Dear Catspeaker,

I started this when you first posted on this site, and have been meaning to leave a review but kept forgetting (and I'm tired of typing on my phone for reviews since I'm somewhat verbose). I wish I'd reviewed sooner, but I'm glad this is getting more now!

I really appreciate the work you've put into this. There are few spelling errors, and it is clear you are doing a good amount of review, or you have a great beta-reader. The quality of writing and the level of descriptions you employ are very detailed and help paint the imagery of your story in my mind. I'm strange in that I have a good ability to imagine and recall details, but I often just get lost in the words on the page and take them at face-value, so your writing style really helps me visualize what is happening.

I want to write my review based only on where I read when I first devoured the story, which was just shy of chapter 12 or 13 I think. I saw this get posted, and put off reading it after seeing how well written the first few paragraphs were, and I think you already had two or more chapters added by the time I sat down and binged it in one sitting, One posted right as I got to the end of the updates even! Now I'm several behind, but I didn't want to keep reading till I reviewed.

I really like how you have shown realistic relationships between the siblings, and how you've adapted some fanon while also doing some of your own things. The world feels real and full, not just paired down to the inside of the Loud house itself. I can imagine each location where the sisters have spread out and are living their lives, and it is a nice bit of worldbuilding work. I especially like the details you've added for the pop culture and media that Lincoln and Clyde are obsessed with, and half the fun of reading has been thinking through the references to see the real-world corollaries. It is clever and fun, and feels organic and not contrived like such references often get. I really loved the whole convention setting and descriptions. I also really loved the camp-out and harvest festival / ceremony you wrote up, and the clever way you integrated Lucy changing her hair color. I also like that you kept it blonde for a while, and used that for the cosplay too. Her going back to black almost feels like the end of the fantasy in fact. Intentional maybe?

I must admit some of the slow trickle of details for why Ronnie Ann wasn't in the picture felt a bit too melodramatic and "mystery box" style, but I really like the way you integrated Lincoln's lack of confidence and anxiety into the story, and how that framed his relationship with Melanie for the first few chapters. I enjoyed her comeuppance and the way you sort of poked fun at (or mocked, if we aren't being generous) the SJW angle she was clearly using to justify her crappy behavior and selfishness. The reveals of her various infidelities were good too, and helped make her even more vile, which almost justifies Lucy's actions. Lincoln refusing to be in a polyamorous relationship was a good line, especially in light of the typical harem fics the AFF fans put him in!

I like that the story has kept to the main players, including Lily, who you've made absolutely adorable, and how you've realistically segmented out the other characters. Getting those little update sections from other settings and in other character's voices has been a nice and not too frequent touch. I think I hadn't read any chapters with Lynn Jr. when I first binged, and I liked the subtle hints you had dropped about her and Leni having the unhealthy attraction that Lucy is clearly indulging. Up until Lucy spilled the beans that is, lol.

I'm kind of disappointed you joked about Ronnie Anne being the hero in some people's eyes, but that is a part of the story you have handled well. She seems like the endgame, even if we Lucy fans don't want it. Getting more details on that whole breakup debacle, even if they trickled for the parts that felt needlessly mysterious, has been interesting. As has the Lynn chapter (which felt abrupt since you did a bit of time jumping on the next chapter, to before Lynn walked in the house, but it worked well). Her backstory and attempts to break her addiction felt compelling, even if I don't love her as a pairing usually. Though she does make sense as a partner and I liked your characterization of her giving in now that fate (or Lana at least) has intervened.

I really look forward to Leni, Lynn, Lucy, and Lily (maybe) all fighting over Lincoln, and I'm scared to see the aftermath, and how Ronnie Ann plays into it all. I like the friend dynamic you have between her and Lincoln, and same for the Clyde relationship. I appreciate how well you write the interpersonal, mundane level interactions. I also like how you've written Haiku and Clyde's relationship, and her friendship with Lucy for that matter.

Which brings me to Lucy. I love her characterization and the way you had Haiku as her confidant and partner in crime. It was fun to read all the manipulations she has put into place, and her legitimately loving, if improper, obsession with Lincoln. The way you wrote it all up to the first fight after Ronnie Anne called was great, and I really felt she was doing what was best until it all came crashing down (the panic attack was a great prelude for that). I really like how you stayed with Lucy as the narrative point of view for most of it, to really trick the audience into sympathizing with her and her plotting. Obviously she may be the villain for some, but as a Lucycoln story it has been nice. I really enjoy the emotional aspect you've given attention to, instead of just being a one-note fluffy piece of smut. But her deviousness is slowly showing through, and it is scary. In hindsight it feels predatory and opportunistic.

And that is where this story stops being fun and starts being fascinating. I saw you posted a side story, and I'm excited for that too. But most incest stories have the fatal flaw that it is all fun and games until reality sets in. Up to the end of the convention it was easy to see this as a big secret scheme, with a nice, smutty payoff, but the panic attack, and then the work of everyone around them to get Lincoln moving on for real or back with Ronnie Ann started to sink in. Sure Lincoln feels committed now, but that first fight, especially how real it felt that time flies when you reconnect with an old friend, really drove home how tenuous the relationship is, and how doomed it probably is too. It also made me mad at him for being so thoughtless, even if it felt realistic (I often neglect things when I get into a good conversation . . . or start writing a long review, lol).

I love these kind of long form, slow-seduction type stories with other pairings like Ben and Gwen, Dipper and Mabel, and various other Brother and Sister pairs, but so few end happily if they try to be real, or end well before any real-life conflict or issues could and would probably arise. (I've seen a few Pinecest stories where they are a couple in their 30's and it is bittersweet, but most others show the fallout when their parents find out). So I'm cautiously eager to see where things go. Lucy is too dark and enamored to share Lincoln I think, and as I said, I'm a few chapters behind now, but I don't anticipate any GeorgeGlass, AberrantScript, or Flagg1991 style orgies anytime soon. I mean, we can hope, but realistically I think there will be a lot of broken hearts and Lincoln might try to off himself before this is through. Lucy too I bet. Make it a real Romeo and Juliet affair!

I think you've painted this as a fun romp with a dark undertone that turns very serious and messy, and if I had stopped at the convention it would have been a nice, waffy story with some satisfying revenge on the Melanie skank. However, seeing you are still going, now I'm buckling in for the ride and am curious where things will fall.I also know the balance between porn without plot and realistic, slow-burn love stories is hard to strike, but you have done great here. I really felt like the love scenes were earned, and you wrote them very well, with lots of thought and passion, even if not the most descriptive language or sticky details. I would love a bit more smut, since you've gotten me invested in the characters, but paradoxically when I feel so heavily invested in the characters and their emotions it almost feels intrusive or inappropriate to see them in the romantic, sexual moments. Like I know them so well I feel like I'm seeing something somehow too private. Weird latent issue on my part I'm sure, but I really do feel like you've evolved the characters into your own, unique take on them, and that is a very laudable accomplishment.

I hope to review again after I catch up, and want to read your Rule 63 universe story (Why can't it be like this forever?) too, which I've poked at a bit, but may hold off until it is finished. I'd love some more smutty oneshots from you too if you ever feel inspired! I'm kinda hoping for this story that if everything gets revealed Lily will demand her fair share of Linky too, lol. We Loud House fans are greedy.

But in all seriousness, you're definitely a strong author who has quickly become a favorite of mine.

Keep up the good writing! I'm excited to see this to the end, and your impressive pace has me hopeful this story will have a proper ending. (Maybe an epilogue too!)

Sincerely,

Pixel-King

Lincoln how could you cheat on Lucy

Oh boy this is gonn be a fascinating train wreck of emotional drama I'm gonna assume that if Lucy is on birth control so Is lynn just for continuity and because she's legitimately had sex before so that's one problem not needed to worry too hard about. It is interesting to see how Lucy will handle this as she has already acknowledged on some level this is her fault . You really do we've some intense plot beats 

This story is amazingly comprehensive and grounded it honestly inspired some of the concepts I plan to use in my own thank you for this 

I'm invested in this since I wanna see my favorite pair in this show end up being together and start a family so I'll be reading each chapter 

I for one love the pace and the amount just wish there was more sex with Lincoln & Lucy I'm really invested in this and I'm praying that Lincoln & Lucy truly stay together and have the kids they want

It seems that Lucy is going to spill the beans about her relationship with Lincoln 

This is getting really exciting

I pray the Lincoln will put a bun in Lucy's oven 

Lincoln better stay true to Lucy