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Reviews for Interregnum

By : RiekaDeVolka
  • From ANON - Mae on August 11, 2011
    I can't help thinking that this is more of a synopsis or pitch than an actual story. I'm not sure if the goal was to be artsy, but it comes off as painfully vague. With almost no details, the reader can't tell if Zuko is hanging from shackles against cold metal or if, for some reason, the man (who we know is Zhao though you never give us anything whatsoever to connect to him) likes lying on a cold slab of metal during sex...?

    I wish you weren't so timid about writing the bulk of the tale, because your style is good. You turn a tidy phrase, and don't abuse the language. However, you just hint around too much. We want to see the messy bits, not just the lyrical thread that lines them up and tries to tie them together. If you ever feel like writing this as a real story, complete with details, I would be interested to read it.
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