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Reviews for A night in Paris

By : JMunoz
  • From ANON - Lockheart on November 01, 2006
    I hope that you don't find this offensive but trying to read this story gave me a headache I made it past the first chapter bvefore I had to stop. I am not meaning to "flame" you I am just contributing some constructive criticism. You need to check your spelling and try to focus on one person's point of view long enough for your reders to get a feel for the story.
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  • From ANON - A rather repulsed reader on October 23, 2006
    Oh dear...I'm afraid I just may have to exercise my right of free speech with this one- I'm extremely sorry in advance for what I'm about to say, but this is awful. First of all, the combination of grammar errors, chatspeak, and P.O.V. changes make it nearly impossible to read. The language is unnecessarily vulgar and nearly everyone is hideously out-of-character. The OCs could be worse, but...yeah. This could use major work in so many ways.

    One more thing...cocaine is in absolutely NO way an aphrodesiac, nor does it make people suddenly feel "true love". If you had to resort to something as desperate as drugging for the sex to happen (since you couldn't manage it with any kind of decent plot), you could have at least used a more accurate type of drug.
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  • From ANON - Lil Shawdy on October 15, 2006
    Oh i hope it does UPDATE!!
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  • From ANON - Lil Shawdy on October 11, 2006
    dis is good u should really put da next chapter up soon..!!
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  • From JMunoz on October 11, 2006
    The couples will be decided later. I really promise to make this story really naughty.
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