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Reviews for In the Enemy's Fortress

By : Spamilla
  • From ANON - crisscross on January 18, 2008
    You know, I really liked this story. A lot. I'm not usually into Vlad/Danny pairing just because I've tried reading a few and they all turned out to be severly dissapointing. None of them just go tthe right tone for me, you know?
    But then I read your story, Spamila, and I throughly enjoyed it. Non-reluctance stories just are a huge 'yes' in my book but you have to do them right otherwise they end up cheesy and just with and over-all melodramatic effect. Especially with rape stories-WHOA. Weird.
    But you. This was fantastic. Not only was it descrptive, well writen, the dialogue was snappy and interesting and you even managed to squeeze some plot in there. This was just a WOW. You convey their emotions in a way that I feel could actually happen-in this scenario-then again, I've never BEEN in this scenario before but all the same I think it's a good read. There were a few conjugation errors-not a lot, really. But I'm a critiquing chick. I like to give some improvmetn-advice when I can and it was hard with this one. There were just a few parts where you switched tenses from 'were' to 'are' in accordance to your 3rd person.
    I thought this was excellently and professionally done. You should be proud and I hope you continue this, for I shall read it if you do.
    :)
    -keep writing, you obvioudly have a knack for it
    crisscross
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  • From alleycat88 on November 06, 2007
    awesome chap!!
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  • From Dhalim on September 27, 2007
    Good job at making the bad guy so evil (evil is only 'live' backwards after all xP ). I'm not sure if you are staying in character exactly, but the way the chars are acting is believable (^^; dont think i spelled that right and im too tired to check) so kudoes for you. Brownie points for actually having somewhat of a plot in there too- pointless smut is just annoying.

    Btw, i read in your mainpage that you like L/Raito pairings; i have one on my recomended reading list you might be interested in ^^
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  • From meteor7 on September 06, 2007
    I like your story!
    Look forward to Chapter 2!
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