Reviews for Enter the SandboyBy : GeorgeGlass |
And then there were four with Lynn up next.
I was surprised at this chapter since I figured Lincoln would be to ashamed to ask Lisa for help and that she would pay him a night time visit too.
But I was really surprise with Lisa going all the way with Lincoln since I figured she would use other means to pleasure him since he was hypnotized and all. Still now I can't help but wonder if Lisa had something to do with the nightmares and her siblings taboo late night acts. Hell will she be the reason in the possible sequel of why girls outside the family will want a taste of Lincoln too? Will she try it first with her friend Darcy?
And will the twins and Lucy want to go all the way with Lincoln too since chances are they probably don't want to fall behind their little sister Lisa. And will this story end with a sibling sleep together in which Lisa hypnotizes Linc again and unleashes his inner sex monster?
You will be making love to Lucy that's what you're gonna be doing
So Lisa is next? Why does that make me think of another story?
I love how you had Lori act, reminds of the first Loud episode Left in the Dark, how she wanted to stay with Lincoln.
Though I can't help think that Lori or maybe Leni will end up lending Lincoln to their friends. That would be an interesting turn of events.
(Chapter 4: Literally Nothing Happened)
First off, how long will it take Lincoln to realize the sheer weirdness of Lori explaining – specifically by names – that all of his older sisters are using somewhat-foolproof birth control? It would have been one thing if Lori had mentioned that Rita (or Lynn Sr.) had pushed the option when each sister hit puberty, but this "just in case" almost seemed like Lori was giving him a checklist; better yet, by not mentioning the younger sisters at all she left good reason for Lincoln to keep being tense about his earlier sexual encounters.
Of course, things are so wonderfully weird for Lincoln already that what's a little foreshadowing going to hurt? :D Besides, he kept his promise to himself that none of his little sisters would be sleeping with him that night. He can be happy about that, right?
Anyway, it was a nice twist to see Lori going to Lincoln in her insecure moments, both for the sake of having someone who can comfort her and, well yes, for the sweet hot action. Lincoln's way of getting her to open up about her bad dream while maintaining her ego was pretty sweet too; I especially like how he had Lori "hold Bun-Bun for me.' The What Would Clyde Do Besides Bleed to Death? was pretty funny as well.
Now I can't help but wonder if the cruelly-physical day camp thing has some role in Lincoln's sudden popularity, though my instincts tell me that something is affecting his sisters as well, and since only some of them are involved in the torture camp that's likely not it. (If it turns out to be the grass then you can be damned sure I'll be re-seeding my lawn!) At least whatever it is also gives Lincoln some good dreams to get things started, and no surprise that he'd keep falling for Jordan's and Ronnie-Anne's "tricks" in that regard. Jordan's comment about Lincoln's lack of resistance seems like an important clue.
Awesomely powerful sex scene, not least of all for Lori clearly wanting it from the moment Lincoln realized it was her. It's still not 100% clear that the girls are the ones initiating the sexual activity, but it really does seem like they're setting him up each time. Again, it will be fun to discover the truth. (Just check Luan's tapes? ;) ) Kind of an important change that, this time, Lincoln can't deny that he wants to have sex with Lori again, regardless of the "wrongness" (never mind the shame & fear he's going to feel anyway). Also it's a bit sweet that he'd think of Bobby's feelings too, even in the moment of passion.
BTW, Phineas and Ferb wholeheartedly approve of your use of erg in a sexual context. (Like they'd every complain about your writing!)
Thanks for another fun chapter, and for hooking me even more.
(Chapter 3: It Came in the Night)
Well, at least two came in the night. Lucy was extra-cute as she feigned her own happy dream as an excuse to get off on her horny brother. And as sweet as she tries to be, the idea that each sister he gets hot & heavy with seems to tell another has got to be pretty horrifying to the boy; Now we'll have to see if Lucy repeats the pattern, and with whom. (Okay, I usually try to avoid looking at the hint but couldn't avoid it this time. :) ) It's also nice to see dream Ronnie Anne standing in for Lucy's more-assertive approach to the somnambulistic sexiness. Thanks.
Lincoln should have put it inside Lucy
Oh boy Lincoln feels like he is in the middle of a land mine field. And Lucy is really cute in a creepy way.
And Lori is next? Is she going to be the one that takes Lincoln's V card?
That said I'm wondering if all the Loud kids are perverts at this point considering their actions so far. It makes sense given that they probably inherited it from their parents. Also are the twins going to double team Lincoln later on?
(Chapter 2)
It's good that Lincoln finds it so easy to rationalize away his concerns, whether subconsciously or making himself believe he's doing it subconsciously. Now I have to wonder if Lana and Lola had similar subconscious machinations as well. Either way, it's going to be even more fun now that Lincoln knows that it's for real, even if Lola is quite happy with his nocturnal exploits. To be fair, considering the situation he found himself & Lola in after waking up makes it really hard… to blame him for giving in to temptation.
Even with the sexy fun I get the feeling that there's still more to this mystery: Lola's faceless soldiers could have a deeper meaning (even if Lana's fear was pretty direct), and I'm looking forward to seeing how Girl Jordan fits into Lincoln's problem… or vice versa, I suppose. :) Thanks for another fun one.
Hey George love your Loud House stories and can't wait for more. So nocturnal naughty dreams huh? yeah i can see that happening.
Any chance of Luna getting some time with Lincoln? At least Lucy and Lynn at the same time please? keep up the great work as always.
Oh boy Lincoln is going to be internally freaking out for the rest day isn't he?
So anyway what order are the sisters going to take their turns? And who will be the one to take their brother's first time? I'm dying to know.
Also I'm curious as to what other ideas for LH stories you might have in the works. If you're willing to share them.
(Chapter 1)
The story is off to a very fine start, with both the title and the coincidences whetting my intrigue about what may come (besides so many Loud children). Also, I really like how sweet Lincoln was to care for Lana first despite his exhaustion and… uhm, [i]needs[/i], which made even the tease of some sultry action more intense.
Now I was a bit surprised that it was such a short opening chapter, especially for you, yet it still sets up the scene fully and has me hooked. Thanks.
I really love where this is going what sister will Lincoln be making love to?
Love your work, have read everything you have up so far. Good start to what I am sure will be a good fic. Just wish there was a way to see when you update your other works without have to scroll through them all.
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