Reviews for Sweet Dreams, Lana LoudBy : TheEvilFaery |
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This is a wonderfully fun yet surprisingly touching bit of sisterly bonding, though definitely a fantastically wild ride. I'm so lucky I was able to do the proofreading and enjoy all of the little things along the way as well. Great opening with the nightmare, which definitely had me feeling bad for Lana even before knowing the heartbreaking truth about what she'd dreamed that terrified her so much. Lori's way of getting it out of her and reassuring her was wonderfully sweet. Meanwhile, the commentary from the other siblings was a nice bit of fun, especially Luan's need to make light of the situation no matter what; Lisa's "see me tomorrow" about Lucy's comment cracked me up.
Of course, when Lana asked about doing "the thing" it was a nice snappy transition, very child like, into the sexy part of the evening. Lori's inner conflict about it and her realization of what "allowing Lana" to do all that really said about her was beautiful. Much as we learned about Lana, Lori had a lot going on inside too and you gave a brilliant peek into her psyche.
Sexy bits were pretty wonderful, and the gap thing was a great little bit of too-much fun. I'm so glad Lori finally realized that this was all a good thing, and from the orgasm she gave Lana I'm sure the little mechanic is even happier.
Thanks for sharing the sexy sisterly fun. (…and sorry for the long delay on posting here too.)
Nice. I enjoy incest stories in which sibling-love is expressed sexually, and this is a great example of that. Particuarly hot was Lori pretending to be asleep while Lana feels her up, growing bolder and bolder until Lori gives the game away. And I totally bought Lana wanting to eat Lori out. Character voices and behavior were on target, too, which is key, IMO. Nicely done.
Nice! Would very much like to see another chapter.
Been inactive for a long time, finding that you're on my top writers list.
great story
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