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December 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
apart from your abominable spelling, its not a bad peice of work, nut it lacks plot. And if the "mysterious savior" is a self-insertion of you, i hate you. This isn't exactly a flame, but it's not a real thumbs up either. Add a bit of detail, and have a plot that makes sense - what you currently have is this: the group fought off a X.A.N.A attack, and then Aelita and jeremie screwed. wtf?-there's no connection there. So, just try to keep the plot straight and check your spelling. i await any updates/rewrites. THIS IS NOT A FLAME - just a slightly opinionized critique. :)