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September 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A well-written and highly erotic story. I loved it! The one thing that really would have helped make it better would be to have it gone over by a beta reader. You have some issues with switching randomly between past and present tense, even within the same sentence, and there's a few typos that need swatted. Also the double-spacing between lines isn't needed. Aside from the technical issues though, your story totally rawks! I wish I could write sex scenes that hot! And the pairing feels like it came straight out of the series. My friend, you've got talent! :)