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Reviews for Getting along

By : Woodrow
  • From ANON - Celestial on March 09, 2014
    ignore my previus Review i was Double tasking a confused tap whit another fic..
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  • From ANON - Celestial on March 09, 2014
    the second chapter was very good,the shower cunnilingus scene was very well done, and i loved the characterization of Ben and Gwen.
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  • From ANON - Bennet on March 09, 2014
    Honestly I see the potential here. I can feel it in my bones that it will get more interesting but, you knew there would be a but, why are Ben and Gwen behaving like royally douchie assholes? I mean yes I understand that Ben is an egotistical little brat and Gwen is a perfectionist OCD I never had the feeling of them out right despising each other's presence... After the first three episodes.
    Now moving on I think I see what's going to happen here. Given the two side to these guys and what you've shown so far I can surmise that Gwen will be the first to bring forth a compromise with Ben wholeheartedly against it until after maybe three days of boredom he begins to cave... No that's wrong that's too efficient a use of time. Welp I guess I'll just wait for the next chapter.
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  • From Aysha on March 07, 2014
    Your other reviewers are right, not enough happens in the chapters. Also Gwen and Ben are Max's grandchildren, not nephews and seeing as how Gwen is a girl she's nobody's nephew.

    I want to say that I'm looking forward to more but you really need to put more in your chapters, they need to be at least twice as long as they are, if not three times.
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  • From ANON - SWK on March 06, 2014
    I still maintain that the chapters are way too short. This along the first one would have been a good prologue if you put them together. If you could make them a little longer, to at least fulfil the quota of information that we need to judge the story, would be nice.

    So far we only have too little information on what's happening, who's the new "girl", what's going to happen, (Even if we all know what's going to happen, but many of us like to see how it would happen, and if in the process it would be good or bad). If you updated two or three times per day, the shortness of the chapters wouldn't be so bothersome. Especially when you are setting the story and the flow of it. (Which is frustratingly slow, too slow).

    You don't need to make the chapters have fourteen or twenty pages each, just a little longer than what you are doing right now, to at least set the pace nicely in the process if you are going to update daily.
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  • From ANON - Celestial on March 05, 2014
    oh yeah i remember these from the palcomix forums.
    it was one of my favorite Ben 10 fic ,i thought it was lost after the forums were shutdown , thanks for posting it here.

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  • From ANON - SWK on March 05, 2014
    While is pretty good that you focus your story more on the plot side, than the erotica. I'll tell you that you need to at least be more forthcoming with the information. Let's be realistic here. This site is pretty much focused on the erotica, so to make a good name for you on the "plot" side, you need way more information than what you gave us here. You don't need to jump right up to the smut, but you can't leave the readers like this.

    You want more reactions and interest? Put more information, don't make the chapter so short. This one pretty much fails at being a first chapter, because it gave us nothing that you hasn't told us on the summary. In fact, its completely what you put on the summary, only with more words.

    If you want the story to focus on the plot, that's mightily good indeed. But you need to understand that to catch up the attention of your readers, you need more than just specify your intentions. You need to show it, and sadly, this first chapter show us nothing so far.

    Hoping to read more about you.

    SWK.


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