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August 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good concept, shakey execution. You have a few obvious mistakes in the first chapter, verb tenses, mostly. I suggest finding a beta to iron out the rough edges, then it should be shiny and great!
It is a good story, keep writing.
It is a good story, keep writing.
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August 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Too lazy to log in. But anyway, you are forgiven.
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August 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Its not often that i find a story worth reviewing (actually, not really) but i can say that i really love this! Update soon :) Lol even though you JUST updated...
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August 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice, but hurry up with the next chappie.
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August 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
how long does it take for you to review?!!! itz been 4 fricken months, and you still only have 1, pretty short, chapter up!!! hurry ur butt up, people r waiting all of these 4 months or so for the next chap.
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August 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
come on alredy what happens?!!
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May 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I really hope you continue. It's really well done. ^_^
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May 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was a nice start :D Please write more!!
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April 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story so far..it is a great start..u need to update this soon please
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April 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not to be mean but are you EVER going to update?