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February 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well, for one thing it's "Avatar State", not mode, but aside of that pretty good so far, definitely an interesting concept, I'll give it that. From what I see your grammar and punctuation are okay, and the story flows quite nicely. Chapters could stand to be a bit longer though, but in due time. Well, until chapter 4, then. Laters.