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July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
when are you going to write more?.
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July 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is AWESOME. But it needs some Sex GAWD
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, aside from an odd predilection toward muttering and saying things 'coolly', there's nothing special about the story. Paper-thin plot, stiff characterization and no scene development. Like, in the very beginning, I could have skipped to the end of the chapter and understood what was going on. I'm not a grader, but I'm giving it an arbitrary C-. I hope the sex turns it around.
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July 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dude............. Where are the goods!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wheres the action??????????????????????
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July 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow.......................................................... just wow.............. that was pretty good........................... can't wait for the next chap
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July 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooooh, intrigueing, keep up the great work!!
Love it!!
Kai
Love it!!
Kai
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July 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's good. Although I always thought of Sam as a dom. Anyway. The one thing is the OVERUSED phrase of "ravishing raven haired" and "ravishing redhead". keep it up.
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July 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Come on get to some real action
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July 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Come on. Come on write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.