Reviews for Lynn's Top ConcernBy : GoneWithTheWhim |
Just great. Linka participating too instead of keeping it full yaoi was a good decision.
I gotta say, this is one of the BEST Loud House stories I've read in quite a while. Great work =D
Oh man, this has been a treat!
I really enjoyed this story (as of chapter 4), mostly for the fact you managed to not only use the under developed genderbent versions of the characters so well, but the fact that you managed to implement the sex into the story as a plot point. Most of the time it's merely a romance story that shows us some steamy love making between the scenes, but here you managed to make it the focal point without it losing any characterization of the characters.
I must applaud you on the progression too. I'm glad I read it once chapter 4 was already done, because I think I'd be frustrated if I was waiting inbetween chapters before, but there's a lovely escalation to it all, from the first time with Lynn and Lars to Lynn becoming a bigger jerk as it goes on, and then to have you do such a good job with having Linka be the one to resolve it all. I find a lot of these stories just don't work as a conventional narrative because usually the big dicked character just fucks everyone and everyone submits. Really refreshing having him get a come uppance but enjoying it too. I'm assuming chapter 5 will have a sweet moment between Lars and Lynn, with Lars topping him once everything is forgiven.
I hope to see more work from you, really enjoying what I've read so far!
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