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This is a nice little one shot. It’s clear to me now, how after reading and seeing the similarities and differences between this story and Make It Wit Chu, just how much I like your writing style, and what’s so good about it. You have the ability to ramble on into paragraphs of deep, thorough mental contemplation filled with intricate details, that never bore me. As long as your descriptions can be, I’m completely enticed.

I thought Lynn Sr. drunkenly “teasing” Lincoln at the party was very funny. Lincoln’s inner monologues were very realistic (yet another thing you do incredibly well), and I feel they suited the scenario very well.

I loved the taunting Becky put Lincoln through. The playfulness, and more importantly the strange shroud of innocence of the situation was an interesting aspect, and done well. It was a long and grueling journey he went on, experiencing a vast variety of new emotions.

I have to be honest, the more I read the less I could tell how far you would take it. I thought at any moment Becky would spring up and end the teasing, or Lincoln would premtivelh bust a nut ruining the situation, or one of the sister would walk in. I was oddly pleased when she did decided to actually have sex with him. The ending had me laughing. Lori’s “He’s mine,” was unexpected, but I should have known better. I loved it.

Story overall. Left me wanting to know how Lincoln’s attitude would change, if it would at all. Would his sisters find out? Luan probably would, and Lisa. How would they react? I like it being open ended.

I really loved this fic. Compared to Chu, it doesnt falls in something that leave you with your stomach churning. Like Chu, it is very well written and you take your time exploring the background to make a very cool story. It is so explicit and cool...... I dont know if you will accept a request (or even if you will read this review). Could you make a sequel of sorts with Lincoln having a foursome with Becky (or Dana from Cheater by the Dozen. I mentioned Becky because I wanted it to have some sort of continuity with the other story), Carol Pingrey and  Ms. DiMartino (with tanlines)?

Again thanks for creating a good fic. 

*Spoilers ahead*

Nice to see something different from you. Although there are certainly some similarities to "Make It Wit Chu" (chiefly the older girl/younger boy femdom angle), this story is rather more upbeat. I like the pacing; the progression to more intense sexual activities is very smooth. And I thought Lincoln's reactions were very realistic throughout, including the moment when he finally lets loose and starts fucking Becky back.

One thing I would have liked is some hint as to why Becky, who is presumably Lori's age, is interested in getting it on with an eleven-year-old. After all, most teenage girls are interested in older guys, not younger ones. Is Becky a budding pedo, or does she just like having a boy she can control?

In any case, I enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.

Another fantastic story, love the 'he's mine' at the end. You rock, keep up the great work.

I wonder if Lynn Sr. will remember the "advice" he gave when he finds out Lincoln has been molested lol. Another great fic, I must admit when I saw this I was afraid it would come with a note saying you were done with "Make it Witchu" but my fears were unfounded. Take your time with chapter five, if you want to wait until its absolutely the way you want it I won't complain.

great story