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October 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey there! I'm a friend of Dally's, he said I should check out your story. :) I liked it quite a bit, here's my impression:
- I appreciate the nod to "dem hips". It's cute as hell.
- Not much of a fan of the term 'womanhood', but that's just me.
- Several parts definitely made me jealous as fuck, man...
- The Grovy/Eva part seems a little rushed near the end. Lots of delicious attention being paid to Amal, and then it's like three sentences for actual penetration. I think you could do much more with that. Other than that, really enjoyed the fapfic.
- I appreciate the nod to "dem hips". It's cute as hell.
- Not much of a fan of the term 'womanhood', but that's just me.
- Several parts definitely made me jealous as fuck, man...
- The Grovy/Eva part seems a little rushed near the end. Lots of delicious attention being paid to Amal, and then it's like three sentences for actual penetration. I think you could do much more with that. Other than that, really enjoyed the fapfic.
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September 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I fapped, I cried, I lost 20 lbs.
btw you can catch me on msn via thereal_al_capone@yahoo.ca
just introduce yourself by your wakfu nickname, or i will assume you are a stranger.
btw you can catch me on msn via thereal_al_capone@yahoo.ca
just introduce yourself by your wakfu nickname, or i will assume you are a stranger.