rate_review Reviews

FANTASTIC story would love to see another chapter!!!

Not a bad story, especially for a first effort. It did seem a little short though. Certain details I would have like to see brought out were fluffed over, making the story feel rushed. During the main sex scene it was hard to picture what was going on with Azula's constant position changes. Don't be afraid to slow things down a little and give a little more attention to detail. It can really strengthen an already good story. There were also a couple of wall-of-text style paragraphs, especially near the beginning, that could have stood to be broken up into smaller chunks for easier readability.

On the plus side Azuko is a hot pairing. Azula's rich girl craziness and Zuko's thinly buried frustration makes for an explosive mix, and the incest angle just makes it that much hotter. I would have liked to see the clashing aspects of their personalities and the reasons for their attraction to each other pointed up a little more but you still did creditable service to this potent pairing. I also loved the way you preserved the Avatar humor in the story. Having dad walk right in on them and not even notice his kids were fucking on the couch as he strolled obliviously right through the room was hilarious, and I loved Sokka's “You have to teach me that!”

Overall a strong first showing. I'm looking forward to reading more from you two in the future! :)