read more soon.

Please I would love to see more of this.

continue with the story...it's great!!!! don't let criticism get to you, i too like a little bit of story between lemons. I only have one question:why ron continues to cum inside? monique and kim weren't surely tacking the pill at the time...

can you do like a one-shot with MoniquexKim (no ron)

Woah that was hot....

Definitely want to see more from this story, personally wouldn't mind seeing Bonnie or her sisters be used as....play-testers for Ron's toys. Can see him doing it for a bit of revenge for the constant put-downs. :)