Good introspective chapter. 

I am glad that you are not planning on having Ron be perfect. That is boring and unrealistic. My concern was that you seemed to be giving Ron and Kim the exact same flaws. You seemed to be having them both do the exact same thing. It was like they weren't two unique individuals as much as they were two porn archetypes.

Your story has done a very good job with Kim now. Kim has sometimes been a take charge type who charges in without thinking and takes Ron for granted when she wants something. This story reflects that. 

Ron has been lazy at times and doesn't pay attention to what is important. However, for this story the most important trait will be his confidence problems. He has never felt good enough for Kim and has often thought she would leave him when something better came along.

Anyways, what I am trying to say is good job and I like your plan to have a flawed Ron, but make sure you make Ron unique

Good luck. 

You mean it's finished? It doesnt feel finished

Loved this chapter. This is really starting to feel like a real story with real characters. I look forward to seeing where you go with it.

Again, good job. 

Loved the new chapter, can't wait to see what will happen next.

I really liked this last chapter. It did a lot to humanize Kim's character and setup the next stage of the story. 

If I can make another suggestion, I would recommend that Kim pick something (the most obvious being anal since she has already done practically everything else) that she will decide, completely on her own, that will be for Ron only. 

I suggest this for a few reasons.

First, it is fine and dandy to have Kim say she isn't a slut, but you need to start writing her as not acting like one. And that means that she stops letting her libido rule her. So far in this story Kim has been ruled by her libido and that led her to cheat on Ron and not set any ground rules with the guys. She needs to consciously choose to limit what she will do and what she will let the guys do to her, then once those rules are set she can let herself go wild. (This presupposes that she can trust her partners to respect her wishes, but that probably needs to be ignored for right now or the whole shebang is off.)

Second, this will be her way of showing Ron that she still loves, wants, and needs him. At this point Ron is likely wondering about his place with Kim. And I think she needs to realize it. (Perhaps have one of the guys talk about how he felt these things when a wife or girlfriend cheated on him.) What was so special about these guys that she decided to cheat on him? Are they bigger than him, better than him? Why didn't she want him to be part of it? Why would she even want to stay with Ron? Is there anything that just they share anymore? And this can be something that Kim will decide will be special between just them. A part of her that only Ron can have.

Third, it provides more story material. I am sure that Kim will at some point want to be double penetrated, but for that to happen she will have to have another gangbang with Ron there. So, it is a perfect setup for another Kim gangbang story.

In closing, I am liking the way that this story is developing. Keep up the good work and expanding the characterization. 

Another way Kim could apologise to Ron is to be strapped naked to a chair as she could only watch as Ron had his gang bang in front of her with the girls kim was going to convince to have sex with Ron as an apology moan in pleasure, I also wonder if even though Kim's brain said to go back to Ron and to apologise further for what happened, but would Kim's body let her go back to just being with Ron after Kim had a combination of having a fantasy she had for so long to actually become a reality, the so many orgasms in so little time with such handsome guys with big dicks that she could imagine herself on her knees with a dick in her ass and pussy while giving the other two a rotating blowjob. Since Kim can now have sex with the guys but not while she feels mentally hurt for what she did to Ron so she could ask the guys to drown her body in so much pleasure that she won't remember hearing a voice in her head saying "stop" and "Ron". Which ever way you plan on going with the story and with the end I know I'll enjoy it.

The more that I thought about it the more that I really hope you will make this more of an erotic story than porn without plot.

You start this story with a dialogue on the societal restrictions of sexual desires. It would be great if you didn't feed those restrictions. Show that just because Kim desires to be gangbanged doesn't mean that she is an immoral slut.

Do you want to know what made me create an account just to comment on this story? Your comment that you would address Kim's cheating. It humanized this story in a way that is exceedingly rare on this site, and for this type of story. It reminded me of Zaratan's "Long Night Home". Which is an exceptionally well done erotic story that dealings with alternate life styles as well as anything I have ever seen in an erotic story.

So, while I don't want to tell you what to do. I would find it incredibly sad if this story fell into the same trap that too many do. 

Don't just make it about Kim and Ton having a ton of deviant sex. Make it about the journey of the couple through the fulfillment of their fantasies. Include the doubt and the guilt. Include the realism of sex, which I also loved about this story. A girl is going to be extremely sore afterwards.

The erotic elements are great, but they can be more powerful if they are performed by real, developed characters instead of porn fantasy holders of genitals. 

This story has been interesting. 

However, I really hope that you change your mind about having Ron use his "Card" now. The scenario that you had Kim planning sounds great, and I have to say that the guilt that Kim feels is actually a lot refreshing to see. It makes the story just a bit more realistic and intense.

What would be awesome would be for Ron to be pissed about it afterwards. Sure, they had a Get Out of Jail Free Card, but Ron figured it would be discussed before or that he would at least be involved. Also, it was a Card , as in singular, and Kim is going to cheat how many times? I am not sure Ron will see several continuous days at multiple times a day as a singular use.

If Ron does the same thing as Kim then I just see too much great story potential being wasted.

And god forbid she does anything with these men that she won't do with Ron. In some ways I hope that she doesn't do anal with these guys because she hasn't with Ron yet. Again, it makes for a better story where Kim might have these other sexual appetites, but that doesn't mean she is a complete slut.

I guess it comes down to what sort of story you want. If you want an erotic story I think you need to practice some restraint and patience. It will give you more material in the long run. If you just want PWP, which I don't believe since you actually cared enough about the character to have her feel guilty about cheating on Ron, then do whatever.

Anyways, keep up the good work. 

Hmm, it makes me wonder: what if she had rape fantasies?

I think you're doing great, maybe after another shower Kim looks through what the guys have for medicine to help her ease or get rid of her full body soreness so when the guys want another gang bang she'll be ready and know what medicine to use to ease her recovery for the second technically third round.

Well they both did have fantasies of being in a gang bang with only the opposite of their gender, I can imagine the village where Ron is are all girls with bodies exactly like Kim and are the same age. (Just so he doesn't get in trouble with the police if there are any in the story, if not then some can be a year to three years younger if that's ok). I'm looking forward to who gets Kim first maybe the guy who found her because after all first come first serve.

i think i remember this story, and it was quite hot, the only thing bothering me is how quickly she dismissed Ron and cheated on him with multiple guys.

Looks like Kim is gonna be the entertainment until the weather calms down but until then she can't leave and when the weather does die down maybe by then she'll have a fucked silly face (eye's rolled up, mouth open and tongue out) and be so high on having sex with the four guys and making home movies with them that Kim forgot about Ron and her life before back home just after the shack door closed.

Hope you like my ideas enough to use them or the one's you like.

Will there be a video camera involved and pulled out when Kim is at her peak of pleasure in the gang bang? then when Kim see's the video camera she doesn't care at that point because she feels to good to stop now plus she is even more turned on with the video camera capturing her in gang bang heaven?