Reviews for Sense of SemblanceBy : sandman-nobody |
Left my main review on the other site, but I just wanted to say I think you picked a good moral line for Jaune here in terms of how far you go. Looking forward to the next chapter and Pyrrha's reaction to his Semblance.
He is actually making a plan; that is certainly news, I am really interested in the development with Yang and if Blake gets involved. Maybe Jaune will discover whatever Blake is interested in her books when she is reading them. He could potentially do some work with her and she could coincidentally be thinking of him when his semblance is over. I hope a scene like that comes or something else soon.
Another great chapter; I can't wait for the next one!
I'm kinda surprised that people were concerned about Jaune raping any of the girls in this story. They must not have read your other stories, cause in at least three of them there is a scene with non-con sex. Granted, 'Call Me Doctor' got pretty dark when you went to Max's PV. I'm not sure if I'd want to read from the PV of the girls in RWBY if you did the same here. The way you handled it in 'Ron's Toys' was pretty kinky though, with little in the way of consequences. I wouldn't mind seeing similar in this story.
This is gonna be good :)
Good transitioning chapter between the start and the next planed time stop. You gave a good indication of the main girls' interest in him along with hints of setups for future chapters. Looking forward to what you do with it.
And as an extra aside, I'm personally hoping it's Pyrrha he first opens up to about his Semblance and what he's doing. Out of anyone, I'd imagine she'd be the most understanding, for obvious reason. That and I think she'd gently encourage him to tell the others. But that might just be my personal biases of the character.
Anyway, keep up the good work!
That was great! I can't wait to see more!
Definitely your best work with time-stop so far. I joined this site specifically to review this story- great read! Eagerly awaiting more naughtiness!
Great Story i can't wait to read more :)
That was really good. I think, of all the stories you're writing, this is now my favorite. I can't wait for more.
Nice new story.
Hell to the yes, this looks like its going to be fun! So what exactly are the after affects of Juane's aura considering the affect it had on Yang, it seemed to leave her more susceptible to his presense. Am i close?
Created an account so I can review this. I've been a big fan of your Ron's Toys fic and throughly enjoyed this one. Glad to hear this'll be a more fun time than dark. Jaune doesn't seem like the type to go asshole, at any rate. Hope you keep this one going, I really enjoy it so far!
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