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Reviews for Jazmine Gets Fearsome

By : TheEvilFaery
  • From coldfang66 on October 20, 2012
    This is one of the best fics of its kind that I've ever had the pleasure of reading. Not to mention the unfortunate rarity of good Boondocks fics on this, or any other, site. Excellent work!
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  • From bob665 on November 11, 2010
    Why does this story not have 100 reviews? Seriously it's amazing! It flows naturally and at its own pace. Your descriptions are vivid.
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  • From FairySlayer on June 23, 2010
    (Disclaimer: I was the proofreader or "beta" for this story. This review is based on a fresh re-reading of the story as it is posted.)

    This story makes me tingly as much in the heartfelt way as any other. First off, I like how it follows Jaz and lets us see what's happening around her, and what she finally does about it, without being directly inside her head. It makes for some very nice surprises, such as ushering Cindy into the girls room at lunchtime.

    I loved the way Cindy kept teasing her at random, letting days or even a week go by before doing something to totally fluster Jazmine. Then each time she turns, whipping her pigtails, and takes off. The water fountain scene was great, and even after the first kiss it came across that, besides the fear of being caught, Cindy enjoyed pulling back because it left Jaz a bit flustered (and wanting) yet again. Only now do I realize that Cindy had been slowly ratcheting up her play for Jazmine's full, round bum all throughout the story, not just for Jazmine herself. I suppose showing just a little more attention to Jaz's bottom each time would help keep Jaz from double-freaking over both the sexual advances from another girl AND Cindy's obsession with buttocks and surrounding areas.

    It was also sweet how you slipped in hints of Jazmine's budding attraction to girls even though she doesn't fully realize it herself. When you wrote that she was afraid of being accused of looking at the other girls in the shower there was that clever addition that she tried very hard not to look. Then in just about every encounter with Cindy Jazmine would bring herself to do something bold, even if Cindy had to egg her on a little, and then take a nervous step back. So some bits of believable hesitation helped pace things while adding a bit of anticipation.

    Jazmine's eagerness to praise Cindy at practice showed some very cute dorkiness in her exuberance; her other clueless moments are terrific too, especially when Cindy says how she needs Jaz's ass so bad and Jaz simply answers, "You do?" I nearly laughed my own ass off each time I read it.

    You touched on the girls' insecurities nicely. Pointing out that Cindy's parents don't get along and neglect her since what happened in the first episode with her was a good call-back. It was also telling that while Jaz was always fumbling for some kind of reassurance Cindy just comes out and tells Jazmine what to say at times. (There's just a tiny glimmer of Trixie Tang in there somewhere.) You wrote Cindy as a mostly-normal little girl beneath her "street" exterior. On the other side I loved Jaz's "exaggerated casualness" in the gym. She comes across like the nice kid who always tried to get everyone else to like her. Only now am I wondering if Cindy's thinking that Jaz is "nice" stems from Jaz offering to help her up while players on opposing teams probably never do. (But it also seems like Cindy doesn't go down much... er, in sporting events.)

    The physical descriptions of the girls themselves were great, especially how you included details about their same parts in both but never wrote it as a full comparison. Instead we got a delicious description of one girl, and then we got another tasty description of the other. Both touched on the same areas while telling how beautiful each girl was in her own way. One ass is tight and boyish and the other is soft and pillowy (and extremely fascinating apparently), etc.

    The kissing scene was beautiful in itself, staring warm and then boiling over as Jazmine's lust kicked into high gear. Then the sex scene took it to a much higher level and was downright hot! I still have etched in my mind the image of Jazmine squatting with her body lying back and resting on her hands.

    Once again, thanks for handling a certain part of their encounter tastefully. Jazmine was a sport about it, but being overrun with lust and pleasure probably helped ease over any thoughts of ickiness.

    Finally, thank goodness the janitor didn't show up because I know exactly who it would be: the same guy who has every other odd job in town.

    No, the story is much too sexy and lovely for that to happen. Thanks again for writing and sharing it.
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