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Reviews for Fire and Rain

By : Keyriethenightbringer
  • From RyuaAlba on February 20, 2012
    This is the first time I've read a story about Iroh that I didn't feel faintly sick after reading. You've done an excellent job writing this, I really enjoyed every part of it.
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  • From RogueMudblood on October 22, 2011

    Very nice! The interaction between them this chapter - things are certainly starting to heat up! But I do love how you're not rushing into this - how you're building their relationship. I can clearly see how this is intended to be so much more than just a random, vapid sexual encounter, and I appreciate your effort in making it so!

    I like how you are emphasizing Iroh's sensitivity to Kea, and the impact that her history (which is still not wholly known to us) must have had on her.

    I do have to wonder though.... what has Zuko been up to this whole time? Has he met up with the Avatar?

    Thank you for sharing!
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  • From RogueMudblood on October 11, 2011

    Again, wonderful banter between Iroh and Kea.

    I was greatly amused by this line:

    before being urged out of the village by Iroh and several dozen highly irritated townspeople with pitchforks.

    Following it up with Iroh's statement in the next town that he wanted to get his shopping done before they were chased out was priceless!

    The emotional development in this chapter is also well done. I like that you touch on Iroh's dedication to his position in your explanation of his lack of romantic attachments. Kea's reactions to Iroh's flirting - her thoughts before getting into the spring and upon waking the next morning, are setting a fine stage for the development of this relationship.

    I love that you are not rushing this - that you're developing their relationship so fully. I like that Iroh's age and wisdom is coming through in their interactions, and that while Kea's youthfulness (in comparison) is evident, it is not a barrier to that development.

    (technical note: I noticed one typo: Sh’d leaned.)

    Excellent chapter! Thank you for sharing!
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  • From RogueMudblood on October 03, 2011
    That was intriguing! I adored the interaction between Iroh and Kea you had in this chapter - not just during the battle scene with the witty quips, but also at the campsite.

    The description that Kea gives of the waterbender's tsunami, as opposed to the redirection of lightning, is also very interesting.

    Thank you for sharing! I look forward to the next update.
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  • From RogueMudblood on September 25, 2011
    Nice! I enjoyed the development of the relationship between Iroh and Kea in this chapter. I particularly liked the exuberance you described from Kea during the rain and Iroh's enjoyment of it, as well as Kea's being enraptured by the training session.

    It's interesting that you've had Zuko proceed to confront the Avatar on his own. I hope he takes Iroh's words to heart sooner rather than later.

    Thank you for sharing!
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  • From RogueMudblood on September 17, 2011

    You've got an interesting idea here. I'm curious as to Kea's past, and her interaction with Iroh.

    My only complaint so far would be the deus ex machina-esque escape from the guards.

    It's interesting that you emphasize her interaction with water when she doesn't bend it. Pouring the tea and drinking, you made sure to mention both times that she was not bending the water in order to disburse it. I'm wondering what significance this will have later on - that she's not using her abilities for mundane tasks.

    Thank you for sharing and happy writing to you!
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