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Reviews for Riley's Replacement

By : TheEvilFaery
  • From GeorgeGlass on March 29, 2016
    I've been meaning to read this story for about 2 years now, and I've finally gotten around to it. :)
    I was a fan of The Replacements when it was on, and while I'm a little iffy on the notion of Agent K being evil, I will say that if anyone in the Daring family is a secret sadist, it would have to be her. Bits I especially liked: the explanation of the way Riley's nanotech-based memory works; Agent K's line, “Espionage...is far less about ‘good against evil’ than it is about ‘us against them’; and ending with "THE BEGINNING...." I also thought the descriptions of Riley's mental state throughout the story were both vivid and believable. And while torture and mindfucking aren't entirely my cup of tea, I thought you illustrated it all very well.
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  • From coldfang66 on January 03, 2013
    This was amazing! Are you gonna make a sequel or keep this as a one-shot? Either way this is a great story.
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  • From Bishonen on October 05, 2012
    This was very well written and rather enjoyable but it made me feel dirty...and not in the good way.

    With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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  • From FairySlayer on August 12, 2012
    (Disclaimer: I was the proofreader.)

    Not to give away too much inside-baseball, but I remember this story was on the cusp when you gave me the first version to read. Yet my first reply was:
    [...] It's freaking terrific!

    Forget "in the rough" because even then it was already taking shape as a multifaceted blood-red diamond with razor sharp edges. This final version contains a good deal of physical torture and even more humiliation, but the worst of the terror is what comes from Riley's mind itself: they way her mind and body betray her after suffering so many times. Along with her part in the current events, Tasumi's new involvement in Agent's K's debaucheries and seemingly heartless cruelty makes a great vehicle for a clear and nicely contained set of expositions; as Riley's "loving mother" explains though, explaining all these horrific things in front of the redhead like she wasn't there, only makes the humiliation so much deeper.

    First off, starting with the mild humiliation and then escalating was brilliant because not only is it creepy to Riley, both the way she's presented the rewards while also thrown insults and cutting remarks about her inadequacies; the price she has to pay to continue, much to her own mixed emotions, of stripping would normally give a girl pause before trying to run away once her horrific memories were reactivated.

    Yet this time she still makes a run for it even naked and terrific, and Agent K still gets some enjoyment out of it. Just not enough to be so interested anymore with Riley finally maturing in at least some places. When Tasumi arrives and Riley naively thinks the girl will be her salvation... it's just another pair of feet to be crushed under, as if crushing her trust and love for her friend wasn't enough.

    I think one of the most poignant (if you can call it that) moments is when Agent K explains that she's just not interested in Riley anymore and probably would have stopped the secret abuse long before if Riley wasn't her daughter (... and still flat as an ironing board). Maybe I'm reading way too much into it, but as an orphan who's already suffered severe abandonment this seemingly matter-of-fact comment must have been heartbreaking to Riley — despite how terrified and desperate she was to make it all stop. Yet perhaps it was the "training and testing," or the intimacy (which you may have even mentioned in the story), but there was a sickening glimmer of kindness when K underhandedly and very subtly admitted that she did still use her even when she was too old because she was still her daughter after all. Maybe one last scrap for Riley to hold onto... or maybe one tidbit to further Riley's self-sickening behavior on the occasions where K may "borrow" her from Tasumi every so often. (I can hear Agent K now: "Well, still not much to work with, but headquarters is breathing down my neck for more data on the nanites, so I guess I have to do this.")

    Then there was "Ms. Lighter and Mr. Cigarette," perhaps the eeriest and most gut-wrenching scene: Riley suddenly lost all hope in that moment, suddenly and completely surrendering her freewill and putting up with any abuse, no matter how excruciatingly painful and even perhaps life-threatening. It amazed me that even when her true memories were restored this particular "game" was so gruesome that she had completely repressed it until the deadly sound of the flint striking steel.

    The casual conversation between K and Tasumi about this object, and appliance unworthy of any empathy – as even a pet would be shown some compassion – was probably even more sickening to Riley but she had no choice but to choke it back even when the literal choking stopped. (Riley already knew it was all true, but hearing it out loud was another crushing blow.) Horrified, humiliated, broken and self-loathing as she was by the time they took her into the kitchen, I can imagine that Riley still felt some sense of relief when Tasumi's new brand of physical torture was inflicted upon her. Or at the attempts at first that only infuriated the young dom to the point where even K questioned the escalation (if only for aesthetic purposes).

    Self-loathing, yes, as Riley hated it so much, and even more the betrayal of her best friend teaming up against her at her most helpless and painful moment she, again, did cherish the intimate bond and perhaps even the fact that she was getting such hardcore (both meanings) attention. But then with K's revelation that she was giving Riley to Tasumi (and why) must have caused her to die inside just a little bit more, perhaps after she thought there was nothing left. Then after all that abuse, especially the psychological terrors that would have left her completely unable to function except for K's ability to "make it all go away" in her conscious mind, Agent K and Tasumi just left her all alone as they went off to have some happy play time together.

    It must have been a blow to Riley to figure out why she thought and behaved the way she did in everyday life, owing to the "training," and then knowing that despite the "erase" button that part would never go away even when that part stopped.

    But even as a broken, quivering, tearful and completely helpless — completely worthless in her own mind — having finally been unshackled and allowed to recover from her ordeal before the memories were locked away again, Tasumi's "comfort" was no doubt made to sound sweet and caring, but the words and idea themselves must have made Riley truly hopeless, knowing that even without the gadgets and special training or any of that, her new "owner" was simply going to use all of her normal everyday weaknesses and self-consciousness against her: be the loving, caring friend but also demanding Riley's complete obedience. Slowly at first, casually, sympathetic, but taking her down the rabbit's hole (or into the snake's den) until Tasumi had complete power over her and would subject her to the same or even worse abuses of all kinds — and Riley would love her all the more for it. What started as simple need for friendship and comfort would ultimately morph into the horrific, devastating fear that, someday too, Tasumi would eventually get tired of her and throw her away. Much as fear of physical torture had driven her to obedience before, Tasumi's absolute power would be that Riley would make herself love whatever pain and humiliation her friend inflicted upon her, and eventually truly love every second of it while hating herself even more for that fact alone.

    Forget the bloody horror movies and fine-red-haze snuff fiction out there, this is true horror that wonderfully brings out both emotional torture and the heightening of sexual sadism in a captivating and accessible way.


    Wow, and I thought I'd only have a few paragraphs, especially when not feeling so well. But re-reading and pondering the story captivated me so much that, well, I hope you pardon any incoherence or missed points, etc. Just discussing this one, brutal and gut-wrenching as it is, gives me a lift because of how amazingly well you wove it all together — and did it all with only the one totally-fictional memory-control nanites. The rest... the human mind, body and spirit are all capable of being on either end.

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