Reviews for Enter the SandboyBy : GeorgeGlass |
This is just fucking fantastic! The louds the way they really should be! Especially Lincoln and Rita! Love it!
So far i have came with every chapter 10/10
Good story, while I would have liked a few dozen more chapters I really enjoyed it.
Great scenes and story
I realize this is meant to be the final chapter but if you were to make a oneshot or even sequel (fingers crossed) Could you make it about one now normal day in the house where we see in detail how Lincoln "survives" his family? (maybe a difference between the weekend and a school day, or even a family trip?) Just a thought
Anyway good luck to you and your future stories
Please tell me you will make Enter the Sandboy 2
How appropriate that Lana should take it in The End for the final chapter. :)
The rain returning after Lincoln has some great guilt-free sex the first time was a nice metaphor too, not least of all for all the wetness in his future. The nicer mood in the morning bathroom line was a sweet touch as well. Nice to know Lola is ready to fully accept her royal scepter, and cool that Lucy would want to roleplay some long-suffering yet very loving wife for him. However the cutest bit of all was Lana's revelation that the intimacy was most-important to her. It makes for a very lovely high note to leave on; knowing that the Loud kids will be having plenty of sexy fun is great too. Now I just wonder if Lincoln will save that tidbit about Luan's collection to use when he needs an edge on her... or even suggest they go through it together.
BTW Knowing your love for Phineas and Ferb I had no doubt who the zebra was. Heh, the whole thing started with "hose" and "pipe" issues and that turns out to be the solution too.
Thanks for another fantastically fun and sexy tale.
Looks like thing are Cumming Full Circle!
What a bunch of freaky fun.
The pregnancy risk definitely ups the thrill, especially to the baser instincts.
It is weird, but I always feel like adding the father is a step too far, at least in these kind of harem-esque family stories, though in general daddy/daughter is good as a focus for other plots. Latent subconscious Oedipus issue of mine I guess.
Though I am curious just how many V-cards Lincoln claimed, since Lori got his. I have to imagine Lynn Sr. snagged a few? And now the race is on for Lucy, the Twins, and Lily (Lisa was as precocious as ever, lol).
This seems like a nice lead in for the karmakaze picture set where an older Lincoln is "servicing" all his siblings, and a few other girls, and Ronnie Ann asks how he is able to keep up. The last image is of Rita complaining that his stamina is too low if he can only last 10 rounds. What a slave driver!
Fairy-Slayer is right, Rita is a bad mom. A very naughty mommy, who needs some "punishment" in fact.
(And if we are lucky enough to get an Epilogue maybe some Father/Son bonding, just to cover all the bases, is in order? If lesbian play is fine then why not? After all, what's good for the goose is good for the gander!)
Ah, so the truth is that Rita and Lynn Sr. are super carriers of the freak gene, though now I must wonder if all of the kids really did inherit the trait or if the pair was just so horny that they had to get their kids into it too. Maybe that doesn't matter because everyone in the Loud House is happy now either way. Glad to hear that Dad gets to enjoy the family pastime... thought I kind-of expected that to be the reveal for the final chapter, so now I'm wondering what last trick you have up your sleeve.
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Oddly enough Rita's behavior in this chapter fits in very well with my personal (and apparently completely unique) opinion that Rita Loud is a bad mother, so she's more in-character here than most would think. After all, she got Lincoln all revved up to the point where no boy could stop before mentioning the possibility of pregnancy – which she didn't have to lay on him at all – just to amp up the wrongness of it all so she'd have a better orgasm.; Yet if she did get pregnant by him there's no need – or even easy way – for Lincoln to know it was his. That's too much to lay on a boy, never mind that if she didn't just let everyone, including all the kids, think it was Lynn Senior's then that's a terrible risk to the future of any such baby. (Of course she could actually just have been lying, but Lincoln will probably still have a panic attack or two once he has enough blood in his upper head to ponder the possibility.)
(…or maybe I'm just reading way too much into it. :) )
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Anyway, story-wise it's a lot more fun to know that it's a house full of horndogs where the fun will never stop. Heck, if anything, the final chapter will probably make it even more awesome. Thanks.
Lucy really needs to get her turn
(Chapter 8)
It was quite a surprise to see Lily getting in on the action so directly, perhaps proving the title of that infamous lemon fanfic... Great job describing how Lily treated her brother without using the word suckling and risking making it creepy ;) – yet still planting the idea that Rita is a bit of a freak too. Guess we know where the kids get it from. Also, revealing the flashback and Lily's offer of future relief was pretty funny too.*
Letting Luan's vulnerability show and play a bit, plus her resisting a joke at the end, was pretty touching (“Heh!”) and added some warmth to their forbidden incestuous liaison. Going monster-to-monster (“Talk about bumping nasties!”) was a cute way to offer a solution to Luan's hesitation. Despite being a straightforward chapter it still had all the charm and lust as the other chapters. Yet apparently there is a lot more to come than expected! Thanks for more sexy and very Loud fun.
* Though we're only taking Luan's word that she can understand Lily and didn't just train her with sweets and/or or a free pass on April Fools Day. (I'm guessing that was mentioned in an episode sometime after I stopped watching.)
(Chapter 7)
Heh, one has to wonder if you were influenced by those oh-so many (requested) pictures of Leni and Luna kissing Lincoln on the cheek from either side. Regardless, it's nice to know that even with the source of the nightmares identified that the fun will keep on happening. (Also have to love the idea that banging leads to… well, banging.) It'll be interesting to see what Luan is planning, though maybe Leni and Luna agreed to help speed up the jokester's turn precisely because they didn't want her coming up with anything special that would make Lincoln suffer.
Anyway, Leni is so cute with her sweet naïveté and cute way of finding a kind answer even when she doesn't understand, though the idea of her in a three-way with Luna and Lincoln then schlicking off to them going at it is pretty great too. That being said, Lincoln's little reactions to the idea that there's now a schedule and whatnot is fun too; and I was half-expecting his concerns about Rita to be answered with, “She gets every-other Sunday.”
Adding in a bit of a lesson about what Awake-Lincoln's problems were made for a nice transition as he figured out the right beats to make some beautiful music with Luna. (Besides, she's the most-likely to give it to him straight if it had been a lackluster performance, both because of her matter-of-fact style and the fact that she has more options.)
Of course, even if the pipes are no longer calling, there's still the issue of what created this Sex Monster embodiment of Lincoln's desires — and why Lincoln wants to give it credit for the lessons that Dream Jordan, Dream Ronnie Anne, and Dream Paige had been teaching him. (Yes, it's all Lincoln in reality... but if he ever has a personality-split like in Superman III then things could get real awkward real fast. :D ) It'll be fun to see what else is revealed as Lincoln "makes everything okay" for his remaining sister (or sisters?).
Thanks for another great chapter of how the Loud children are making the hot weather seem chill by comparison.
(Chapter 6)
First off, I'm very relieved that Clyde wasn't involved with the sexy part of the dreams, though I guess we don't know if the "monster" was just trying to get him out of the way or if it will want to experiment. (I guess you could say, “When it comes to Clyde it left itself an opening … or two!” LUAN! GET OUT OF MY COMMENT!)
On the other hand, it was nice to see Paige joining the dream team, and even more fun to have Lynn take on the real-life version. Kind of funny that Lincoln's fumbling in the morning was more from not having "the monster" to help him than any residual hesitance to commit incest... so much incest... Also it's great that Lynn was up for seconds since, with her enthusiasm, he'll have a chance to work on all his moves which he's only mastered subconsciously so far – and I'm guessing that will be pretty important for any other sisters besides Lisa who start making a habit out of their brother's cock. (Surely those facts are more clues too.)
Thanks yet again.
Really enjoying this fic. I look forward to more from you!
Chapter 5 - SPOILERS!
Much as I loved the wonderfully rough & needy sex between Lisa and Lincoln, this whole chapter seems kind of weird to me.
At times I had suspected that Lisa may be involved with the genesis of Lincoln's "problem," and a few things she mentioned could be evidence of that: She mentioned that she started making sex toys for herself about the time that all of this started: perhaps she was affected by the erotic noises but not by whatever is causing the initiating nightmares; but her comments suggest that she was preparing for sexual intercourse with Lincoln right from the start. More so, she seemed pretty pleased (even a bit blasé) to have released Lincoln's "sex monster" facet, without any need for suitable dream girls to get his motor running out of control.
Still, I'm sure that once the Freddie and Daphne rip off those Jordan and Ronnie Anne masks* Velma will explain it all perfectly. It just seems like a very hard shift from the usual pattern. There's still a hint of the hard physical torture having something to do with it… and with the weekend we'll see if that affects the cycle further.
Most of all, the hot action and sweet sexy preteen mystery is still very enjoyable. Lisa's asides about how often she hypnotizes him, "collecting samples," etc. all fit nicely too. Also cool to reinforce the idea that the nightmares are real and create a bit of clingy behavior in the first place. It makes for a very fun mystery along the way, especially since most of the clues involve hot sex scenes. So thanks for more sexy fun with the Loud kids.
* “Moonbeam and Eclipse!”
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