Reviews for Mother Knows BestBy : sandman-nobody |
Well i did not expect for this to turn dark, both from Kim's and Ann's sides, gotta feel kinda bad for Ron, caught between frying pan and fire and having all his feelings dashed away like that. Maybe it would be best to just give Kim what she wants, and after she realizes how different things are in the 'adult' world, show her what she threw away, possibly after Yori already 'mended' Ron's wounds.
Chap 4, very nice, sexy. I can't wait for Anne to go farther. Kim needs a deep and thorough exam.
Chapter 3.
Hmm... I think the hardest thing I have to do when wrapping my head around this is Ann. This is such an extreme departure from her usual character. I don't hate the premise of this story. And I don't dislike Ann's character. It is just jarring. I think if you had just passe into the premise just a little bit, or maybe give Ann a moment of second thought and confliction it would be less jarring. Because right now, Ann is a psychopath.
All in all though I guess once you've gotten this far in the story, you can honestly just get over how fast she made the decision that lead to this story.
Great chapter, though I noticed a few spring and grammatical errors, but I don't recall where. It must've just been one or two.
Loved it especially when Kim swallowed her food unknowingly with Ron cum on it but moaned from the new enjoyable taste right in front of him, that would make any guy hard. Could that happen again or while Kim sleeps Ron gives Kim a mouth full of cum while she sleeps and Kim wakes up with the same delightful taste in her mouth, finally will there be any BDSM, idea example Kim blindfolded handcuffed and her body tied up in rope, while Kim is asleep through the whole thing her mind, body and heart is being subconsciously trained to belong to Ron as his submissive. From his voice, touch and what he does to her body with BDSM, to obey his commands whatever it is regardless how humiliating it is. This could be what Ron wants to make happen as the sight of Kim this way truly submissivley helpless despite being asleep is very hot making Ron want to claim Kim as his and do the things to her just as he recently fantazised by looking at her like this all the more.
If this idea goes with your story please use it please
Chap 3, disappointed about Ron being the guy, but ah well. Looking forward to more of Kim being bred and hopefully some Anne/Kim fun.
Hey Sandstorm you know me, I thoroughly enjoy your stories. Now I've only just read the first chapter, I feel like I'll be leaving a review for each chapter since it'll be a short run. Man oh man, I've got to say, at first I couldn't figure out which premise was darker and evil this story or 'Ron's Toys'. But you know? I've got to say this starts out way darker and evil. It's a conscious decision to commit evil. Not saying I don't enjoy it, but man, I almost couldn't commit to the story. Only because it took me a moment to wrap my head around how and why someone would choose to do this act. But hey, I'll keep reading to see where this goes.
Chap 2 was very sexy, good job. My personal preference would be to have futa-Anne or futa-Bonnie impregnate Kim (we have super science after all). But at least I hope it won't be Ron (he is waay too passive). Either way hoping for some mother/daughter action.
Haha, sorry about the reviews. English isn't my first language and it was my first review so I tried to write a good review and thought you wouldn't notice. Excellent work on another chapter although I found this chapter a bit hard to read since I felt second hand embarrassment for Kim. Loved the second part of the story though of Kim pleasuring herself on the bed.
I read your other works while waiting for this chapter and enjoyed them too. Keep up the good work.
When Kim finds out what her mom did Kim will want revenge but hopefully Kim will realize thinking about GJ see what her mom meant by not having time to have a family of her own if she joins then runs GJ although that doesn't excuse what Kim been through while on the fertile pills, so I think the director could say to Kim when talking to her through the communicator that if Kim ever wanted to start a family the director could come up with a plan that would help Kim run GJ and have a family, if Kim hears that then later finds out what her mom did after the argument and told her mom what the director said they would work a plan that benifit both, so realizing Ann was wrong to do this in the first place told Kim she was sorry but was looking out for her. Kim on the other hand still wants revenge telling her mom that she'll only forgive her if she will do anything Kim wants by being her submissive and Kim the Dominant for as long as Kim wants until Ann learns her lesson
Created an account just to say that I loved Ron's Toys and excited to see you write (or wrote already) another KP fanfic. The first chapter is perfect and can't wait for more although the wait is going to be excruciating like waiting for Ron's Toys chapters. Still I know you're going to deliver.
My hope is that Ron is going to be one to impregnate Kim since I love them together. Excited to find out in future chapters.
Good start, looking forward to more
Any plans on further updates to Ron's toys?
Hey Sandstorm I like where this chapter points to. Of course I will have to read more before I give a firm review (chuckle). I look forward to the next update. Of this and Ron's Toys. Good to see you posting!
Unusual premise and motivation, looks like it is going to be a real fun (well... maybe not so much for Kim). Hope to see more kinks introduced (sex toys, bondage?)
can't wait for more
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