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hey can I be in the next chapter

Hey can I be in the story

Well let me first say that I found this little story quite interesting and entertaining; but the things that you had the 2 main characters (TJ and Spinelli) doing are quite shocking really, the idea of a couple of kids playing a game of “strip kickball” then having sex out in the middle of the playground in broad daylight to! Also exactly how old are these kids any way; you made ‘Spinelli sound like a child with her breast still being small and developing but you made ‘T.J. sound more like a teen with saying that he was thin and was getting stomach muscles, I thought he was on the doughy and round side from I’ve seen of him.

Any great job very cute and sexy; and you have the only good story that I ‘ve seen, everyone else’s story is boring compared to yours. :D

Well let me first say that I found this little story quite interesting and entertaining; but the things that you had the 2 main characters (TJ and Spinelli) doing are quite shocking really, the idea of a couple of kids playing a game of “strip kickball” then having sex out in the middle of the playground in broad daylight to! Also exactly how old are these kids any way; you made ‘Spinelli' sound like a child with her breast still being small and developing but you made ‘T.J.' sound more like a teen with saying that he was thin and was getting stomach muscles, I thought he was on the doughy and round side from I’ve seen of him.

Any great job very cute and sexy; and you have the only good story that I ‘ve seen, everyone else’s story is boring compared to yours. :D

" he had been working out". Really?? a fourth grader?? smh and the least u could have done was make her a bit nervous before she blew him. Not all fourth graders know how to go down on a guy like a hooker.

wow another good fic and ya know even if some thing like that has.nt happned to me most of my friends have a lot of stuff to blackmail me with until college
With love; Imasuky Lomae

Recess! I would have never came up with that series to do.... good work.

I just might my try my hand at it(pun unintended-hehe)

I have a suggestion: I want to see if you or I could do one with the paings from " The Weekenders" Could be fun... I already do loads of Which Hunter Robin and stuff.

How About it?

wowie, that was gooood!!!!

hahahaha...That was funny/cute!!! I'd like to see another story like this...

Unrealistic-
It seemed like you paid the poor kids in candy to do this-
Nicely written though, just a bad concept.
I do go for toon-kids having sex in stories though.
Perhaps your imagination is not as good as your grammer?