rate_review Reviews

Hahaha, still smexy~

While the story flowed very smoothly and your use of descriptives really brought the images into mind, there were a few things I noticed that you need to look into.

**Tags** These are a big issue for many writers, so it's a common problem. Here's an example of what you did, and how it should've been:

Yours -- You can finish me off after we recharge." He replied,
Right way -- You can finish me off after we recharge," he replied,

The other thing I noticed was that you didn't capitalize Seeker. This is accepted as a proper noun, so must always be capped.

Other than those two very common issues, your story was well-written and engaging...

As a sex story, it was basically okay... the only real problems with it were that:

1: I don't see anything in it that really shows it's Transformers Animated.
2: I don't see anything in it that alludes to Megatron's birthday.

If you could just remember these sorts of things (especially number two) next time, that would be great. I expected Starscream to be bullied into sex, or popping up out of a birthday cake or something. Instead, it's just like every other Megatron/Starscream fic where you just jam two people together and have them fuck.