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Reviews for Feel the burn

By : Fanfictionfan360
  • From ANON - Ynk on April 06, 2016
    Wow. I knew Sissy was a whore and this confirms it! She could be gang raped and ask for more!
    I don't you if you write about it but since she's a bitch, why not put her with a dog? XDDD
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  • From ANON - Guest on June 01, 2014
    Hey it's been over 7 months since you wrote a story with Jeremy in it. I know I sound like a broken record but if you wrote more with him in them it would probably make it easier for u you to write for him since you'll have so much practice writing for him under your belt. Ca. You next story be a 10k+ words Jeremy centered threesome with Jeremy, Sam and one othe female character in which Sam and the other female character help Jeremy come out of his shell when it comes to having sex. I apogize for pestering you so much about this but as a writer you should be challenging yourself more and this is a perfect way to do that. All your stories are great I look forward to reading your next Code LYOKO story when it comes out which is hopefully this week. Again challenge yourself as a a writer and write a 10k+ word Jeremy centered threesome with two other female characters. Thanks
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  • From ANON - Locke Lamora on April 04, 2014
    Sorry for not reviewing earlier, I read it a week or so ago but haven't had the time to review. To begin with, the good. The story was straight forward, some buildup so it's not just porn but not so much that I wanted to skip over it. That is one thing you have down, and with the way this series is going, I'd say you don't need to improve on this. Spelling errors, though present are to be expected, and are kept to a minimum, as well as grammar errors. To continue, the scene was decent, not your best work for sure but still worthy to be posted. An pairing also conspires with you because so few people have done a William Sissy pairing in this type of fiction. Even given the pact and circumstances to their meeting. One thing that nags me however is that this chapter didn't seem... "Filling?", it didn't seem like you had your heart in it, like it was missing something important. It annoy's me to say this and not know what's bothering me but I'm hoping you may have a better idea what that is. Anyways, as usual, A good chapter and a better story which I do hope you will continue. I've seen a few imitations using your Idea about the pact but most were either disastrous or not deserving to even be mentioned.
    So with out further due,

    Domia Abr Wyrda,
    Locke Lamora
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  • From ANON - justalittlefox5 on April 03, 2014
    Good story. Looking foward to the next one.
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  • From ANON - Lemonreader93 on April 02, 2014
    This was interesting, Sissi sure is a slut though.
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  • From ANON - Master Doom Maker on March 30, 2014
    A short one, but still good. I wouldn't be surprised if Sissi's father is disappointed in her for being so loose.
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